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Review of Lies  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
This would make an awesome rap! You unleash feelings toward another to express themselves so you can understand where they are coming from. This might not be your standard poetry type, but lyrics for sure!

You have a natural rhythm and flow to your words. It comes out on point and the message starts to get stale at the end. I would work on getting a hard finish because that really drives a point home. Repeating lines can help with the tone of the message.

Keep writing!

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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: 13+ | N/A (Review only item.)
This poem reminds me of stream of consciousness writing. It's worthy and it is something I do because I don't want to lose the moment when an idea has formed and my muse is urging me on. When finished, I take a step back and start editing the content for form, gammer, etc. to help it take shape.

You had a couple your (s) that should have been you're(s). The expression loses weight with tired phrases like 'take a pill and relax.' I like to think poetry is about testing our literal boundaries to find new expressions that capture a reader's imagination. Writers want to work on the reader's senses.

Good effort and great lyrical sounding word play. Keep writing!

B


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Review of Christian  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I was captured by the cadence of your words throughout the poem. The opening read like a riddle, but then the voice begins answering the thoughts.

There is so much vivid imagery in this poem that is building with a good tone and message. But, it may have gone on to long with its contradictory word play. Like a good song, you want the best verses to back up the chorus. It turns into a meandering thought, perhaps lacks summation like the poet is questioning, 'where was I going with this?'

But you have such an easy manner with your words and depictions, that it will take very little from an editor's pen and the addition of a solid conclusion to bring this poem home.

Brian


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Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.0)
This is good. Like William Carlos Williams, take a sentence and break it down to its parts. We can examine each part of the statement in this way, milk those words and expressions to truly understand the author's full meaning, as the poet downward spirals.

Even though it is melancholic, it is dreamy in it's reverie. "This hazy, smokey place..." could be hell, purgatory, a place of torment, or you're smoking cigarettes in a jazz club next to Bogie and Bacall. Nick went through a lot of torment, too.

But 'lost and forgotten/broken and beaten' is much darker. The tone is set, the imagery is limited, but the reader can put themself there, imagine what this place is. Poetry should be open to interpretation as it opens our eyes, minds, hearts.

While brief, I think it's poignant.

Brian
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Review of Sharp Edges  
Review by Brian K Compton
In affiliation with Circumpolar Black Light Reviewer  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Lydia,

I read your poem and want to call attention to its remarkable impact on me when I read.
There is a message in this poem that awakens this reader, and there is a hook with form to convey meaning with purposeful expression.

What I got from your poem is emptiness and pain, but how it is shown by the image of a rock with pointed edges is mentally disturbing. That was powerful. Your poem made me feel something, like good poetry should.

I had to ask myself why five? Sometimes, we look for too many answers. Probably coincidence, but readers will wonder because of the question how many rocks were needed. Only one was needed metaphorically. And really, the entire poem speaks metaphorically. This is about how this person feels and plans to carry out something -- writing it down for imagination, feeling those rocks once hurled will serve the purpose of repelling forces that are repressive.

How powerful that last rock. I imagined a music video with an animated image of that rock tearing this person open. But my mind wouldn't let the image end there. I saw flowers bursting from a solemn girl's eminence. Something beautiful. Instead of being ugly, it was perfect expression -- like your poem.

You've done well here. I can see you are a blossoming poet.

Brian KC

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Review of Should I die?  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hi Chloe,

I connected with what you wrote. It's sad because I feel like this sometimes, too. I find I blame myself, or overthink stuff. I want a friend I can tell stuff to. I don't think people understand me in my world. They only see me the way I don't want to be seen.
So I am fixing it.
I told people how I feel about the way I feel I'm being treated. They can explain themselves. I surround myself with people who do want to support what I want to be. It's not bad that people don't get me the way I want to be seen.
I use food to make myself happy. I found I feel like crap afterward, so now I eat food that makes me happy before and after.
I don't want to tell you what to do, but I think the food and people in your life give you depressed thoughts. You should not blame yourself. You are still new at this life thing. Be selfish and live for yourself. You will always have moments of self doubt. You may think you are unworthy. Try not to use others to judge you.
I do try to hurt myself, but in another way. I try to get others to dislike me. I think my brain is telling me that everyone is going to reject me anyway. I feel justified having someone think I'm not good. Ironically, I've always been good. So many misunderstandings in my life made me feel like everyone, even when indifferent, hates me. So, I try to beat them to the punch (old expression) and do something stupid I regret later because I think I'm going to fail as a human. I'm still working on that.
I also get very anxious about stuff, overthink problems. I panic and get emotional in my reactions. Might be hereditary. *RollEyes* I've had a lot of people lose patience with me. I got prescription medicine for that. Life is teaching me to be patient.
Helps to find something you like doing to take your mind off problems. Writing is a great place to start. There ar lots of people here to encourage you. Let us be your friends. It might not be much, but it's a good place to start.
Your parents will come around. Communication problems create nearly all the drama in the world. I have trouble explaining myself, and people think I'm a good writer.

Let's be friends,

Brian

Thank you for sharing. Your words can inspire others who also struggle like you do.

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Review of Medical Model  
Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (5.0)
I enjoyed your poem and the theme. I related to it, because it is so apparent our society wants a shortcut to remedy instead of putting in the work to be healthy. We've gone pharmaceutical crazy.

The voice in your poem makes light of the subject, pointing out the misuse, addictive nature. Written knowledgbly and very easy to consume, lending really well to the message, I smiled knowingly as I read.

You are very keen. I like your style. Hope I will be reading more.

Brian
Member of Rising Stars. Lost my review affiliation link again. 🙄 I'm trying Gabriella, I really am! 😇😎 GabriellaR45


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I found your poem in a spiritual newsletter...I think,

It's fun thinking about your poem and how your inspiration ties into the theme. Return to Innocence as a song relies on a beat to carry the message along. Your poem is really centered around earth's heartbeat. Structurally, you could play off that, making all your ideas dance around that central word heartbeat, if you place it alone on one line in the center of the poem. Then, the depiction of the past could introduce until you get to your central word and then the poem could end about the future.
I like the title and the idea that all things are connected to earth and its still beating rhythm like a drum.
I also like the current structure of the poem, too. It just made my mind think about how the things you describe could be like ripples in a pond or the idea that we are all linked to another by Mother Earth. Time plays a very important element while seasons come and go. If it weren't for the perfect structure of this planet and relation to the moon and sun, or how it spins just so, imagine...night and day, cold and warm, wet and dry, making it inhabitable with the right gases to breath.
Lots to think about and play with here.
Always a pleasure,
Brian


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Review of The Wake  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
One quick thought on this poem. I can comment more later, but I would suggest a rewrite that would totally grab a reader. Your last stanza is powerful here:

"Broad swathes of black vestments
punctuated by jewel tones.
Men in dress shirts, sleeves folded up
at the elbows, collars open..."

Open your poem with that. Readers like to play detective, rather than told what's going on. Setting the scene is important. I know you are playing with two types of moods at this funeral. I'm certain this event was a visceral awakening for you. It shows.

I think you can really capture the atmosphere, if you give the reader hints about these mourners. If it's too personal to explore the emotions deeper, I understand. I struggle with honesty in writing when I come too close to something I can't be fully open about.

Very impressed.

Brian


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I enjoyed the tone of your poem and was interested in the structure of the first three verses. I could see myself trying to pen something like this, trying to get that spiritual vibe that you so naturally create.

When I got to the fourth stanza, it read like a recall the first three verses. If structure is important here, you could recall the second verse with forests and clouds, as well. But, you are staying true to the three line format. If you squeeze it all in, you could also reverse order from recall in third stanza to first, like you are moving away from the midpoint of thought bringing all four stanzas full circle. You could also consider fourth stanza for the end, if you do ever rewrite.

The last two stanzas do seperate from the pack, especially last. I liked it from a romantic aspect, like wanting a do over, or going back in time. It seems by summoning nature and the North Star, we begin to believe greater forces could mystically realign souls.

Pleading poetry has long been my thing. I have always wanted to be that romantic guy with boom box over head imploring my love to Say Something. Poetry is a great outlet to play with the language and persuade another, beg eyes to pry, read my words. You have done well here.

Always a pleasure to read your work,

Brian


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Beautiful depiction of an autumn tree! I love the imagery and how it can all relate to growing older. I loved the personification of the tree with hands releasing the leaves. I imagined the tree could speak whispers from wind buffeting its branches. Nice touch with the ending transformation to snow.


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Review of Lonely Crossroads  
Review by Brian K Compton
In affiliation with Circumpolar Black Light Reviewer  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Very nicely put. We all would like forgiveness, but it is important to cherish the journey of life, be thankful. Sounds like a survivor talking who is ready to face the remainder of life.

Did find one grammatical question ...

"In each corner they'll be challenges..."

Did you mean there'll? It was a pleasure to read and hear a poem with a message of seeking harmony.

Brian
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Review by Brian K Compton
In affiliation with Circumpolar Black Light Reviewer  
Rated: E | (5.0)
Hi Dave,

Excellent, thoughtfully written article to help reviewers like me to step back and get a little perspective before critiquing another's writing. What has always made it difficult here is that you can't pin down what kind of feedback will best suit the writer. Identities and bios can be sketchy to non-existent and I try to 'grade' some on a curve because there are different levels of writing here. A lot of stress is on encouragement, but I prefer the ones worth thicker skin who want to improve. I know it is important to keep everyone participating and keeping this site viable and active.

I'll be rereading this again. Thanks for the knowledge.

Brian


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Review of Patience  
Review by Brian K Compton
In affiliation with Circumpolar Black Light Reviewer  
Rated: E | (4.0)
This poem I can see what direction these statements are going, are cohesive and the final verse possesses the counter and conclusion.
It reads like the voice is omniscient (all knowing) on the subject of impatience. We are not given examples of what situations cause these types of conditions to occur.
John Keats once wrote, "We hate poetry that has a palpable design upon us—and if we do not agree, seems to put its hand in its breeches pocket. Poetry should be great & unobtrusive, a thing which enters into one’s soul, and does not startle it or amaze it with itself but with its subject."
Try to look at your subjects/topics with more awe, allow discovery. Ease up on the reigns when you write. Keats was talking about negative capability, a very important tool for poets.
Your structure functioned in this piece.
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Review of Positivity  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.0)
I see where you're going with this. I like a poem that encourages positivity. After all, we poets write because of inspiration. Why not inspire others? You are looking for 'creative criticism.' Let's start from line one and a minor spelling gaffe, add an 'e' to breath.

Now, the poem could be tighter and think about the expressions like 'kiss the clouds that rain on your face.' That's good, but what can you really do with something you can't reach? Wink? Smile? Wave? Salute? Keeping with this theme where you let the bad stuff know it can't get to you. Also, it is like affirmation. If we do these things, we give ourselves reinforcement. If you grumble, you stay grumpy. So, do the opposite. That is a proper function within your purposeful poem.

The third line gets too vague. We need more tangible stuff. It might be that 'darkness' is figurative and too general. The clouds were dark, so are we talking about her mood? That is the tone of the poem. Perhaps, revisit that and give some explanation, examples, more images.

Starting with line four, you get into your summation early. Perhaps, save for end? Later on, you talk about a bird befouling the car and someone taking a parking space. Now, these seem minor, but if you keep listing like the open, you could have more stuff about this darkness that affects her.

It could be mom deals with troubles unspoken. We get a sense of darkness, frustration from the little things. Something deeper is beneath that surface. The cheer and sentiment are touching. Mom should be proud and that will make it all worthwhile.

Good work!


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Review of A Bird's Eye View  
Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Ann,

You paint some very deft images in this short form. Given the introduction to the poem, I was able to use these pictures as symbols or metaphors. It reminds me of something I wrote in a similar fashion about impending depression...

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My commentary on misunderstandings with depression and the denial.
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I wonder if it's necessary to address what the dove represents...a reader will know. I didn't see that ending coming. Great job!

Brian KC


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
This was a fun little ditty parody of White Christmas, taking the opposite approach to what we dislike most about the holidays - Cold.

I did catch a typo in second verse where it said 'warn' instead of warm. I wondered if you could have gone with green Christmas as the opposite of white. Though, repetition of wanting warmth makes me chuckle.

I can imagination someone singing the tune and inflecting their voice on all the warm changes/references. You could consider lengthening this, because you could substitute sleigh bells ringing and children singing among other stanzas.

Your poem makes me want to take a run at this song or something similar. Must have been for a prompt? Fun.

Brian


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Review by Brian K Compton
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
First, I Love, Love the graphic! It is perfect for the tone of this poem. You capture the voice of a middle-schooler, especially with the last two lines of the first stanza.

The reference to those she burned smell strongly of bacon suggests that they were pigs. The connotation might be apt, but maybe not what you want readers to take away? We are looking at someone who has a truncated and somewhat crude sense of language. Clearly, not someone who is rising above the suggested level of this witch-like judge.

It makes me think a Hansel/Gretel vs. witch story is befitting here. It seems like the last stanza wants to gives clues to who this judge is with 'masked face' and 'smiling tattoo'. Some good imagery, but thematically poem is uneven.

Some other imagery like 'swimming in blood' doesn't make sense and 'deaf ears' is cliche. I wouldn't be discouraged. The passion behind these words is felt. It's like watching someone so flustered say, 'Oh, yeah, well you're...you're...a big dum-dum.' It captures that restrained ability to get back at someone.

Keep writing and reaching because there is always hope that your words will find ears that hear you.
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Review of Music  
Review by Brian K Compton
In affiliation with Circumpolar Black Light Reviewer  
Rated: E | (4.5)
Dear Koyel,

Found your acrostic poem in random review and thought I might share my reaction to your poem.

Music is a great source of passion and a great instrument for writers, especially poets. In acrostic form you express how music compels this voice to sing of its magic to soothe pain. I find myself reaching out to google to find the meanings of some of your choice words to help drive home this theme, starting with mellifluous. So, I got to learn something there.

Having such a short word as a prompt, you were able to keep your word choices precise, putting all the emphasis on the words you chose. It's a very relatable theme, too. Music is a great healer for melancholy. In fact, we can attune ourselves in mood with music choices.

I find the acrostic form too confining for me when I write. You managed to do an admirable job.

Congrats!

Brian


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Review of An Autumnal Sun  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Bittersweet moment detected in this prose piece that made me feel you have the opening to some story with setting and the beginning of character development. You use the setting sun as comparison to the man's waning life. Almost seems unnecessary to say he'd never see another spring.

You tell us he feels bitterness, felt a chill, wondering about how life has passed him by. Any way of showing, like was he pulling up a collar on coat (what kind...fleece, suede, wool?) and sipping on hot tea? What about how his smile formed when he saw the child and other mannerisms to show envy. Looking away, crossing arms or legs?

What cues can you give that he has no one in his life? I bet you can google signs to know someone is alone or lonely.

This item is very provocative and teases us to use our imagination in the scene. Besides fall leaves and sun in the park, what kind of fauna, is their water, women with babies, statues and more? You could literally take a painting and describe everything you see and what you imagine is happening. Is this painting in your mind? Flesh it all so we can see what the writer brings to life on the page.

This is a very solid piece, like the framework to a yet finished building. You could create a brilliant monument with this excellent start.

Write On!
Brian


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi Deb!

I really enjoyed reading this, knowing what you are trying to convey to a reader about this uncomfortable silence with another. Using just a few words to describe what seems like a long silence interrupted by thoughts really sets the scene.

Now as a reader, I was left with questions and feelings that you could explore more in those moments in your poem, really flesh out the experience to put us there. This poem is a great opportunity to expand your poetic gift.

To set the scene, I would like more visual. During this silence, if you think back, what were you looking at? The radio, the floor, out the window, at a mannerism or tick that someone had. You could imply what the silence was about. And, were they dressed up, carrying anything, liquor smell, maybe?

When you describe quiet, we think of the proverbial pin drop. Was it the flutter of leaves, creaking breaches or moaning trees? Could the fan have made an air freshener flip or twirl? Did car have leather seats that scrunched or cloth that crushed? Clothes rustle, people clear their throats or did someone smoke?

To me, your poem is personal and very important to you the way it stands. I draw from the personal to create fictional 'what if' scenarios, because I want to capture a reader's imagination. Or, if you think of creating another piece, on similar scenario, you could have fun playing with our imagination with teasing the senses a bit more.

Just wanted to thank you again for the attention to my blog and peruse your stuff. Was trying to peek at your free form stuff but found none of the 12 items the folder advertised. I will try not to be a stranger and stop in again.

Thanks, Brian


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (2.5)
This sounds less like a poem and more like cautionary information from Triple-A or some travel bureau. To generalize in poetry like this does not help a reader get into the scene. It would help to pick a particular setting like a road or area/region to describe. I'd like to suggest some scenarios but this is poetry 101. Need to work the readers senses a little bit.

A "dog whose bark may worse than its bite" is not only cliche but a poor choice to describe action. 'Sloshy,' 'barreling,' and 'deluge' were some good word choices that needed some things or actions to describe.

I would say start over and decide what event on a commute would make for an interesting poem under these conditions and how it might personally relate to a reader or the writer.


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Dear Tim,

I think you are working on a functioning metaphor of merit comparing a hug from a lovely to a snug jacket. I felt the poem was strongest...

"...luxurious, lasting comfort
Of the jacket sleeves,
And your upper body is snuggly fitted
To the jacket’s buttoned up
Or zipped up shell and lining.
One’s legs are left free and unwrapped
By the comfy winter coat..."

But there was too much uncertainty of what type of coat this is or exactly what particular sensations to attribute to the coat's exact functions. I could not visualize or feel because it seems the hug is in theory, imagined and unreal. Or distant memory?

I would love to see this poem rewrit with the description opening the poem with a distinct coat, style so we can imagine the coat and what kind of woman can make a man feel like this.

This poem needs to hit on key elements like advertising does to garner our attention. This is not a rewrite, but an example of what modern poetry might go after in describing the elements offered in your poem...

Luxury
Tender arms embrace
Lasting comfort
Sleeves caressing
Silky
Upper body wrapped
Buttoned
In the shell and lining
Legs alive
Brushed by beauty
At the bottom edges
Cozy, exuberant
Her embrace is style

I wasn't going for syntax there. It's your poem, idea to do with what you want. Merely another way of looking at it. I prefer your style but with less verbiage.

Either way, fascinated by the potential for this piece.


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Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Love is a many splendor end things, but I would stick with the flowers in this poem. I imagine Sam the Butcher, Alice the maid's boyfriend from The Brady Bunch TV show, when you mention meat department.
If it's a grocery store you love, so be it. It comes with a price. The store provides, but the people who offer a smile with their customer service make everything operational and should be more worthy of love. But, let's just call it respect or admiration and shake on it.
Interesting topic for an ode of love.


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Review of True Perseverance  
Review by Brian K Compton
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Rated: 13+ | (3.0)
This poem is confusing on the whole. It does speak somewhat darkly of a world going to seed.

I was struck by the opening lines, "I see the shallow waters dividing apart and all of the things that once existed in my heart." Unfortunately, that is where the poem ends for me because it takes an unusual turn. This poem starts to speak of world domination. There is awkward sentences and fragmented sentences and it doesn't really sound like a poem.

And in the end it says we all have a serial killer inside of us. So this really could be absurd rantings of someone who's probably left this website a long time ago. So take it for what it's worth.

The palm just seems to be grasping and meandering and really doesn't say anything.

Just a few thoughts I had while reading.

Brian


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