I thought this was bitter-sweet to read through. The romance was lovely and you described this womans power over you very well. It seems like things didn't work out. A nice flowing poem and was a joy to read. I hope you managed to solve the love problems here. Great work.
I thought your poem here was well executed. Well crafted and written. The flow was great, the rhymes were great too. The talk of food was nice, you made me hungry. I liked the light-hearted theme of this poem. The simplicity made the writing a joy to read. Well done.
I thought you wrote a lovely piece here. The rhymes were great. The flow was great too. I enjoyed reading it through. I see you wrote this a few years ago, I hope it did well in its contest. I liked the angle you wrote this from. There was a great sense of freedom coming from the lines and words. Nice work.
I liked how you wrote this piece of writing. Such a classy way. The technical depth was special. The bond a mother feels must be overwhelming. This writing was very poetic and powerful. I found no errors. I also thought your writing here was very flamboyant. Nice work.
I thought your writing here was beautiful and wonderful. Such a poetic beauty here. You set a scene, a dream very well. The title said it all. I felt peace as I read this through. I would have loved to have read just another stanza though. I was taken on a little journey reading this through.
I really liked this little piece from you. There was something addictive about it all. The flow was good, the rhyming was good too. I also liked the philosophy in the words and lines. This made me wish the writing was longer. Overall, a nice little piece to read. Well done and thank you.
I thought you expressed yourself very well here. After reading your piece here, it seems like you are a very clever person. Your soul must be deep and powerful to feel all the things you wrote down here. I loved the flowing rhythm to this piece. I found no errors. I enjoyed reading this through.
I loved how you started this little piece, "birdies", such a cute word and carries great imagery. I watch the birds in my garden every day and feed them seeds too. Your little poem here was very accurate to their ways. I loved the poetic sway of this piece too. Such a joy to read through.
I thought your writing here was very good. I like the depth of this writing. There were some good rhymes and good flow to your work. Relationships can be so varied. I liked the fact that your charcter came to you, I found this part romantic. In love, if it feels wrong then walk away the best you can. Thank you for sharing this work here.
I thought your story was quite funny. I seen the funny side of the story. The couple were nagging each other like and old married pair. I liked the size of this story, it kept my attention very well. Your story reminded me of the sad tale of the couple who were victims of nuclear fall out. I think it was called "When the Wind Blows".... They too were locked in but for different reasons. Thank you for sharing your little story here.
I breathed a sigh of relief that the womans lover safely returned from war. This was a very heroic tale and made me smile as I read it through. I did however notice a typo mistake. The fourth stanza, "wouldn't" was typed twice. Maybe this was your intention, I don't know. I like how they both cried in each others arms .... a nice read.
I do believe that animals do converse with each other. Last year, I started sprinkling seeds and bread crumbs in my garden for the birds to feed on. A little while later, sparrows came and fed. Then after their continuous visits, some pigeons came to feed too. And then, by surpise some seagulls visited too. I find it strange that in the bird kingdom that three different types of birds all found their way to my garden and the food supply I offer. I do believe they all conversed. Your writing here brought this to mind. Thank you again for writing this wonderful piece.
Aww, you should have written more of this writing. It was lovely. It was very philosophical and rewarding. My spirit always lights up when I read about the cosmos. Being in time with the stars is a really nice feeling. I enjoyed reading this through. Thank you.
Aww, I thought this writing was very sweet yet sorrowful. The ending was sad as he vanished. This was like a scene from a movie, a war time lovers movie. The sentiment was powerful and the imagery was vivid to me. I thought you executed this little story perfectly. Great work.
Aww, I thought your little piece here was lovely. So uplifting and rewarding to read through. You are right, only the now really matters. Life is a game and should be a happy one. I liked the simplicity of this work from you. Thank you for sharing it here.
Yes, this was very dark but great to read through. I liked your grammar here and story telling. Dark dreams is a very fitting title for this writing. The writing was just the right size, length. I liked the gripping story. I found no way of improving the poem. Thank you for sharing it here.
I thought you expressed yourself very well here. Love can make us do silly things. It is ok to look back and smile. At least you were able to forgive this person for not feeling the same way. That is half the battle right there. A nice read and one to remember. Thank you for sharing your thoughts and feelings here.
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I love the colour, blue is my favourite of all colours. The symbolic posture of the angel is very warming and powerful. There is a nice tone to the hues in here. First impressions were excellent to me. So special.
I thought your writing here was very sweet and very simple to understand. There is no better reward than our children showing care and love to us. It is equally rewarding when they are all home safe and sound. I thought you expressed yourself very well here. I am pleased you wrote this. It was very sweet. Thank you for sharing it here.
I thought this writing here from you was written perfectly. Nice grammar and story telling. The biblical power in this work was special and very rewarding. I like reading about God's impact on peoples lives. This work from you was quite inspirational. Good work. Thank you for sharing it here.
Aww, I felt for the boy in your piece here. He had a wish that never became true. I have heard that Detroit is not the city it used to be. I am from the UK so my judgement is probably wrong. I liked the simplicity of this writing from you. A good read. Thank you for sharing it here.
I thought you wrote this in a nice and lavish manner. The imagery coming from your piece here was excellent. I could see large paintings on each wall of the mannor. The scene was set very well. I was inspired by the splendour of this hall and its surroundings. Great writing. Thank you for sharing it here.
I think this is a lovely piece of writing from you. The comparing of this man to a peacock is very nice. Yes, the peacock is one of the most stunning birds on Earth. The colours he displays is beautiful. The fine feathers are exquisit. Your grammar here flowed well. The imagery coming from the lines was great. I loved it all.
Awww, this was really sweet to read through. I think you have nailed this writing very well. I too have been strawberry picking and your writing seemed to match my own experience. The flow was great, the rhythm was special and superb to read out loud. Overall, a lovely, sweet, perfect piece of writing.
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