Impressions
Gee, this is great with the picture of the "dead corpse" I imagined seeking out another to become one with in death. Rotting, stench the follows, the delight in being undead, but also the lonelness endured.
I honestly see no errors, nice editing.
Likes
This line partically struck me it all it dark glory. Dark and musty,
stale with decay, this is the life I am living each day. Nice, descrbing death as being alive.
You use some opposites in this poem, and presented it well. Thanks for sharing!!
Wow Sherri, such feeling. This is terribly tragic and so often terribly true. A young child being kidnapped and abused. The feelings experienced would be overwhelmimg.
Final Thought
You bring such feeling to this poem that I was visabilty moved, gee so sad. You have no errors, and presented it it well. Thanks.
Warm Regards, staine.
This is your seventh review for the hummingbird's Auction.
"POEMS OF ABUSE" A small collection of emotions that often shouldn't surface, wonderful.
Impression
This deserves it's rating for it brings to light often what is hidden in the shadows. You offer support and awareness in this folder and that takes strength.
You have this small folder organized, with no errors that I could see. This is a great addition to all the other folders out there because I feel abuse if often ingored and not spoke of, the then the circle begins. Perhaps the light will shine and the circle broken for abuse should never happen.
Thanks for creating this Sherri.
((hugs))staine,
This is your sixth review for the Hummingbird's Auction, sweetie.
"HE CALLED ME FRIEND" This is very good Sherri in leaving the reader to their own thoughts. You can see so much in this poem and as always you feelings portrayed run clear.
I see no errors, you are a great editor. I enjoyed the poem in it's abilty to get the reader asking questions.
"Gee why friend?" an affair?
"Perhaps not intended?"
"What would she have been thinking at that moment to hear her lover at death say friend. Hate? pity? sadness?loneliness? I could on and on. So many things are glimpsed in this poem, well done.
This my friend is your fifth review for the Hummingbird's auction. Thanks for sharing with me.
Wow Sherri, again you are able to intrique the reader. This is soo festive and colorful not only in it's presentation but in the "mood" this parody kindles. It's xmas for sure. I think you did a wonderful job, and edited it well. Full five, this is darling.
This is your fourth review for the Hummingbird;s Auction, my friend. Thanks again for sharing.
This is again a very touching poem about the love for your mother and how your coping, enduring,love, loss, and memoories are felt and expressed so clearly in this well written poem.
Suggestion and/or errors.
You edited it great and I see no errors Sherri but I do have a suggestion. Perhaps considering stnaza would make the poem easier to read and add a little to it.
Thanks for sharing my friend. I adore you port, such variety!
This is very straight forward and wriiten in the eyes of night if it was a person. Different I will admit.
Spelling/Grammar.
Honestly Sherri, I see no errors.
Suggestions.
I'm not sure if there was restrictions in length for the contest but to me the poem seemed a little off. I really can't place it either. This seemed to lack the emotions and depth you other writings have, and I miss those qualities than you so positively express.
Final Thought(s)/Feeling(s).
I enjoyed this poem in its unusualness, Thanks for sharing my friend.
Wow. You are able to drawn the reader in with interest and then wrap them up in a emotional poem about a love in your live. A wonderful person too from what you poem expressed, ahh love the wonders.
Suggestions and/or errors.
I feel you express your feelings very well in this poem and your use of mechanics gave this poem the quailty in the dept of what you feel in all it;s warm and fuzzy glow. I see no major errors, you edited well. Nice! Although perhaps this line Your words touch my very soul. in context with the following stanze seems awkward to me. You countinue the following stanza with I hear your voice and when read in it's whole intent it seemed to be to be like to were repeating the feeling, it kinda threw the poem off. The rest of it is great with unigue feelings and portrays from stanza to stanza. The feelings of melting when he holds you, awww you passion, the fire he lights up inside you. Very romantic.
Final Thoughts.
This is a classic heart melter poem for all the romantics and even those who dream of love here on wdc. You expressed your feelings and dreams in clear and strong images. Nice.
This is your first review for "Invalid Item" that you so deeply deserve.
Full Five and now to why,
The emotions in the poem are expressed without wallls. You share your sadness and confusion about you dear mother's passing, my heart goes out to you, with all the feelings clearly felt and shared. It was very strong and heartfelt for you to share such tragic a moment and feelings with everyone and to pout yourself out on a limb might I say deserves full marks, for one cannot make a mistake in their feelings and how they express them.
There are no grammer errors that I can see and you presented this piece well with the choice of pink and the large print. It brought me a few tears and deeply saddening. I wish you all the best, and again thanks for sharing.
I am delighted you like this sig, when I saw it I so thought of you. It seemed to suit so, cause you seem to me to be a easy going, lets have fun kinda person. I am delighted that you actually put it in your port. . This really made my day.
I am proud of Kiya images, she does such quality, and always adds the little touch needed to make them own own. ((hugs)) Ann.
This is adorable!! The red and the darling smile apon the darling cute snowman. It honestly warmed my heart, it's that sweet looking. Kelly is awesome in her images and this is proof among many. I look forward to when the holidays are here from this darling sig.
This is nice, Dragonblue always put such unique borders around her images, which in turn gives them the wonderful charm and character her sigs and banners are known for.
Very kind of her to gift you with one, and a very unique image.
This is very vivid in all the images you describe with the rain and the thoughts of the person you love and miss. A both sad and warming poem to me, 'cause you are able to express feelings of sadness, loneliness, and happiness and affection. A true to the heart type poem where one bares all their feelings and desires about another.
Suggestion(s) and/or Error(s).
Humm, I found the ending a liitle off compared to the rest of the piece. There's some times where it's unclear if hse dreaming of rain or it actually is. You description is intense until the ending.
I see no grammerical errors, nice editing.
Final Thoughts.
You are able to express a lot in your detail and perception of the rain. Watching the rain brought lots of memories to the person of the poem, some happy and some sad. I enjoyed it, thanks you for sharing.
Impressions. Hello again. Good work on this poem also. I loved the mood and the heartfelt thought put into this poem. It's clear it came from the heart. The love for a friend is strong and that really brings the reader in. Good work with the imagery also. "heart of gold" is nice as is "Raven's heart bleeds".
Suggestions and/or Errors. I found no errors as far as grammar and spelling but I did find the flow was a bit off in this. For example you start off line one with a certain rhythm and then that changes in the second line. I feel the second line is a bit too long and throws the reader off a bit. Maybe try to cut out a word or two in there.
And then the fourth line, "I’m honored to know that she’s my friend" seems a bit too short and throws the rhythm off a bit also. Maybe try and extend it a bit.
As far as the flow for the rest, I feel it is pretty well done. It's pretty well just the first stanza that is a bit off. However I do feel there is a comma needed here: Raven’s song will live on long after me after "on".
Final Thought(s)I thought this poem was pretty well done. The last line is great and impacts the reader a great deal. Just the first stanza might need bit of fixing as far as the flow. Other than that, great work.
Impressions.
I thought this piece was very well done. My favorite thing about it was the flow. Those words, " Dare I Trust You?" and how you repeated them at the last line of each stanza really makes an impact on the reader and gives the poem a great flow. I loved the first line Why do I feel like a pawn in some sort of game,. Thought you started it off very well and the last line and how well it melded together with the rest of the poem was really great.
Suggestions and/or Errors.
I saw no errors in this poem. Great work with the grammar and spelling.
Final Thought(s)
Great work! You drew me in to the poem and the insecurities of the person within this poem were showed strongly. The continuation of questions and the consistant rhyming pattern played a great role in this. Well done!
First, let me congrulate you on your second place in Lexi's contest. You go girl! On to the review.
very sad poem about your feelings about a loved person, and the illusion that you had, and how you allowed that allusion to change yourself in ways. The imagery is darlin, I could feel the breeze with you, and relate to what you intended.
No spelling errors although, perhaps you could open the poem with some mention of the tears you shed throughout the poem but if this is a poetry form I see. Thanks for sharing and please note this review are only my feelings and suggestions for your work, no bad vibes were or are intended. Thanks for sharing, and keep writing.
I can honestly say you write wonderful poem with such small poetry forms. You portray alot and then allow the reader you imagine their own. Well done.
This poem, in its simplicity made me my love for my youngest for often I do feel as if I'm soaring above the clouds but at the same time held down tighty by my love for him and all my children, just I'm partical to his age.
You expressed the feeling of love in all its goodness in clarity and plainess. Thanks. I enjoyed it.
Wow! I like this alot, so much in so little of a poem. You suck the reader it for a quick ride with a sudden stop. I imagined lots with this tiny poetry form, and you did a wonderful job.
No errors of any kind, great simple presentation, and ended with an "oh my". Wow, full five. I liked it. Kinda romantic is a sick twisted way, right up my alley.
This small poem imply alot to me, and I thought of things that you might or might not intended with this piece.
Spelling/Grammer.
I see no errors that fall into mthis heading, way to go.
Suggestions.
Well, I'm not sure if this is a poetry form but it seems to be me, but the last two lines kinda don't sound right to me,you wrote: With lifted heart All disappear. I can't quite place it but perhaps an "a" inserted might make it flow better, but like I said the poetry form might not allow that.
Final Thought(s)/Feeling(s).
I liked this for what it implys and how you left enough to the reader to be carried off by their own impressions about the poem. The ease you related silk to a feeling and emotions was very clear. Thanks for sharing.
I delightful poem about your spirited daughter wanting some gum, not understanding what exactly it is in account her age. I found it kinda funny, I could picture you daughter expressing her thoughts about your decision in all her glory and some moments of my own when my boys decided the same.
Nice presentation and no errors that I can find.
This review is not part of the judging process,and I will be re- viewing all entries with my fellow judge trose for final judging. Thank you.
A heartfelt moment you shared about your daughter's birth and your thoughts and feelings as her father , a view I myself as a mother doesn't get shared with me too often. It was very warming and you laid your feelings, questions and fears out clearly, wow, I enjoyed it.
I tried to see some spelling or other errors and found none, and withe the word count I burdened entries with you did well describing this once in a lifetime moment in all it happiness and "good" fear.
Final Thought(s)
Life is wonderful with children and the bond we recieve with parenting. You showed be a warming moment in your eyes and I thanks you for sharing.
This review is not part of the judging process,and I will be re- viewing all entries with my fellow judge trose for final judging. Thank you.
A deep poem about a mother'd day gift, fuzzy dice, and I'm impressed by how you portrayed the dice symbolizing them to so many other things,like I said deep.
I liked how you intertwined the last line last in each stanza, and I will admit I did find your symbolism to god and some feelings you have was very clear.
I see no spelling errors, and you presented it well.
This review is not part of the judging process,and I will be re- viewing all entries with my fellow judge trose for final judging. Thank you.
Very well told, the events of an ordinary morning getting ready for work and your son off to school with not such an ordinary comment from your boy. He indeed must be very talkive lad.
Final Thought(s)
I see no spelling errors and your presented it very well. I could picture your son's rush and imagine the look on your face woith that darling comment he dropped on your lap. Thanks for sharing.
This review is not part of the judging process,and I will be re- viewing all entries with my fellow judge trose for final judging. Thank you.
A personal poem about how you adore the night, what things that draw you to it, and the memories being out at night give you. different, I enjoyed it.
Again no errors, your good!
Final Thought(s):
I liked your thoughts on night and this poem kinda warmed me to my own thoughts of night although they would be very different from your happy outlook at the night.
Warm regards, Kra. Thanks for sharing!
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you passion, the fire he lights up inside you. Very romantic.
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