Whoa! I can't believe the beauty and the essence in that poem! I have green eyes, inherited by my Mom. It's strange, green eyes are very unusual. However, it doesn't matter the eye color, Every one of them can be seen in nature and holds beauty. However, my green eyes are the growth to my future, my family, and my daughter as well, who has brown eyes, the eyes of the earth. Well done and beautiful. I loved this so no criticism due! Have a great holiday!!
This is extremely heartfelt and I really liked the way it was pieced together. I believe this person you are talking about IS very genuine and she seems to have really hurt you. I am very sorry. This is sad, and I feel the pain in the poetry! I can relate to this one. One guy named "squidward" has never left my heart and since our last depart, he is always on my mind, always and forever. I love him more than anything and I cannot figure out why I can't get him outta my head! Anyway, great write!!!
Whoa there, that was a bit threatening. I am not here to cause trouble, I am here to express my emotions that have fallen upon deaf ears because of the distance between Goku. I am not here to twist any stories around and certainly not to make a poem displaying "I am going to kill you if you love someone and cannot control the powerful emotion. I believe that this story was very interesting,and of course, good writing skills, as usual! I hope that you are not going to "War" with me and Goku" if we finally "patch" things up.
I found this portion amongst others highly threatening:
"Finding no obvious answer to this enigma, he looked back towards the southern vista, grabbing his bearings. Goku exhaled, and stretched his legs. "Well, standin' here all day's no good," he said, narrowing his eyes at the blinding sun. "Guess if I keep goin' this way, I'll eventually run into some trees. Alright!" His countenance turned focused, and he made a stance. "Let's go, Kinto'un!" he called to his ride."
"And {HYUUUN!} the boy and cloud took off for the mainland, leaving a trail of gold and emerald following them to adventure…and danger."
Actually this was one of the least threatening parts of the whole story, because as I read further, it just got more threatening and more threatening, as if our love is a sin or maybe it's because these "police"
and Nyoibo trying to attack us with missles, grenandes, and rocket launchers? That sounds a bit terrorist to me. Could this be because that this "army" is not about love, but just about destructing a great girl because you can't stand that I am really a "good" girl?
And the alien shall continue!!!
Without these scare tactics.
I could be wrong but I think I know my own life experiences better than anyone else that NEVER talks to me do!
Good Story anyhow! "Penguin Entertainment", I remember that from myspace, although I didnt realize what it stood for until now! Nice!
Please just be nice, I am not trying to step on anyone's shoes. I am simply trying to live my life the way I want to. I don't dictate to you what to do with your life! :(
Please be happy for me and stop this madness! I am not scared of you, any of you!
This was great! I loved it! I DO care. Caring is the best thing around! It lifts spirits, brightens faces, captures smiles, so on and so forth. Really, I loved this poem. It was beautiful and simple and filled with love! Keep up the great inspiration!!
I can't imagine this pain! Despite the sadness, this poem was superbly written. I know your Mom is watching over you as all our relatives do when they pass on. I hope you have found some solace in dealing with this. Great Poem. Now I need tissues! :(
This story was sad beyond sad. I actually cried. I guess that is the point though, to build a rush of emotion to the readers. You sure did that well! I am so sorry if this really happened to you. I'd give you a hug if I could, everyone needs a little support from time to time and now it's yours! Big Hugs to you and I hope you and your mother's relationship can somehow be miraculously healed. You did an excellent penning. Please keep your head up!! If you need anything, feel free to talk. :)
Love,
Michelle
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