I like how you set this up, time and feet. This set up is very creative. I also really enjoyed it. I use to be a Paramedic and I know all too well about living life to its fullest. Thank you for the reminder. Keep writing and Happy New Year!
Your poem is very interesting. I suffer from Bipolar and Borderline Personality Disorder. This poem hit home for me. You would never know I had either illness but there are times that they show themselves and I hate it when they do. You are great at poetry. Keep on writing.
Your poem is excellent. I am sorry you had to go through this. It hit a cord with me too for I have been in an abusive relationship as well. It is hard to break the cycle. I actually divorced him. Good luck and keep writing.
I found your story to be very difficult to get into. I suspect that Adelin dies at the end. I know there are people that will like this story. I am sorry I did not like it better. I saw no spelling errors and no grammar errors in this story. Keep writing. You have a great imagination.
I liked your poem. Your descriptions were beautiful. You have captured death well. I have lost my share of friends and it can be heart breaking. You write very well, keep up the great work, you show a lot of potential. Keep writing and I look forward to reading more of your work.
I am so sorry for your loss. That is the greatest loss that I can imagine. Your poem was short but sweet. Stay strong. I hope it gets easier for you soon.
What a wonderful poem and a great tribute. I am very sorry for your loss. Loosing a sister is never easy. I am grateful that I still have my "little" sister. I do not know what I would ever do without her. My sister is my inspiration. I love her dearly even if she does not realize it. I tell my sister all the time that I love her and I look up to her. There is nothing like a sister.
I liked your poem. I am 45 and it reminded me of the end of days. I am also a retired paramedic, due to injury, and I have found myself thinking this way. You have a real talent for poetry.
I liked your poem. I liked the words you chose. It was very pretty. An old friend of mine use to raise rabbits. She also would rescue rabbits. She had a kind heart. Baby bunnies were so cute. I use to be fascinated by them. I loved watching them hop around.
I liked this poem. You have some real talent for poetry. I wrote one poem and I found that very hard to do. Poetry and I don’t do well together. I hope your holiday was merry and bright. I know mine was. I was with my nephews who are 6 & 9. They were wonderful.
That poem was great. I love pet dialogue. Everyone has a different take on it. Your poem made me smile on this very chilly morning. Thank you and have a blessed day.
Things do get better. I am Bipolar and Borderline Personality. I am very familiar with depression. There is a light at the end of the tunnel. I know that light is hard to see some times but it is there. I hope you feel better soon.
I had two Golden Retrievers and a black and white tuxedo kitty at one time. My pets are my children. I was a paramedic, I am retired now, but at the time I was active. They always knew when I would have a bad day. They would rally around me. They have since passed away but there is not a day that goes by that I don't miss them.
I had a cat who was abandoned while she was pregnant. She brought her kittens to me one by one. I took them all home with me. I lived at home with my parents and I was in my twenties. So when I arrived home with a cat and three babies my parents are like oh no. My father said I had to keep them in my room which I did. When the babies were all old enough I gave them away to good homes and I kept Mama cat. I named her Mittens, she was a black and white tuxedo girl. She was grateful every single day that I had her that I rescued her. She moved with me when I moved out and she was a stunning girl until she passed away.
JJDel
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