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Review of Wild Flower  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your poem is nicely done. You drew me in and held my attention with the descriptive words. The breaking the rules part made me smile. I'm not sure what rules flowers have.

Your brilliant color, vibrant reds bursting yellows and explode all in one to line verse is great.

As a painter I also liked the 'spreading color like a paintbrush'. The other verses are good as well, but using the word 'explode' was a nice touch.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
Love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed reading this article. It was very informative and actually humorous, in a ridiculous manner with the 'how not to'. I shall save this article so I have it to refer to later.

My goal this month is to search for an agent and to learn to write a query letter. Thanks so much for all the effort you put into helping us along.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
You need to come to my house the next time your cupboard is bare. roflol I have a lot of food. What can you make with seven bell peppers?

You gave good detail and so I had good imagery. I didn't smell it but with the Italian seasoning did it taste like French bread? lol

You need to have some canned goods on hand. lol Come on over for hot cross buns.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I have to tell you. I read this while at the library and it took extra effort to not bust up laughing in the quiet zone. This was so funny!

I didn't get the point about the 'clearer than mud' and the 'dents' but I figured it was the poor mans chances of getting hurt by women? It seems he came out okay. Happy ending, right?
Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Summer Storm  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Your first verse is shorter in line length, and second verse would be easy to match to it.

Take out the first word-'above'
Take out 'distant'

Mind, these are just suggestions.

Love the third verse. I could feel the goose bumps.

Maybe 'as dust and debris fly by'?

Sleep while storm is raging? You are a heavy sleeper. lol The apple tree branches scraping my walls wake me up.
Thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I do want you to realize that what happens to us, does not 'make us'. So many are abused yet rise above it. Some use the pain to make beauty and truth. Is that you? Because reading this poem, and having chatted with you, I think it is.

I just wish there were a line or verse about hope. We all need hope and you can give it in your poem. It was emotional and thought provoking. Hang in there.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Right off I love the way you did the wrap around sentence, but so the rhyme part is right on. Good going.

This poem is so absolutely great. I don't give fives very often, but this one deserves it.

You drew me in and held my rapt attention. You used great word choices, great imagery and made me fall in love in you short four verses.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Always  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This poem was so full of pain it made my heart ache. I read line after line of hurt, aching and sadness. If that is a spouse, sorry, I'd boot him/her out. Who wants to live with that agony day after day?

It got happier at the end but I was confused because the sadness was still intermingled in with the hope.

You drew me in, held my attention and made me feel for the pov of write.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm so glad you added the explanation at the end. lol My head wasn't thinking dog and playing fetch. My head was driving up in the car at a stadium. Picturing kids waiting for permission to get out of the car to go in.

Crowds cheering when the ball flies up. I'm picturing a great catch in the outfield or a home run. lol The family all proud and happy their team won. Sooooo different than what you meant. giggle
Thanks for sharing. Great imagery both ways. lol
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Never Again...  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Oh wow! This was brilliantly done. I got to the 'hands tied', and was thinking figuratively and then I kept reading. WoW. The 'body removed from the scene' was a clue I missed until I reread it. I thought she'd moved away or he had, then that clue.

The hand washing made it hit home. So creepy- scary done so well.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of To the one I love  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nicely done! I learned something new with this style. I hope I can remember it. lol The repetition was great, not over done, and your rhyming at the end of the lines was also well done.

I love the last line the best. "You are my shore." How many people can say that anymore?
Thank you so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
You wrote a poem, so yes, you ARE a poet now. lol

It might read a little bit easier if there were a couple of blank lines in there, or even one such as separating the way he treats you and where you describe what she did to him. It's just something to think about after all YOU are the poet. (giggle)

Thought provoking and held my interest.

Nicely done and I like the question at the end.
Thanks so much for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Flame  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
you really hit the 'red head' on the head. roflol

I loved this poem, it made me smile and almost burst out laughing here at Taco Bell. I'm still grinning.

It's hard to come up with a two hundred fifty character review for a seventeen character poem especially when I summed it up in the first sentence. I would have given this a five star rating, but I guess I can't.

I'm still grinning. I knew a few redheads and this poem fits them so well.

Thanks so much for sharing this. I'm still grinning.
love, LinnAnn

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Wow, you had a fun family. Your beach trips sound wonderful.

You may want to add a possessive apostrophe to show dad's ownership in the first verse.

'Motor wipers', is that the same as windshield wipers?

Holes in the floor...I don't think I'd be dumping out the sweets, but it does rhyme. lol

'Chalk and cheese' was that the color of your hair? White and yellow. Was 'fringe' your hair?

I was a dainty tomboy, so understood that verse. roflol

Your 'shooting drivers' I'm not sure I got that. Did you have a BB gun and actually shoot peoples rear ends? If that is what you meant, you might want to consider 'drivers behinds' and make it plural.

I didn't get the pinches and pokes making drivers have eyes?

I think you meant 'sweat stained' instead of 'sweet stained'.

I loved how you used 'snaps' to rhyme. Good job.

Were 'Sooty and Sweep' teddy bears you owned or were they characters from a book?

What is a 'sarnie'? What is 'salt and shake'?

I loved the 'fly with those dragons'. I have a couple of dragon books I'm working on, and comparing them works so well.

You did well on your rhyming.

I do hope you take the time to answer my questions. Where in the UK are you from?
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Bonsai  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Your syllable count was right on, and I'm not sure if I've ever seen a two stanza Haiku.

You sure are clever to get the format to also fit the other format of first letters spelling the type of tree. Good for you.

You were even able to put in about how to make the Bonsai tree. I loved it.
Thanks for sharing
love, LinnAnn
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Review of A Dark December  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I'd say you did quite well in conveying a creepy, sinister atmosphere. lol That is hard to do in such a teeny, tiny format.

I liked the 'silent' whispering. Great intro and attention getter.

The 'Darkness closing in' is also good for invoking creepy and mystery.

The 'ice wind' helps to complete the creepy feeling, however, it made me really think about the mental issues that would make someone feel icy cold. Very puzzling and again, held my attention.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Old Leafy Lane  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This was so sad. You caught my attention and drew me in. His tears and sorrow touched my heart.

I liked the part about her forever young face, even though she must have been elderly when she passed.

Your rhyming was spot on and done well. The imagery was also done well and I could see the graveyard.

My heart reached out to him as he walked home alone.

Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Swan (Octelle)  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't think I've read this style before. Thanks for the introduction! lol

I think you did very well with the rhyming at the end of each line, very well indeed. I didn't read one line that had the obvious, expected rhyming couples, like 'love/above'. You did great.

Thanks you so much for sharing with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Santa's Vacation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I loved your poem. lol You gave me good imagery on the Santa in shorts etc. lol I did wonder how Santa would lose the 'love handles. You rhymed it well. That was very creative!

The last verse- Seemed and beam...beam just made me cringe, too predictable? The rest was just delightful.
Thanks for sharing
Merry Christmas
Love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed your posting today. I am so glad you were not the start of those fires! lol

You sure do have a busy schedule. Does all that driving from state or city to another one get exhausting?

I am so glad you included a photo. I hope you put in a few (or lots)of the NYC Christmas lights.

Take care as you drive.
I love your posts even if I can't get to town to see them often enough. And thanks for the trinkets you put in them. lol
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Never completed--just a thought what if you took off the 'ed'? Just seems to maybe fit better.

When I think of discordance, I think music, but so far you've just mentioned drumming.

liquefaction -if I had a dictionary with me, I'd look that up. I've never heard of it before.

thirsty dead? if someone or something is dead, they won't be thirsty.

The third verse -eagle tied with chains I didn't get but the rest was great.

red organ sounded like a heart, but I'm not sure.

I'm not sure if I got the poem, but it was very interesting.
Thanks for sharing
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Ellipses Eclipsed  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I'm sitting in the library for the internet, and the cracking up laughing gets stares from other patrons. lol

I use ellipses...as a place to pause. lol

I love your poem. It is humorous and inventive. I love your creativity. Plot is supposed to go in where you have ellipses? I always used it, like I said...for a pause. ha ha ha
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I had the review done and it disappeared. I hope to be able to remember all that I put in.

You caught my attention and held it, and made me smile. This was a very intimate poem. I felt a bit like a voyeur, standing there watching you sleep, with a smile on your face.

I liked the last three lines the best.
Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Darkness Creeps  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I have to admit, that was some vivid and explosive imagery. You did some great story telling techniques there. You drew me in, held my attention and even made me lean forward in expectation of the light winning.

Then you pull one of those cliff hanger moves and have the dark still there creeping. lol

Thanks for sharing.
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (5.0)
If ti weren't NANOWRIMO, I'd be reviewing a lot more. But I always love the pictures. Tahnks so much for all your photos.
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