First Impression: The descriptions are part of the actioon and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation among the characters build the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The conversation among the characters kept me focused on the movement of the plot.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me withe Walter’s statement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Walter is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Walter.
First Impression: The description of the guy talking in the first paragraph hooked me. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while making the description part of the action.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. I am looking forward to reading the next part of this serial,
I like: This is my favorite simile, as inconspicuous as a pair of rhinos in ballet. I like this simile because it is fresh, descriptive, and visual.
Final thoughts: I am giving this exciting and well-written story a 5.0 because of the active descriptions, which kept me focused on the movement of the plot.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with someone going away. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part is about the child holding up the plane because she had to go to the bathroom.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of its emphasize on friendship.
First Impression: The eight foot kittens hooked me. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The antics of the eight foot kitten made me smile, because it was typical kitten behavior.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing story because of the kittens.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Molly growling. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Reading about Molly is my favorite part of this story.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed this story because of Molly.
First Thoughts: The first paragraph aroused the reader's curiosity about the things that have made the author's walk through life better. The rest of the essay gives the reader an indication of why the three things make the author's life better.
What I Like: My favorite suggestions is about focusing on one's own thoughts. I like this suggestion because it is something many people have difficulty doing.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to write another essay about focusing on one's own thoughts. Does one begin with prayer to help focus?
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this item, because of the three suggestions.
First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with it being an ordinary day in Helensburgh. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
What I Like: My favorite part of this story is the climax, because it taught a lesson.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of time standing still.
First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooked me with Paige remembering the day Donnie left. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
What I Like: The diary entry was a good choice for this story, because it shows the speaker's emotions.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to make this part of a book about Paige's struggles.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story, because it was a diary entry.
First Thoughts: The first paragraph hooks the reader with the way the planet was destroyed. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The interaction among the characters builds the suspense.
What I Like: The description of Chris, as a mountain man, does a good job of revealing his character to the reader.
The climax is my favorite part of the story, because it was a surprise.
Suggestions: In this phrase, had heard not of, I suggest switching the positions heard and not, so that it reads not heard.
A typo in this phrase, boulders’ tare apart, I suggest changing tare to tear.
Final Thoughts: I enjoyed reading this intriguing story because of the interaction of the characters.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the path covered by willow branches. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: Izzy is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Izzy.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with Taylor's statement. The speaker moves the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation among the characters build the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is my favorite sentence, To this day, death metal and a screaming baby sound the same to me. I like this sentence because it made me laugh.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.
First Impression: The first line in this poem hooked me. It also established the poem's theme and subject. The main emotion of this poem is love.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion is to keep writing thought-provoking items.
I like: This is my favorite line, Love what you see when you look in that mirror, made in the image of The Most High. I like this line because it states the lesson of the poem, while reminding the reader of something many people tend to forget.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this thought-provoking poem, because it gave me something to think about concerning skin color.
First Impression: The poem follows the stated form and looks good on the page. The first stanza establishes the speaker, theme, mood, and subject of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and amusing emotions forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The third stanza is my favorite, because it ends with a question. The question made me smile.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this amusing poem because it made me smile.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the couple hurrying through the parking lot. The woman's statement in the second paragraph reveals a great deal about the couples relationship. There are definitely issues in the marriage that is causing estrangement.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The second paragraph is my favorite because it reveals something about the couple's relationship.
Final thoughts: I am giving this story a 5.0 because of the way the couple's relationship was revealed.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the mysteries. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part of this story is the question at the end, because it gives the reader something to think about and meditate on.
Final thoughts: I am giving this thought-provoking story a 5.0 because it made me definition of a martyr's death.
First Impression: The poem follows the free verse form and looks good on the page. The poem's first stanza hooks the reader, while establishing the mood and theme. The main emotion of this poem is anger.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The descriptions in this poem mirror the emotion of anger, without specifically stating the poem's emotion.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the way it shows the emotion of anger.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the village that safe guarded the tallest peak. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems. I am looking forward to reading more of this story.
I like: The climax arouses the reader's curiosity about what happens next. I like William because he is an intriguing and sympathetic character.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this chapter because of William.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the debate topic. The author moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while keeping the reader's attention on the debt.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The last paragraph is my favorite because it closed the debate with the lesson the author learned.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the debate.
First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the description of the action in the basement. The description are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the terror and suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: This is a good simile, like a brick in quicksand. I like it because it is fresh and descriptive.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written story a 5.0 because of the good descriptions of the action.
First Impression: The first paragraph of this article hooked me with the motivational speaker. This articles shows the power of prayer and how it worked in the life of one family.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: I like the emphases put on prayer and unquestioned faith in God, because it gives the reader something to think about.
Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written and thought-provoking article a 5.0, because it made me think about the power of prayer.
First Impression: The first stanza of this poem establishes the speaker, form, mood, and theme. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of hope and faith forward at a good pace.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The repetition of the phrases emphasize both the spiritual emotions and the speaker goal.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this well-written poem because of the scripture it was based on. The 23rd Psalms is my favorite Old Testament verse.
First Impression: The questions in this thought-provoking essay give the reader a place to start evaluating the way they live in relation to their belief system. Service to humanity or helping other people is an idea that is prevalent in all religions, but it is something many people forget when they consider the after life.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: The questions in this essay encourage the reader to search for the answers. Each individual has to answer the questions themselves and form their own opinions based on the answers they find.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this essay because of the questions.
First Impression: The second paragraph of this prose essay hooked me with the questions. While the author does not specifically answer the questions in the second paragraph, the essay encourages anyone wanting to assist a new believer to help.
Suggestions: I found no technical problem.
I like: My favorite part is about helping the new believer navigate their new life.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this prose essay because of the subject.
First Impression: The second paragraph hooked me with ghosts no one remembers but me. The speaker moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.
Suggestions: I found no technical problems.
I like: My favorite part of the story is the climax, because it suggested a happy ending.
Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the main charac ter.
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