Hello, Schnujo Enjoyed Colombia ![](https://images.Writing.Com/imgs/writing.com/writers/costumicons/ps-icon-salute-60.gif) . This is a review from "WdC SuperPower Reviewers Group" ! I received "I'm a Benevolent Ruler" via the random 'read & review' button. I have the following comments to offer.
Reader Experience
Schnujo is apparently the ruler of the world with a long, detailed, and benevolent action plan to transform all our lives. This extends to the colors of our clothes, pets, dating, clean rooms, healthy food (no sugar!), the balance between honesty and affirming lies, limits on TV time, green policies, central heating and airconditioning, books, computers, dealing with the nasty, water management, life - technology balance, compulsory smiling, ending crime, mutual understanding, housing, and all churches must have steeples.
Commentary
This was an amusing read though I am not sure what life under Schnujo would be like. There is a lot of micromanagement going on here and you might provoke a global American revolution in the name of freedom were you to be the bossy boss of all bosses like this. Also, you were a little unclear on where your godlike powers came from and how you planned to deal with the nasty people.
This account was a slightly more enlightened manifesto than Kim Jung un in North Korea. At least you planned on feeding your people and allowing them to move around. But the laughing and joy because you say so sounded similar to the situation in that last communist bastion.
I was trying to work out your political agenda from your wish list and it seems green, a little Taliban on the Judge Dredd execution style of criminals, there was no mention of how you planned to run the economy which made me wonder how you would pay for all your plans, the work-life balance, egalitarianism, and healthy living themes were left of the center focuses. You discussed no military options here, mean people just seemed to automatically desist at your command ( so a little autocratic). There was no discussion on the basis of your right to rule beyond the statement my agenda must happen (so some kind of conception of Divine Right perhaps). You seemed to believe that the state had extensive rights to mold the culture and insist on certain personal behavior patterns e.g clean bedrooms. This would require cameras on every street corner, indeed mobile surveillance drones and sounded all very 1984 (Big Sister).
I would predict your global takeover manifesto would bankrupt the world in a few months, would lead to multiple armed insurrections, and would not be a sustainable plan. This despite the fact that there was a lot of good stuff in there.
Mechanical issues
Yes, comma issues and some awkward phrases: We shall all eat healthy = We shall all eat healthily.
But was more focused on the content.
Thanks for sharing.
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