well done and thanks for the explanation.
Is the first verse relating to the judgement day or every day?
Great encouragement to stay with what is right. Mental words... Sometimes felt in the gut. Great words of wisdom. Getting to know if they are from the Lord or not. thanks for sharing.
I am impressed. Sometimes it does take generations to correct the path the world is on. It would have been a tad easier to read if there had been a gap between the verses. The repetitious 'today and tomorrow' helped me to find the breaks.
It was good to show the passing of time and how the next generation has to take on the burden.Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
I love Philippine food! I used to have a Philippine friend. I loved being invited over for dinner.
Being English is your second language, there are several mistakes but I'm not going to critique that.
Do you know the difference between 'show not tell'? When you give dialogue you are showing. That is good. This is a wonderful story you are telling. Bring me in closer with a bit more scenery, more talking. Let me get to know your family and friends.
This was a wonderful story. Just so you know, I was also a singer, probably not as good as you. I sang in country western bands, in the National Guard I was a singer after hours, and I sang alto in a Russian Opera concert in New York city. God did bless me for putting Family first. He will bless you too.
Love, LinnAnn
This was a very inspiring poem. I liked the different levels/ ages you put in. Each one is spot on, and he has wisdom in noticing his blessings.
The rhyming and meter are great. It flowed very well.
I love the last verse and the 'yet still'. It's very empathetic.
Thanks so much for the link.
love, LinnAnn
There are several types of Haiku and I could not remember if this was one or not. sorry, but it is pretty good.
It does ask a great question. lol When you have a dream romance, do you sometimes feel it might be a real person you just haven't met yet?
Thanks for sharing.
Love, LinnAnn
You painted a warm, cozy picture. I love how you worked in the kiss. good for you!
toffee huh? In this house it's chocolate and chips. Eugene loves both. Is it toffee as a drink or passed back and forth while you drink coffee or cocoa.
love the nights of man made lights. I love driving past houses with lights.
I don't remember nights starting to get longer at Christmas. but the Pope declared the holiday at the time the pagans were partying big. trying to get the church goers back from the pagans. so it would be the turning point.
I love the last line. Thank you so much for that line. I have a special bible that also has explainations for things, like languages and customs. love learning.
Thanks for sharing this with us. love it.
Love, LinnAnn
Very nicely done.
I have known the cruel beast and you describe him and the situation very well.
I was very impressed with the way you rhymed the last two lines in the second verse. Well done! That takes talent.
You summed it up very well in the last verse. Again, quite well done. It broke my heart just reading it. Thanks so much for sharing and providing the link.
love, LinnAnn
I love all of these trinkets and I love that you so freely share them. There was the santa one that said it couldn't be collected there. How do we collect it? I thought it was cute and so old fashioned.
You have a wonderful sharing spirit. God bless you for being so kind and inventive.
love, LinnAnn
Okay, you got me on that one. I thought the person yelling Becca was her boss, and he was spitting mad. Just cracked me up. No brains is a big problem...how will she run a household, care for kids etc. Mom will have a coniption fit. lol Mom won't be able to teach her much, busting a gut here. Thqanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnnf
I had trouble finding the rhyming pattern. The way it was set up, didn't look like free verse. Just my own thoughts...no one made you as you are. You forged yourself out of all that has happened to you. Not sure if you are a Christian, but God had a lot to do with you. you were dealt good hands and bad, YOU made the most of things and I bet people taught you a lot.
thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
I'm not sure of the rules to this style of poem. The first verse has 4 lines, then there are 5 lines and 5 lines and 6 lines.
The rhyming was good and your give us somethings to think about. Life is full of challenges and fears. Your question at the end is a good thought provoking one. Thanks so much for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn
The top two lines in the fourth verse didn't quite work in rhyme. The rest are great. I love you mentioning the little soldiers. All coming to protect mommy? So cute. I've never known cats to be fearless in a storm, so them coming out of hiding is a good sign, lol
thanks for sharing,
love, LinnAnn
I have to admit, I did not totally understand this poem. I get it's a plant, a flower from the color. But I didn't get the 'viola' part. Isn't that a musical instrument...string instrument? I like how you have the bravery, and how people avoided stepping on it. I did not get the last two lines. 'hung on a dusty viola?' If you have the time could you please explain that to me? Thanks a bunch for sharing this with us.
Poets know what they are saying, and sometimes we readers take what isn't there. lol This poem was very intriguing. It sounds like you might be interested in another man, but the one you are with has control over you. The 'tight around my chest, hands and neck' sound almost like strangling.
Blushing? Because of feelings for another? Very interesting.
Thanks for sharing this, gave me thought.
Love, LinnAnn
I don't drink coffee, but know many who do. lol You describe it well. In fact very well. 'Empty glass world'. Very well said.
This is a fabulous tribute to your brother. I hope he read it and loved it. the 'cup runneth over' was tied in well with the theme. The steeping brew was also nicely done. I am impressed. Thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
I have also been through the breast cancer road. I can appreciate the difference in feeling you show from the beginning to the end.
Your first verse does so the total hopelessness we can feel. I am so happy that you were able to travel past that to the other verses. Very well done. It does touch the tender part of the heart
Thanks for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn
Okay, totally been there, done that, just not at the beach. lol If not kids then the dog. lol I did enjoy it a lot. Glad mom came around and all but I have to admit, I'd have at least had a talk with that boy. He should at least have to help replant the veggies. Food is food.
Thanks for sharing this with us. I'm smiling and that is good at the end of this long day.
Love, LinnAnn
These are great. The large flower must have taken you months. If you decide to do a pillow case with a dragon, let me know how much it would cost. lol
You might want to try dictating what you write so your hands are free to sew. I haven't worked on my sewing in so long. I am impressed and wanted you to know.
love, LinnAnn
Wow! I thought this was going to be a poem about valentines day. Then I find it's like my almost ex son in law stalking my daughter. You got my attention and held it. My chest tightened and I thought of my daughter. Very frightening. You did a great job of instilling terrifying fear.
love, LinnAnn
I have to tell you I agree with what you said and your feelings. If you know how please put this on face book. I dont know how to do this stuff, or email it to me so I can copy and paste it? That is if you want to. I live in a cold house, temp usually in the 40F. Your snarky remark about contacts was right on! I hope others read this. I wish it were plastered all over face book. we have a whole bunch of homeless sleeping in a parking lot down town and lots more sleeping in doorways of closed businesses. Its so sad. thanks
love, LinnAnn
Jay, my childhood was mostly rotten. However I focus on the happy parts, the living on the boat, the going out to see, to the San Juan Islands and hunting. Playing in the woods. Why bring up the past. God helped me to survive it and left me some good memories.
Your line that starts 'Childhood' are you asking about childhood thoughts, or thoughts of Christ?
God got me through it all. I don't hate anyone for what they did to me.
You give some good thoughts to ponder on. Christs tomb does not lift me. To me it is a good thing. but I think more on Gethsemane. He paid for my sins there.
Nicely done. You stuck to the original syllable pattern. I like that.
I like the poem. It drew me in and I loved the tenderness. But the last line is so sweet and the word cradled really did feel tender. I had such a warm mental image of a woman being held so tenderly. Very good job.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Love, LinnAnn
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