This is well written. It kept the readers attention. The flow made the item smoothe. I really enjoyed the way you were putting the reader into the story that you were paragraph. The sentences were so placed that they glued the item together.
Good advice. I really know where you are coming from. I wanted to creat only good memories for my three children and three stepchildren. I found that they choose what events that they turn into memories. I can spend every minute with them, but they may remember the one night that I found something else to do. I found hope in your words.
This is beautiful. I like the way you corrected spelling errors. I think that action gives your item more character than just the words. I really enjoyed the read.
Is this a true story, and if not it is very convencing. I found the flow smooth. It was an enjoyable read.
I enjoyed the read. I like the preface of the chapter.I find that it was a great story beginning that will run into an excellant. The dialog flowed well in the body of the chapter. I find that the first and last chapters are the hardest to read.
The flow was good, and the rhyme made it a great read. The message is one that anyone that takes pride in what they do can realate to. This is a read that I would recomend to any reader. This is record of a day of a hard worker, and I have been there.
This is beautiful. love the flow. It is an enjoyable read. I love the picture that you paint for us. Nature is always a nice place to reflect. It may actually be the only part of who were are intended to be.
I am glad to see that you are writing the Nano challenge.
I love this, and I am going to short cut it to my desktop. I think it is an excellant guide to help me on my search to becoming a published novelist. How much of your novel do you have going right now? This is my second year, and it is flowing better right now, but it is still early. I hope I don't suffer block again.
I love your story. You were to bring me into the story with just six hundren and nine words. It was smooth, and the message was easy to relate to. The love between mother and daughter was painted beautifuly with the words that you have chosen. This stroy takes me back 13 - 17 years ago.
This is a item with such inspiration and encouragment is captured in eleven words. I found it to be a very good poem, and I would love to see it in a longer version. There are so many people that does not know the story that you speak about. I think a longer beautiful item would reach so many.
I love this. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
This is a wonderful idea, and now I need to work on getting a sponsor. I was happy to finish National Novel Month last year. Though I did not do anything with the novel, I was happy that I did. I loved the expeirence, and I am getting the idea for this year.
I have not been able to do much here for my writing.com family, and this is an opportunity to give something back.
I could not give you a five because I could not view the picture. However, the over-view of the book is wonderful, and I am happy to be part of the NaNoWriMo. Are you going to write this November? I wrote one last year (King Thomas). I don't know what other's thought, but I cann't wait to go at it again.
Tastey dish. I can not believe the number of eggs that are used in this dish. By the way, chili is it chili powder? Just wondering. I want to fix this treat from the coursity of the chili being in a brownie. It seems like a dish that would take a pro to bake.
I have copied this to a office page to try to make one day for my children. I am inspired to start a cooking page on my computer. I can not wait to expand my cooking dishes from just the old school hill cooking.
this is a very good poem. The rhyme and flow made it a great read. I like the a,b,a,b verses (this is the way I write most of my work). It was also cool that your last verse was rhyming with each line.
I enjoyed this read, and am glad that you have chosen to be part of our family.
This is a paper that read smooth, and I found it easy to read. I learned some about other customes, and that is unusual in short items. I enjoyed the words that you have chosen. This is a very debatable item that I am glad that you have shared this with us.
This is a great poem. It carries a great message. It is well written, and the flow is smooth. I loved the way this wasa easy ready. I am glad that you decided to share this with us.
The second verse was so full of emotion that it brought me to tears.
I love your poems. You have a great flow and good rhyme. I think that you paint your faith and inspiration through your words. I am happy that I have found your poems. I found that they are a wonderful read.
I am glad that you have chosen to share your work with us.
Ida
I found this page in the update pages. I wanted to give props to you for bringing us together yet again. I found the classes on wdc so helpful, and there are times I have donated money for others to be able to take a class.
Right in time for holloween. It was interesting and keeps my attention. The dialog works well, and I find this hard for me. It is a skill that I need to work on. I find that this story flows well, and keeps me in the story. I felt the emotions in the story.
I like this poem. Though I know that you are talking about a person, the words remind me of my son's cat that was named Harley. We had to leave him behind. I want him to read this. He will love to see the words of the Harley Cat.
The flow was good, but the message was even better. I think that the rhyme kept my attention. Most of us have been walking in your words. I am one of them. I thought that I had lost or buried all my bricks. I am remaking who I am and realize that bricks that are laid for others are not bricks that will build my life that I will be happy. After all no one can build you happiness except you. This is what I am learning.
This is well written, and it is a great message is inspirational. I have fibromyalgia, and I feel useless at times. There are times that if you touch me it feels as though you have beaten me. I was on the couch for more than a year. I got to 3lbs shy of 300 lbs. I forse myself to move now, but the pain is sometimes impossible to bear. I then go into a pannic attact. I have to remind myself that the pain I feel is not a heart attact. Then rock myself to sleep.
Thank you for helping me to know that I am not alone.
Ida
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