Very thought incurring, this was a magical piece that I really tried my est to understand, and some of it was creey, some very real, some contents, beautiful with nothing negative. You have all the components in here, and though I really did not understand the underlying message, its okay, maybe thats meant for you to know only, I just really loved this part, and that would be the truth at the ending, I sure love truth, so my fav part is:
"But it is not the unknown to that alter ego within, to them it is the face of fear, the antithesis to survival. And so, the unknown is fear. And fear is unknown."
Fear is the unknown, and vice versa. I loved how you ended that! Great write! Keep it up!!
Blessings Eternally,
Anna
Short, packed a good metaphoric punch and yet summed up in such little words! This was really sweet and it does speak of the caring mnature in the way you see love! You have mjuch talent, please keep this up, of course, my favorite part was the whole thing, but those last two lives, were the grand finale of the piece, which made it really nice to read! You are so sweet to write like this! Very good!
This was a poem that I really needed to see! I love honest true friends and you described freindship in a symphony of the most important qualities true friends possess! This was wonderful, I agreed with every word, and I really think this should constantly be sponsored because it is beautiful and real, and it teaches people about what some do overlook! The best things in life like friendship!
My fav part:"True friends listen to you when you cry.
True friends try as hard as they can not to lie.
True friends accept you for who you are.
True friends don’t care if you’re near or far."
Unbelievable and so true! Keep inspiring through your writing, you do it so well!
Very good write, I imagine this is about tattoos and what body art means to you! It was really eclectic and creative in the way you wrote it!
My fav part:
"So before these memories
swirl and fade,
let me write all
on crumpled paper-skin."
Good job! I never got a tattoo, lol, but they do amaze me! I hope this about tattoos, lol. Otherwise, disregard my reading into it! I hope that whatever it is about, that you are okay, happy, and that you arent cutting yourself! I know about these things,and as a sap, I hold these things very saddening and painful to me. If you need anyone to talk to, I am here, no judgements, just encouragement and caring!
Blessings Eternally To You And Yours,
Anna
This was an absolute beautiful write, it was somewhat myterious, nice, and it had a hidden message beneath that was so inspirational, wise and wonderful! I really loved this so much, it was a treasure and the structure, was impeccable. You are highly gifted with words! I was delighted to have clicked on this. It made me smile and I understood the contents very well.
Fav part?
"She might have left me in this world,
with her voice no longer heard,
but inside she's always here with me.”
I smiled and believed every word."
Combined with the ending stanza, outstanding! Keep up these positive powerful writes! Your writing does affect people, just like me!
Blessingsa Truly,
Anna
Some spelling errs(not one to talk) however, the words were written with a message so real and this was highly thought provoking. I loved everyline, short, sweet, and so powerful!
Favorite part?
"Theese are the things that burn inside,
Theese are what keep us going,
Theese are the emotions that lead us to confide,
Theese are the emotions that tell us to leap with out knowing.
For what are we with out these,
But nothing more than living dust,
And each of us holds our own keys,
Which in our lives we dole out to those we trust."
My, how true this is! Keep writing and inspiring change! Blessings Eteranally,
This was an absolute divine write! I really love music and I can see you do too! I loved how you mentioned all the noises in life as being music. As all noise or sound does create music! This was mysterious and very well written! I loved this piece! Favorite part:
"Weep at its feet.
Dance forever to its beat.
For it will heal your soul, just like the rainbow that carries you to soar in sunny skies"
This was breathtaking! I felt every word! Great write!
Blessings Truly,
Anna
Beautifully worded, endearing and just overall very romantic with a great sense of what love is and what it means to you! Great write! I encourage you to keep this up!!
Definitely a good fantasy write! I don't know why you doubt your writing ability, it is very good. I liked your story, yet freaky, thats life, lol. I know the piece was sci-fi, and I really enjoyed it! I see nothing wrong with the piece at all and will not criticize over grammar, becasue I am the same way, sometomes, and must revise my work over and over, til I destroy it through editing! lol. Thats why I like perfection in habit, yet not in wriring, that's just me and my ADD. lol. Ahhhhh...life, is it really bad? No, it's only wat we make of it! This story was great considering your disorder. I gave this a higher rating than anyone else, I see, because, like I said, the contents are not bad at all. They are really entertaining, to me. Maye I'm missing something. lol. I don't know why youd get only 3 stars on this, you are a beginner, right?? Anyhow, I wish you the best! Quit beating up on yourself! lol. God loves you, and thats all that matters.
I enjoyed and was amused by this piece in remembering my Daughter, although, she'll be waking in seven hours. If I'm lucky. lol. Anyway, thought I would just tell you that this was superbly innocent, and just really errupted warmth from within. It was quite friendly and definitely charming. My favorite stanza?? "Sitting close to me, she is,
Yet she does not know,
That she is the light,
That inspires me to live so…" Blessings To You And Yours!!
Scary, effective, suspenseful and just...umm..good? I enjoyed reading this, it was definitely a good write, and I enjoyed the plot and the climax. Thank you for sharing this. It was a delight to read! Blessings to you and yours!
This was such a sweet and cute story! I felt like a child while reading it, and the envisionment was not difficult, you painted the write well! I definitely think this piece deserves a 10, I know the rating sytem won't allow it. You are extremely good with writing. I encourage you to keep that up! Thank you so much for sharing. Many bleassings to you and yours!!
I really enjoyed your poem, it was extra special, and I enjoyed the easy flow, not choppy at all, this all combined with the contents within, was really a inspirational and beautiful write!! I am guessing you are German, judging by the last name, "woman's shoe", lol, which this interprets from German to English. Ironically. Anyway, I am not one to talk, I am a Mutt, and I most certainly believe I am German, yet I don't know the entire truth there (wonder why that could be...) Whoa is me, and I am all of the world all at once, blended into a person. Here I am! lol Glad to have gotten to read this, it was down to earth, sweet, and we need more people like you to inspire with forgiveness and acceptance! Blessing to you and yours always, Anita!!
This story was definitely entertaining! Wow! I was very impressed by thew way it was written, and I am absolutely amazed at the viual capability you have to produce through words. Good story, you are a great Author! It was very "Hobbit" like. I always loved and treasured the real good authors like JRR Tolkien.
I feel the same way about some of my friends! They are special and I would hate for them to get hurt. This was good, yet was really saddening. I hope that you inspire your friend to really see whats true, and what's really meant to be, if you believe it to be! Everything has a way of working itself out for the best, just allow it to unfold patiently, if you can. I loved the poem, very sweet, strong and endearing. I wish you true blessings all around you and yours!
Wow, very nice write!! It almost seems like I know you so somhow, everywrod you speak is relevant to me, yet a bit blurry, because I don't know you that well yet. I really enjoyed this piece, and I will have to say, that you are really awesome to have written this for your younger brother. Wonderful job!! I hope you get all the peace, love, tranquility, you deserve!! Blessings from above all around you!! I believe that you are an Angel on earth to have written this, yet you are mislead in someway. I hope you find the truth and know that I can no way tell you what it is, yet I will say, this is familar, and I have no quams wit any of it, yet you seem to be awfully bitter, and I am only tring to help you become less bitter and more loving with your family. I believe they are worth it!!
I came across this poem and because I have a daughter, this really intriqued me. I am so sorry that you lost your daughter! That is truly awful! I had a miscarraige a long time ago, and I know how that feels! I also wrote a poem at that time to my soul lost! I often think about that, and then I got on
birth control so I never had to worry about it, and wouldnt you know, I got pregnant again, on the pill? It's a long story, and I dont really care to share, lol, I might start bringing up resent, however, I know my daughter came to me for a reason. Because the first pregnancy was a "no egg in sac" thing....yet, even though I tried my hardest to prevent that form happening again, it did! My daughter is a wonder and I am sure you know all things happen for a reason! You are in my prayers!! So is your little one lost!!
I am really sorry, my condolences, and if you ever want to tak, I am here!! Keep your head up and smile, lovely lady! Hugs.
Holy Dreams!! This was magnificently written, the words painting a picture of beauty and wonder, everything a soul could ask for and what every soul deserves! Catchy title, and definitely a wonderful imagery you painted. I needed to read this! It was just perfect at the right time! I loved how you emphasized true love in the poem in bold, and the 5 senses as well. May I take your hand to "The world beyond our dreams?" I sure do feel it is a great place to be! You are a genius writer, please write back! Blessings To You And Yours,
Incredible! This is my life story too! Not the alcohol part, but the Mommy busted her ass part! She was the father and the Mother, and I loved the verse when you say:"I had a mother who was there through the good times and the bad
but "who's your daddy?" they would ask, response was "me...a dad!?"
That was perfect! Keep this up! I really loved the ending too, you making that comeback and being pwerful within again! You deserve it, and the reference to the most famous quote for a fallen musical Icon, "Only God Can Judge Me" It is so true! I mean people can judge and whatnot, but the only one who really can judge is the one above, just like you said! He is all that matters in judgement, because he sees us as loved unconditionally, no matter what! Very inspirational, I feel I came across this for a reason, so if youd like to talk, get back to me! You are a true writer with meaning. That is not easily found!! I wish you the best, you are in my prayers!
Hey, if it means anything, I think you are wonderful!
lol...This was enjoyable to read. Just ramblings of the mind. Very creative, although it's sponsered so I promise I didnt come looking for you! lol. I simply clicked the link in 'Read a Newbie!'...Hey, I should write something like this! Maybe I will! This was vewry different and very enjoyable however! I cant give you five stars, cause like you said, it is just rambling and altough funny, it really holds no point.
Sorry! It made me laugh thpough, so thank you!
Wonderful and quite informative! I liked the "salmon" metaphric value for the ball. Witty! I really love Tennos, obviously, and thats why I came here! So, I will say this is quite a good sprts story based on fiction, and I love these pieces! They are the most triumphant to me! Is there triumph in competing? lol. That much, I am not so sure, however, I am sure you are a magnificant writer and that you do well with short stories, unlike me! I enjoyed the fatasy, as well as the underlying reality. Great mix of both!!
This poem was really nice, I clicked on it because I have a poem called....jeeezz ummmm "Shipwrecked." I really thought you had a good poetry style and yet I sense anger in the poem, you did well to disguise it! Great job, Keep it up, and not to the detriment of others. lol. Great piece, yet is driftwood all we deserve in life to be left with? Ask youre heart that truly, and if you answer "no" for whatever reason, then you need to ask the question again! I really loved the creativity of the piece though! Nice persuasion in words! That is only a suggestion of course! And opinion. Opinions don't really mean alot, unless you care! This did have a good ending, yet very mysterious, Wendy!! That is what was intended though, so you did a good job for being a jounalist and all. I give the poem a 5 star rating with no real criticism except for the "undertoe" or undertone rather in the poem. All else is beautiful. I think you should read my poem too! One good hand deserves another! Thats what support is about! *ideas*
Why would people give this a four? This is a five! I really enjoyed your writingstyle and the ability to make others' think in the positive. May be the reason you only got a four, lol. Anyway, I appreciate this work for everything it offers, knowledge, love, wisdom, caring, inspiration, and intelligence unsurpassed by most! I give this a five, simply because it reflects what I think! We are all miracles! Yes, we can turn to heathens, but thats our own will. Not our Creators. He gave us free will! So, we must take that responsibility and realize that we have oppurtunity yet we can destroy open doors! This was exceptional, I try to review as much as I can. and I just happened to click on this link, and I really think this type of encouragement should be sponsored everyday!!! You have quite a developed attitude and viewpoint! You are the reason that this site is so wonderous to me in nothing but a positive way!!
Never doubt love, sweetheart! I really enjoyed the simplicity in the poem, yet the packed emotion it held! The wise message in this poem is "Do what your heart speaks"...Nobody has that heart but you! It is to be treasured, not held back! I often wonder why life gets harder as we grow!! It's just our minds growing too, which gets in the way of the heart, I should know, lol, I have been down that road! I am so happy you are trusting again and ready to open your heart, that says you are forgiving, forgetting, and going with your true inner feelings! Wonderful! There's nothing better than true inner feelings for the positive! Great write!!! I loved this! You'll never know how much i needed this today! Thank you!!
I believe this piece was extraordinary! It explains death in all forms, not just physical, which is amazing that you thought to do that! I am really proud of the way the poem was so short yet so impactfukl and held alot of incredible meaning! Please keep this up! It was really unique and different!
Blessings Truly,
Anna
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I give the poem a 5 star rating with no real criticism except for the "undertoe" or undertone rather in the poem. All else is beautiful. I think you should read my poem too! One good hand deserves another! Thats what support is about! *ideas*