Did you lose your daughter? If so I am very sorry to hear that. Your poem was warm and heart felt. I loved the description. Most children tip toe into our lives and into our hearts.
I really liked your poem. Loss is a huge emotion that is very difficult to process.
Drinking doesn't bother me really, as long as you are responsible but drugs is where I draw the line. I do not tolerate people that do drugs. I am a Paramedic so I have to deal with them but that does not mean I like it.
You are right, you will not succeed like that. You will only fail. You write well. Keep writing.
I liked your poem very much. I would love to find that magnetic love. I thought I found that love once, I actually married the man, but he betrayed me in the end. I do know that special love is out there some where. I don't search for it because I know the Goddess will grant it to me in her own time. Keep writing!
I cannot help but laugh. Cats and Dogs do not normally play very well. I use to have two golden retrievers and a tuxedo cat. The dogs and cat played well together but the dogs knew that the cat ruled.
I thought your poem was really cute. I enjoyed reading it and it brought a smile to my face. Keep writing!
They do steal our hearts don't they? I use to have two golden retrievers and they each had their own personality but they were wonderful dogs and they stole my heart.
Your poem was great, I loved it. I saw no spelling errors. My heart swelled with this poem. Keep on writing.
Yes change is difficult as deer discovered. Deer was in disbelief that his home was changing right before his eyes. It is terrible that human kind does this to them.
Over all your writing is very good. Your discriptions are very well done. I did not see any spelling errors.
I look forward to reading more from you. Well done and thank you.
Very nicely put. I really enjoyed reading your poem. Writer's Block is never an easy thing for us writers. We must break through and tap into the creative powers that be. I know I am dealing with some writer's block at the moment. I have seemed to reach a dead end with one of my stories. So at the moment I am doing a lot of reviewing to help me break through this process.
Your poem flowed very well and I did not notice any spelling errors. Keep writing!!
I liked your poem. It is something I would read to my nephews as they go to bed. Do you mind if I print it out to read to them? They would love it. My nephews are 6 and 9 years old. I try to set the standards that dreams are possible and to shoot for the stars. I like your writing style, I have read things by you before, and I know you are great. Keep writing!
WOW. I cannot wait for the next chapter. This is really good. I was captivated by the first sentence. I hope you continue this story. You are very good at writing and capturing the fear that your character was feeling. I look forward to reading more from you.
WOW that was beautifully put. I love the last line "Take flight unto eternal rest". I don't normally read poetry or write it. I did just write my first poem called 'Memories'. It was about my cat Mittens. It is the first time I could think about her without crying but I cried writing the poem. I think you did a great job. Keep writing.
I don't usually read poems or like them. But I thought your poem was really good.
I am Bipolar and I usually think in black and white and I am learning that people do not belong in "Boxes" or "Circles". This poem helped me see things differently.
Thank you for the wonderful poem. Keep writing. I think you are great as a poet.
Your poem is very good. I am sorry that you were abused. I am a retired Paramedic (I was forced to retire due to an injury). I have seen many abuse cases and I am very happy you got out when you did. Keep up the great work. Keep writing, it will help you.
This story hit me hard. I am still waiting to get older to process things that have happened to me as a paramedic. I see a therapist to help me deal with shootings, abuse cases, major car accidents, decapitations, and so much more. Please continue this story. I really like it. Keep writing.
This story captured me the moment I started reading it. I only wish the story was a little longer. I never thought "Gavin" was a girl. A lot of places would send you home if you did not have your name tag. I was a medic and my name tag doubled as my sign in tag as well. So it was always important for us to remember our name tag so we could clock in.
Once upon a time there was a dog named Max and he could talk to his person. Everyday,they would go out for a search and rescue and thier team was the best. One day,Max found a little girl who passed away during the cold, dark night. The little girl was no more than six years old. Max laid down next to her and called to his owner. Because of that,Max needed time off to heal his broken heart. Max blamed himself for not finding her in time. Until finally,Max talked to his owner who said that he was the best of the best and he has saved more people and this little girl, painful as it was, died of natural causes. Max's owner understands that he is heart broken but encourages him to continue his work.
It is short but sweet. I really liked it. It is very true. Good writing. Keep writing, it will pay off like it did now, you know when it touches someone. I will look forward to reading more from you.
Very nicely put. I remember my Graduation. It was a confusing time. Leaving high school behind and off to college where I didn't know anyone. I was excited and scared at the same time. But now (I am 45) I look back at how awesome it was. The future really is yours for the taking. Good luck with everything and keep writing.
Oh my god. How tradgic and sad and beautiful at the same time. My heart melted when he found out he had stage five cancer. My Grandfather passed away from cancer twenty-five or so years ago. I remember the day he got the news and it was devistating. You captured this very well. I look forward to reading more from you. Keep writing.
Fondly, JJ
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