The first thing I notice with this poem is how much you packed into the last four lines, which spill across the page with worry and wisdom, hope and heartache. Your fears of what might be and regrets over what could have been are vivid and relatable, with a touch of the surreal; it almost feels like youāre telling us you can see possible future outcomes in the mirror, and you want to direct the future for good in some way.
We can only wonder how it is that a Higher Power, if one exists, could see and concurrently exist in past, present and future. How would such knowledge affect our free choice? I sometimes think itās like a āchoose your own adventureā story, where God sees all possible outcomes and allows us to set certain paths in motion, which branch out into more options, and so onā¦ this would be a mind boggling thing to keep track of for every human being who ever lived
Youāre probably wondering where that bit of philosophy came from
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This is a well thought poem, with balanced lines and readable formatting, guiding us through your concerns and ending on a hopeful note as we take in all the wonderful possibilities of life that lie before us. Your metaphors are heartfelt, layering together without overdoing it.
I noticed at the end you say āhaunted be what;ā perhaps you mean āhaunted byā¦ā instead. I donāt see anything else I would suggest to change, especially since itās poetry. I avoid picking apart the poetry of others, preferring instead to accept what theyāve put on the page as their unique form of expression.