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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Kotaro , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Eternity in Monochrome " , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with a whirlpool disturbing the speakers perception of reality. The descriptions were part of the action and moved the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation between the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax was my favorite part of the story. I like this part because it implied Watanabe's story was true.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the way Watanabe traveled into the future.

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Review of My Daughter  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Paul , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "My Daughter" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the father forbidding his daughter going to the party. The conversation move the plot forward at a good pace while revealing the good relationship between father and daughter.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite art of the story because it was a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because the conversation sound authentic.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, JCosmos , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "In the year 2030 " , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza of this free verse poem establishes the form, mood, theme, and plot. The rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part of this poem was the name of the virus COVID Zombie Flu is very creative.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the use of the virus.

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Review of Helping Hands  
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, AmyJo- only 2 steps behind - , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Helping Hands" , because I discovered it on the philosophy genre page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, While the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of love forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite because it suggest that love be the motive for helping others.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of its emphasis on love.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Tim Chiu , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Potency Conception: Viable Certainty" , because I discovered it on the How-to/Advice genre page.

First Impression: The first stanza hooked me with the first line. The rhythm moves the narrative and emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, because it closes the poem by giving the reader something to think about.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this thought-provoking free verse poem because it gave me something to think about concerning pain and conscience.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Jay O'Toole , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "These Are My JOTtings, Part #2" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion would be to place note at the bottom of the poem explaining the syllable count and who created the form.

I like: The first line is my favorite because it drew me into the poem.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the association with winter and spring.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Amethyst Angel🌸📝🪽 , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Across the County Line" , because I discovered it in "Mystery Newsletter (October 4, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace. The conversation and interaction among the characters built the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is the logical way the ladies went about stopping the crime.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, KimE , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Everything but the taste of the Ocean" , because I discovered it in "Poetry Newsletter (October 4, 2023)" .

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the descriptions and the emotions of longing forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first two lines are my favorite. I like these lines because of the rhyme on seas and bees.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because of the way it expressed the speakers longing for the sea.

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for entry "Something In the Wind" 
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Hi, Dave , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Le Voyage Magnifique"  "Something In the Wind" , because I discovered it in "Poetry Newsletter (October 4, 2023)" .

First Impression: The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of nostalgia forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite line is Something in the wind takes me to. I like this line because I contains the most emotion.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this because of the idea of the way the poem showed emotion.

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Review of Oh, pants!  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Malister , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Oh, pants!" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The third paragraph hooked me with the speaker pacing nervously. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: I the last paragraph is my favorite, because it made me wonder if a ghost was pulling down the speaker pants.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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Review of Contract of Life  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, eliot schmitt , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Contract of Life" , because I discovered it in "Spiritual Newsletter (October 4, 2023)" .

First Impression: The Demon's question in the first paragraph hooked me. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems. My only suggestion would be to consider using this story as the basis of a novel about what happens next.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like this because it made me wonder what the demon was really up to and if the other character would regret the contract.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the interaction between the characters.

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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Sumojo , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Conversation with a skeleton " , because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with John's question. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is the climax because it shows John had changed his mind about Halloween.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Review of Snowflake  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, W.P. Gerace , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Snowflake" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the veterinarian's approaching retirement. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: A typo in this phrase, can’t grant any wish,I suggest changing can't to can because Snowflake can grant wishes.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story, because it is a happy ending.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of Snowflake.

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Review of The Pitcher  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Paul , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Pitcher" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The conversation moves the plot forward at a good pace, while revealing the relationship between the captain and the team.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: My favorite part is the climax, because it revealed the logical conclusion to the problem.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this because of the characters and the way they came up with a solution to the problem.

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Review of The 23 Enigma  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, KingsSideCastle , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The 23 Enigma" , because I discovered it under online authors.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the form, mood, and theme of the poem. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other while the rhythm moves the narrative forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The last stanza is my favorite, because it climaxes the poem with a question.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it gave me something to thin about concerning the number 23.

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hi, Malister , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "My Blinking Brother" , because I discovered it on the "Daily Flash Fiction Challenge"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker's brother leering at her. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while showing the sibling rivalry through the actions of the characters.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed how much the siblings cared for each other.

Final thoughts:

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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hi, Malister , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Long Journey Home" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with death cannot stop the dance. The descriptions are part of the action and move the plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite sentence, Hope that life is always worth living. I like this sentence because it is true and it reveals that the speaker has changed in some way.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the lesson about life being worth living.

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Review of God's Messenger  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "God's Messenger" , because I discovered it on The Hub under recently awarded items.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the speaker wanting to tell about Evelyn. The speaker moves the narrative forward at a good pace, while revealing the relationship between him and his sister.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The climax is my favorite part of the story. I like the climax because it showed a change in the speaker and his relationship with his sister.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the characters.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Anna Marie Carlson , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Owl, The Best Day" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza hooked me with the owl landing on the arm of a man. The rhythm and rhyming words complimented each other, while the rhythm moved the narrative and emotions of hope forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical probems.

I like: These are my favorite line, because of the rhyme on flight and delight
And peaceful was its flight, the
Genuine pureness of delight.


Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because of the interaction between the owl and the sailor.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Magic Giant Bubble Gum" , because I discovered it on "The Writer's Cramp"  forum page.

First Impression: The first stanza establishes the theme, form, and mood. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and laughter forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: This is my favorite line, Now, there's chewing gum everywhere. I like this line because it brings back memories of my younger years, when I bought bubble gum.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because of the subject.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, J.R. PETE , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "The Dream that wasn't- Contest" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first paragraph hooked me with the question. The speaker moved the narrative forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first person point of view and voice were good choices for this story. They revealed the main character as a sympathetic and intriguing person.

The climax is my favorite part of the story because the main character turned to God.

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this story because of the speaker.

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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi, WakeUpAndLive️~🚬🚭2024 , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "slow-release chatoyant energy poems"  "Deep cleaning the house" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: This is a wonderful and creative response to the prompt. Reading it caused me to remember my Grandma Mary, who was an expert at deep cleaning her house.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The repetition of No way out gives the poem unity, while showing the importance of the job.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0 because it made me think about the job of deep cleaning a house.

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Review of No Way Out  
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi, Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "No Way Out" , because I discovered it on the newsfeed.

First Impression: The first stanza of this poem establishes the form, mood, and theme. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and spiritual emotions forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The first stanza is my favorite because it hooked me with the gateless gate.

Final thoughts: This thought-provoking poem that causes the reader to think about eternal life.

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Review of Girl with Child  
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi, Weirdone-Back in the games , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Girl with Child" , because I discovered it on the "Twenty-three in Eleven "  forum page.

First Impression: The poem follows the form and looks good on the page. The rhythm moves the narrative and plot forward at a good pace, while building the suspense.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: These are my favorite lines. I like this lines because they cause the reader to stop and think about the plot before continuing to read the poem.
Swelled with dwarf?
Swelled with goblin?

Final thoughts: I enjoyed reading this poem because it was about The Hobbit.

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Review of Oxygène  
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi, Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness , I am Prosperous Snow celebrating , I am reviewing "Oxygène" , because I discovered it in "Romance/Love Newsletter (September 27, 2023)" .

First Impression: The first line of this poem hooked me, I wanted to know when the speaker visited the past. The rhythm and rhyming words compliment each other, while the rhythm moves the narrative and emotions of love forward at a good pace.

Suggestions: I found no technical problems.

I like: The list line of this poem is my favorite, because it suggest that true love is timeless.

Final thoughts: I am giving this well-written poem a 5.0, because of the way it showed the emotion of love.

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