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Greetings, Sonali!

I'm here for I Write 2025.

As always, a bright and cheerful entry, this time featuring curious kids and sneaky teachers. It's such fun to read your work. This is a creative spin on the offered prompt... At first I assumed the club was full of kids, and as it unfolded it became quite amusing.

I'm reminded of all manner of tropes and premises... Have you ever heard of the "detective gone mad" trope, where the detective appears to be breaking the law when he's really doing something good for society? It can be quite funny when done lightheartedly.

So, if you ever want to come back to this story, you could amp up the sinister aspect and make it be something quite suspicious and tense. I guess that's all I have to suggest *Smile*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings, Kiya, and happy almost birthday!

This is a beautifully sad and touching story about love, aging and memories. You write stories that are always so alive, crafting relatable characters that feel like real people with hopes, dreams and fears.

As a nurse, I suspect you speak from experience with caring for the elderly. I pray I or my own loved ones never have to go through this.

I can’t think of anything to suggest for correcting or editing, except perhaps an asterisk or three for a scene divider, and center it. Formatting is great, and you’ve done just about everything I can think of to make this a great story… also, my iPad is at 7% *Pthb*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Greetings, Sox!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

The ode to February... Everyone experiences the second month differently. No two poems are alike. I like having a surrealist bent to things, trying not to strike the "same old" notes of seasonal changes and whatnot, which get trite fast.

I love the short, quick lines you have here, with stacked rhymes like a rap. It gives a great rhythm and is fun and unique to read as you move through your feelings about February.

I can never think of anything to suggest (for the Bear Fund) other than Size 4 Verdana font *Laugh* Perhaps a line about something personal to ground the generalized seasonal thoughts? How are the New Year's goals doing, if there were any?

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings!

I’m here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

I really do appreciate this sentiment in a time of horrifying upheaval on all sides. Most of the time I just want to run away and hide in a corner of the library with this site and some games on my iPad, rather than standing up and taking action to do something about what’s going on. I’m a very good escapist. You have taken the prompt image and made something unique and deeply personal out of it, combining it with your tarot card to create a sense of depth and excitement. Sign me up for the HOWL, too! I’m ready to let loose my frustration with the world and clamor for change. It’s a mess out there.

I always recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to keep the poetry focused on our busy pages. Perhaps a thought as to what exactly needs to be changed might be useful to guide our thoughts constructively; a “flash mob” can be destructive if not directed by a strong sense of higher purpose.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Fyn!

Don't you hate it when you accidentally send off a rating without a review *Laugh*

I delayed on this one, sitting in my draft reviews page... can't remember why... I have a lot to juggle these days. Anyway, I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge. Happy Account Anniversary!

I love a good nature poem, and this is fantastic. It shares the excitement of looking forward to what the world has to offer, and reminds us of the beautiful cycle of natural life. I love your creative word choices, which are crucial to making a poem "pop." Evoking the image of an hourglass with the single word "sand" is brilliant.

Don't forget to add the prompt info, word count and line count at the bottom for clarity when you go back through your port someday. I see each poem you write for the PPC is a separate item; you may want to consider grouping them into a folder or adding smaller ones to a book item instead.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Brian!

I’m here as a fellow member of I Write 2025.

I’ll say first off, from one socially awkward person to another, I’m always hesitant about how to approach you. Not because I think you’re any weirder than I am, but… I don’t want to be offensive, condescending or oblivious. You have a wondrously complex and beautiful mind, and you deserve to be treated with respect and camaraderie. I sometimes get lost in the weeds of your blogs and poetry, and I marvel at your forthrightness in letting your thoughts loose for all of us knuckleheads to poke at.

This poem is heartfelt and relatable, as you contemplate a relationship strengthened and deepened by a hike in the mountains, which reach metaphorical heights while remaining rooted in real, visual descriptions both vivid and earthy. I love the thought here, of how much this person means to you and your appreciation of them. You have a way with words, painting a picture of vulnerability and longing for deeper interaction with others.

I have to make one suggestion as a participant in Jeremy’s Bear Fund, otherwise I would say it’s perfect. Perhaps a note to the future would add a sense of completion… did the relationship with this person help you in any meaningful way down the road? It must have, if you remember it so clearly and fondly. Perhaps just a glimpse beyond the mere hope to the actualization of such would round it out.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Sonali!

I'm here once more as a fellow member of I Write in 2025.

I love how you've taken your personal disaster and found something wonderful because of it. Listening to someone telling a story is a very comforting thing, and it must be a real blessing to you with your now limited vision.

The prompt has been met well, with something which could have been a crushing tragedy unfolding into the wonders of a new way to experience literature.

My biggest concern with audiobooks is patience... I know they're many hours long, and I know I can read much faster than I can hear. Also, I'm fussy about voices and tones and personalities. But maybe someday I'll have a need to explore this option.

The hardest part of the Bear Fund is finding something to correct... With a deeply personal and positive and free verse poem like this, nicely formatted and easy to read, I can't think of anything to suggest. Perhaps gathering the "fine print" at the bottom rather than the top would lead to a tidier appearance.

Well done, and I'm happy for you!

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings, sir!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Ah, spring! All around the world, it has a universal appeal, bringing love to hearts and minds as the weather becomes warmer and more conducive to raising families. It’s built into our natures.

I like how you’ve given us a glimpse into spring in Korea, showing us the similarities and differences to create a poem more unique and less trite than the prompt would seem to offer. You even thought of adding some of the native language and an ominous touch of Chinese dust…

You always use splendid large font and lots of space between lines, creating an easy reading experience for everyone. I noticed your book of poetry has generic genres. I would suggest labeling it with more relevant genres to make it easier to find in case someone’s looking for a book of poetry. You could use “Philosophy,” “Drama,” and “Emotional,” or “Nature,” or “Political ,” or”Inspirational,” or “Experience,” or “Personal,” or most other genres would suit.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Beholden!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Ah, the interface between poetry and song; it's a subject I've given much thought to over the years. You've used a simple consideration as the framework of your poem: music is poetry, trained and directed specifically to be heard aloud.

I must point out you miscalculated the fourth line of this form: you need four words there, not three. I formed mine in a strictly diamond shaped structure, taking the time to measure out syllables, though it wasn't required. Also, your last four lines all rhyme the same, which isn't exactly what the form required.

An interesting thought which seems to struggle a bit to fit into the form given. I always enjoy seeing how everyone approaches the prompts, and yours are always careful and enlightening.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Ned!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Ah, February... I have issues with it, even though it's my birth month. Being a transplant from a temperate climate to Florida is even more discombobulating this time of year; some days I have no idea if it's spring or fall *Crazy*

But this is about your poem, not mine *Laugh* I love how you've focused on the seasonal aspect and given us a glimpse of spring in the sweetness of birdsong. Singing robins are one of my favorite memories from my northern upbringing, and unfortunately they don't really exist in Florida.

I like the philosophic angle as you wonder where the birds take refuge in winter, and the couplet at the end completes the form in a well planned way.

You have painted an elegant and classic picture of a song of hope drifting through your window on a dreary winter day.

If I had to make a suggestion (which I do, for the Bear Fund) I might say it trails off and changed subjects a bit from beginning to end. Perhaps the narrator should catch a fleeting glimpse of their long-awaited singing birdie disappearing into the harsh, bristly shrubbery. This would trigger the line of thought about where they manage to eke out a living in the winter.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Carly!

I found this nifty template on the Random Read and Review button.

What a good idea, to not only lay out your own plan for reviews but to share it with us. I love the organization of thoughts, the font color, and the little image at the bottom. You've covered all the essential points to review stories with.

I would suggest adding three relevant genres to the item, but that's hardly necessary since this isn't really for reading. You might want to add a note letting people know if it's ok to use this template themselves, or perhaps set it to private if it's for your own personal use only.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Seabreeze!

I really enjoyed this poem, it was so fun and old-fashioned. The idea of a little kid hiding away and meeting a hobo and all coming home safe together is something that could never happen these days... *Shock2*

The point about the "smokes" reminds me of a scene from Calvin and Hobbes where Calvin's mom gives him a cigarette his grandpa left at home. Calvin goes into a coughing fit and wonders why on earth people smoke!

I like how the kid speaks simply; you've captured such a childish voice here, with a clunky rhythm like the train ride itself. A rollicking rhyming tale, great to read to kids.

I might suggest adding a line count at the end in case you would like to enter this into a contest, such as First and Second Chances by 👼intuey Author Icon

Also, at the end the kid says "what that?" Perhaps you might correct this to "what's that?" to create a smoother feel.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Beholden!

I found this using the Random Read and Review button.

Ahh, what a comforting philosophy. It's always a pleasure to read a story from you, and I really appreciated this one. As someone who prefers solitude and peace, I find myself wishing I could have Amilcar's simple, quiet life of being a happy hermit. You've given him enlightenment and helped him share it with others, and it's an excellent little story.

One suggestion, which I have no idea if you've already done or not because I found this on mobile: Size 4 Verdana font. Aside from that, I think you should drop this off at Kit's Senior Center Forum for the opportunity to be awarded a ribbon. It deserves one.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, sir!

I found this using the Random Read and Review Button.

A brisk and snappy retort on those who try and fail the good old New Year's Resolution game. I never bothered with it myself, but I can see how it usually sets one up for failure. Goals are something to be taken quite seriously, with small steps planned out in advance and even small rewards as one reaches each micro goal. It's something I've usually been too lazy to attempt *Rolling*

I might suggest not using bold for the item, as it's rather like yelling. Perhaps cite the source of your claim as to the 99.9% of failed goal keepers.

Aside from that, this was a fun read and a reminder to take life seriously and treasure each day without the burden of failure.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Ken!

I found this using the Random Read and Review Button.

You've painted a mythical picture of wildlife and freedom in the open air of nature. I love a good nature poem, and this is a fine example. The warning at the end is real and only getting more serious with each passing year.

I would strongly recommend adding three relevant genres to this item so people can find it when browsing. "Nature," "Mythology," and "Environment" would do. It's so old, I doubt anyone would see it if it hadn't appeared randomly.

Also, the picture you were inspired by is now missing. You may want to create an AI image as the cover art to make up for the loss.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Victoria!

A fascinating study of the expectations and double standards found between men and women. You've packed a lot into this brief poem, bringing us images of 1950's cliches and religious tropes. You misspelled the word "catechism," perhaps on purpose.

The narrator's pride at remaining unmarried and bucking long-held familial stereotypes is clear.

I would suggest adding a line count and submitting this to the Shadows and Light Free Verse Poetry contest. It stands a good chance of placing and deserves recognition.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Steph!

Well good grief, this is a peculiar story. The strangeness of the ritual the princess and her guards must undergo is unsettling. I suppose if one is working from "the devil is in the details," it's a creative take that incorporates a February type romantic theme.

I liked the elements of magic and the vibrations of crystals you mentioned. The setting is carefully described like a movie, and the details of love and conception are spoken of as politely as possible, suitable for a 13+ rating. The two principal characters are painted pleasingly, and we can sympathize with their desires in the face of absurd requirements.

It's highly historically inaccurate... I can't imagine any ancient culture dreaming up quite such a distorted plan for carrying on the royal line. It assumes the ascendency of the female, for one, which was rare. I mean, the men are not rulers, just hanging around to help defend, advise and make babies. And artificial insemination? Nearly impossible in a primitive environment. Pagan rituals did include temple "acts," but I don't even know what became of the babies conceived, and that was kept strictly separate from royal lineages.

Perhaps you can choose "Fantasy" as the third genre, because then anything goes, and it suits the touches of magic mentioned.

A few things you can do to tidy it up include centering the scene dividers and keeping them to three asterisks, choosing a third primary genre such as "Drama" or "Cultural," and I noticed a small grammatical typo at some point (which I can never seem to find again when I begin the review *Laugh*)

Best of luck in the contest... Hey, may I ask how you know you won't be chosen as a judge?? Do you get the opportunity to self-eliminate by entering? I've always wondered about that. I guess it's like "duh..."

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Sonali!

I'm here for I Write 2025.

I love how bright and positive your items always are; it's a joy to read them.

This poem takes inspiration from the prompt and makes it into something lovely: a warm reminder of the importance of good education and teachers who take their job seriously.

Rather than simply feeding the kids facts and figures, the outstanding teachers engage their pupils' minds and help them think for themselves about life's big issues.

I love the sentiments here. My only suggestion might be to take a closer look at your syllable counts and perhaps try to maintain a steady "beat" throughout, as the flow seems a bit choppy. I used to eschew counting syllables and measuring meter, but I've learned it makes a big difference in ease of reading and general appearances.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Megan!

I found this using the Random Read and Review Button.

Wow, that's so sad about Jane Austen. Life was so difficult back then when they unknowingly used arsenic and other toxic substances, and before the advances made in medicine.

I loved learning more about her and how she lived. That YouTube video sounds gorgeous; I might look it up.

Which brings me to the required one suggestion. You can embed the video right into your newsletter using {embed:} and the URL link.

This is a lovely item to find and enjoy.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Fyn!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

I started digging back through old forum entries and found this lovely winter scene. You have captured a beautiful moment, using the prompt words to paint us a unique and thoughtful picture of snowy trees and peaceful quiet in the morning.

The only suggestion I can think of is correcting the spelling of "crescendo." Also, there's that pesky thing of line breaks again... I'm beginning to think we should use the {indent} function to push in the second part of a spillover line... Does that make sense? I'll have to go look at one of my recent poems and see if it needs indents *Think*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Sox!

I'm here as a fellow member of I Write 2025.

Well, this was wonderful. When I saw the new contest, "dark romance," I cringed because I couldn't imagine what the host might want to see. I mean, I'm not going to write a 50 Shades *Shock2* *Vomit* *Laugh* You've led the way by writing something more whimsical and uplifting than creepy; indeed, I almost had a tear in my eye by the end.

You've captured the resurrection of the zombie mind, and left room for lots of potential sequels as Blondie tries to save her boyfriend who saved her.

If I had to make any suggestions (which I do... The Bear Fund, y'know) I would say you might need a touch more sensory engagement to make it especially vivid. At least, that's what they say to do. I think it's fine like this.

On a different angle, there might be room for more personal interaction and character development between Blondie and the guy, since you have a 2k limit. We barely know who he is.

Also, might as well flesh out *Wink* the subtitle and add a picture, though I guess the title is draw enough *Laugh* *ZombieHand* *Heartp*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Writer*
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Greetings!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

I love this highly educational and wonderfully written poem. A quick glance at the Wikipedia page for "mudflats" reveals a highly complex living ecosystem, a marvel of the natural world.

You've captured some of that feeling here in poetry, with good use of vocabulary to create a word picture and a humorous touch as you run into a fellow mud-lover. The use of the tarot card for inspiration is creative, adding thoughtful depth.

If anything, I would recommend making it a bit longer. Perhaps a glimpse of a particular species of bird, or a rare flower, even an otter or two playing - I love otters! 🦦 You can engage the senses of smell and sight and even the taste of salt wind.

Other than that, I highly recommend submitting this to Shadows and Light as Kare said. Best of luck there!

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings sir, and thank you for the opportunity to review the boy's POV.

I will say right off, I believe I prefer the girl's POV. This is well executed, but it lacks the emotional intimacy and engagement of the other. Since Ken is a boy, I as a female reader feel somewhat removed from his experience, especially since he has to hide his feelings for the most part. And I think the element of April's age and her parents keeping her "safe" makes a stronger story when seen from the inside, than just mentioning it from the boy's eyes.

I also like the further details about Mr Krang we get in the girl's POV. It seems he gets to speak more there.

Also... There's no subtle way to say this: fifteen year old boys are always going to be more interested in physical attraction than girls of a similar age. Even allowing for bashfulness and nerdiness, he'll still be fascinated by the shape of her body, the way she moves, her bust, etc. I know it sounds super creepy, but that's the way it is.

So, the way you have it now, it seems a bit unnatural and contrived, from the boy's perspective, because I feel like he's holding back some, based on what I know about boys.

Perhaps to make it more realistic without being creepy, Ken should notice just a little more about how April looks and acts. Maybe her pretty hands or the cute shape of her lips, or the way she unconsciously bats her eyelashes, or her good posture (which would be important since they're dancing.)

Also, in the interactions with his male friends, there could be some banter about how April looks. Perhaps someone snickers that she's plainer than Maureen, and Ken jumps to say April's pretty too in a different way. Maybe even some small situation where he feels protective or jealous/possessive towards her. This would develop his character, contrast him against other boys more crude or unsuitable, and help us connect and root for him.

You have a few minor typos scattered throughout; perhaps you should run it through Grammarly and look for highlights.

Aside from these suggestions, I enjoyed this about as much as the other one, and with a little development work they could complement each other quite well, exploring Ken and April's characters and interactions with their peers as the events progress. But if you only want one of them available, I would recommend leaving up April's POV story.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Sox!

I'm here again as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

This is totally "aww;" what could be cuter than the last unicorn and a misfit lady finding each other? There's room here for a lovely fairytale or fantasy story, or at least some charming AI images. So far I only have one, no, two unicorn stories in my port; perhaps you've inspired me to write more.

Your rhyme scheme is balanced, if perhaps a little strained. Perhaps something like this would "paint" better in free verse, but I like the childlike aspect of what you have, and you know I avoid picking away at anyone's poetry—even my own.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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Greetings, Beholden!

I'm here as a fellow member of the PPC5 challenge.

Ah, the nightshift. For a second it seemed like you were dreaming up an imaginary horror figure when you said "those pale creatures..." But the rest of the poem is firmly planted in reality.

It's a hard, thankless sort of career choice, one which can uproot your sleep/wake patterns for the rest of your life. When I was a kid we had an elderly neighbor who only came out at night because of working the night shift all his life. I used to joke he must be a vampire because he had the unnerving habit of snooping around our yard under cover of darkness... Neighbors *Irritated*

Anyway, I can't think of anything to suggest for improvement here. Maybe an extra word or two about how being awake at night messes with your life and how long it takes to recover... Or perhaps adjust the "pale creatures" to something more human. But don't mind me—I'm working for the BEAR project *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*
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