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Review of Why do I write?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings!


I love your candid description of the struggle to not write despite writing not seeming to lead to anything in your life. I identify with the feeling a lot myself, even though for many years after I “grew up” I ceased to write fiction. My head is full of ideas and thoughts and observations, and for a long time I kept a bulging document with scribbled weird details and fragments and songs and character sketches of a novel I dreamed of and lived in the world of inside my head. Then I started getting interested in music, and writing for me turned into an extensive journalistic process of nitpicking, research, contemplation, analysis and criticism of what I was discovering about myself and the world around me as reflected in the music I was choosing to listen to.

The rest of my story and my rediscovery of fiction writing by way of this community is not relevant at the moment… I really appreciate your story, and I have a deep understanding of how writing of any in-depth sort is in one’s very bones. I couldn’t possibly not write, either - the one time I did lapse from putting coherent sentences together on paper was during the height of the pandemic, and not doing so took a heavy toll on my brain.

As a personal essay, I have nothing to suggest here; the question you propose is fully answered with detail and clarity. I would recommend using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. And perhaps a brief observation about whether you dream of someday having your stories published would help round out the thoughts expressed here

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings!


An interesting flash fiction we have here: a boy with a gift for picking locks gets caught by a “cop” who cuts a deal with him. The security company seems like a front for more sinister operations… why would they need to hire someone to break and enter? This raises questions about Madril’s future and sets up a fascinating scenario for further development.

There is potential for conflict between Madril and his older cousin, who appears to be blackmailing him to get him to do shady stuff. How far will the boy go to avoid getting caught for past misdeeds? Will there be a choice to make that develops his character arc and provides tension, stakes and obstacles?

Or is this a very simple story of a boy who gets a good job? You have all sorts of options here if you cared to make a longer story out of this. As it is, the storytelling is a bit more on the narrative side. We could make a deeper emotional connection to Madril if we can see what he sees, feel what he feels, in a more descriptive way. Perhaps you could mention the smell inside the vehicle or the bright fluorescent lights in the office, to give us some of the sensations he’s experiencing.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*
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Review of The Gifted Girl  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to Writing.com!


A charming and beautiful story of a little girl with brilliance and special powers. It reads like a gentle fairytale narrative, simple and brief and summarized. Your character is taught the best use of her exceptional gifts, and is promised not only a mentor but also a young friend. This story has incredible potential to be made into a series, an epic fantasy, even a Disney movie.

You have some simple grammar errors which could be helped if you run it through a program such as Grammarly. I would like to offer suggestions on the major points involved in turning this into a full fledged story…

First, one must set up the basic ingredients of good literature: goals, stakes and obstacles. The main character needs a development arc, which includes an internal conflict and an external conflict which she grows through and learns from. Tension is brought by raising the stakes and creating obstacles to the goals. There should be an antagonist of some sort, a character whose goals compete with Brenda’s and create conflict between them.

Then, of course, there’s showing versus telling and putting us into the main character’s head. We find it to be a more engaging read when we feel what she feels, know what she knows, and experience the things which happen to her in the limited sense, rather than having everything shared by a storytelling narrator in the style of a fairytale. This is a large and complicated subject, and you could learn more about it by reading a few articles written by Max Griffin 🏳️‍🌈 Author Icon or submitting your item to him for a review.

I love your premise, and this is a very sweet story, but as it is it feels like a rough sketch of something much bigger, a fleeting capture of ideas for further exploration and development.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*
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Review of Choked up Words  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings and welcome to writing.com!


I really appreciate your posting this here for us; I know it must be tough for you to go over these feelings again.

You have a nice smooth rhyme scheme going along, which leads us through the poem with a good flow and rhythm. The lines are about equal lengths, lending a balanced and steady approach to the feelings expressed.

The pain of the “visual” experienced is made evident by the words chosen, as the narrator struggles to explain what is happening and share it with others. The stress is such that it affects their day to day life and they cannot cope in the usual ways. It feels as if they are running away from this “visual,” but they just can’t get away from the heaviness of reliving the traumatic experience of their past, despite the many years which have come between.

If it’s ok to offer suggestions for improving something so deeply personal, I would like to ask if the word you were thinking of is perhaps “vision” rather than “visual?” And also, you forgot to capitalize the word “I’ve,” and the word “can’t” needs an apostrophe. I also like to tell everyone to use Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. Increased font size also helps give your poem more of a “presence” on our busy pages.

I sincerely hope you feel better and have come to a happier place as you look back on that time in your life.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings!


I enjoyed this fun tale of cats at Christmas, filled with the spirit of the season.

Your writing captures the playfulness of the cats and their different unique personalities and quirky behaviors. It feels so relatable; I can picture all of them in my head, romping through the house and laying a trap for Santa. We see the results of this come down to a happy ending which the humans are all unaware of. Overall it’s a cute and rollicking story with an engaging and amusing pace.

The first unusual thing I noticed is the word you used in the subtitle; it appears to be a misspelling of “anamorphism,” which I at first assumed means “animals portrayed with human characteristics.” But I looked it up and I’m surprised to find the word doesn’t mean that at all, but rather is related to computer coding. I think we’re getting confused with “anthropomorphism…” Perhaps a little more research would be a good idea.

A quick formatting note: I always recommend Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices. And you need spaces between each line of dialogue to create a more open and smoother reading experience.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*
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for entry "What Tomorrow Knows" Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings from I Write 2024!


The first thing I notice with this poem is how much you packed into the last four lines, which spill across the page with worry and wisdom, hope and heartache. Your fears of what might be and regrets over what could have been are vivid and relatable, with a touch of the surreal; it almost feels like you’re telling us you can see possible future outcomes in the mirror, and you want to direct the future for good in some way.

We can only wonder how it is that a Higher Power, if one exists, could see and concurrently exist in past, present and future. How would such knowledge affect our free choice? I sometimes think it’s like a “choose your own adventure” story, where God sees all possible outcomes and allows us to set certain paths in motion, which branch out into more options, and so on… this would be a mind boggling thing to keep track of for every human being who ever lived *Shock2*

You’re probably wondering where that bit of philosophy came from *Laugh* This is a well thought poem, with balanced lines and readable formatting, guiding us through your concerns and ending on a hopeful note as we take in all the wonderful possibilities of life that lie before us. Your metaphors are heartfelt, layering together without overdoing it.

I noticed at the end you say “haunted be what;” perhaps you mean “haunted by…” instead. I don’t see anything else I would suggest to change, especially since it’s poetry. I avoid picking apart the poetry of others, preferring instead to accept what they’ve put on the page as their unique form of expression.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Greetings,

I found this using the Random Read and Review button. I wasn’t sure if it was my type of story at first, but I ran my eye over it carefully and didn’t see anything too explicit, so I hopped in and watched the relationship grow and develop. Mike was very kind to Jessica, and if the situation was different it would have worried me that he was “grooming” her for something. But he did his best to leave her better than he found her, and the ending is poignant and satisfying as we see Jessica stepping out confidently into a new life with someone who cares for her.

The way things are in the real world, I have a hard time believing something as delicate as this would work out well, but it was a pleasant read. I like the care and tact you’ve treated the story with, and the characters are colorful and real and amusing. The timeline is helpful to set the pace for each situation, and I don’t have anything specific to suggest for improvement. Perhaps the use of Size 4 Verdana would help to ensure visibility across devices.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
Greetings,

This is a charming poem with lots of potential for inspiration and beauty. Your vocabulary shines with vivid imagery and colorful metaphors which make for an engaging and picturesque read. However, I wonder why you enclosed it with quotation marks and included a period/full stop at the end of each line. The reading flow of your free verse would be greatly improved if one were not drawn up and forced to pause at each line. I appreciate the wisdom of your theme and the care you’ve given to creating this piece; all it needs are a few minor adjustments to enhance our overall enjoyment of it.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Under The Sea  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings,

Well, well… a rather darkly amusing tale of two men in a submarine. You seem to write with a wry British wit, describing the situation in a deadpan manner which would be rather distressing if it wasn’t obviously an absurdity.

You’ve brought the situation together in a quick and simple way from beginning to end, though perhaps I see a bit of falter at the beginning where we are informed that the submarine sprang a leak, and the end, where we are told it simply ran out of oxygen. I guessed perhaps that Max’s banging on the side of the vessel made a hole in it. The revelation of the oxygen valve was a bit of a different take on the situation.

We are reminded of much more serious things by this flash fiction, with possible themes of the difficulties of human interactions in a restricted space (it reminds me of the Donald Barthelme story Game…) and the foolish hubris of men as they think they can plumb the merciless ocean depths unscathed.

I would suggest using Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices, and if you remember the prompt you wrote it for and whether it won or not, that would be a fun detail to add to it.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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for entry "~ Meeting in IRL ~" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (4.5)
Greetings, Ruwth,

I love how deep and long lasting this community is, and I love having you as part of it. Your relationships with so many people here have left an impact, and we see the memories of your years spent here in your blog.

This is a good response to the forum question, as you describe your in-person interactions with some of the members of WdC and back everything up with a tidy paper trail. I marvel how you can dig up the old posts and items. I went to look at your item about going to meet Marc, and I'm amazed that you could provide links to SM's posts from 2010... Eight years later! *Shock2*

Adding the gentle plug for your friend's published book is a great idea, I'll have to check that out soon. It's so much fun for me to meet others who have been here far longer than I, and catch a glimpse of how the site used to be (not that it's changed so much over the years *Wink* )

Your writing is clear and engaging, and the tease about your older item makes us want to stop by for a read. But definitely, do catch us up some day on what it was actually like to meet Marc *Delight* Rest assured we’d love to know. I’ve gone and fanned the three people you’ve tagged, and I see one of them is a Moderator. Cool! I think of myself as “case colorblind” because I’m on good terms with everyone here… some people say they’re bashful about reviewing higher level cases, but I don’t mind at all. Mostly because I’m not the most in-depth of reviewers… *Laugh*

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Have You Ever?  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

I found this using the Random Read and Review button.

A heartfelt existential question to all of us, which can be summed up as “have you ever truly lived?” It builds on itself with gentle repetition, leading us from the simple experiences of life to the more transcendental ones, reminding us that life is more than merely surviving or making a living.

I can say truthfully that I’ve done at least some of these things, as it relates to sitting quietly and considering the serious philosophical issues of life. My people skills aren’t the best, but I hope I’ve been a comfort to someone in my life. It reminds me of the Emily Dickinson poem, “if I can stop one heart from breaking, I shall not have lived in vain…” or something like that. I too, have written about this subject, in these song lyrics: "Pause" Open in new Window.

The alternating indents help us to read it easily and not appear as a solid block of text. I always recommend Size 4 Verdana, but it’s optional.

This was a lovely little poem, brief but thought provoking.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (4.5)
Greetings,

I found this enigmatic poem using the Random Read and Review button

I like the way you use quadruple rhymes and nonsensical imagery to bring forth a serious message about conformity and harmony. One can take it to mean we need to search our hearts and discover our true motives for behavior… are we showing off our commitment to good works to be admired in the community, or are we serving out of the goodness of our hearts?

Politically speaking, the country’s a mess from any perspective, so I don’t want to go in that direction… you’ve woven a meaning that could apply to many situations or to none at all, as the reader sees fit, but we can feel the sincerity of your words and the frustration at the status quo.

I always recommend Size 4 Verdana font to ensure readability and accessibility across devices.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings,

I found this using the Random Read and Review button.

You approach a tragic and timeworn subject - war - in a fresh and creative way. I like the rhyme scheme and flow, which is easy to read and brings continuity without being overly trite. The theme is clear, and we can feel the pain of the narrator as a Gold Star parent in a timeless and stateless setting.

I noticed one awkward moment: “excited to battle with me” sounds like the son wants to argue with the parent, which isn’t the case at all. Other than that, a line count and using Size 4 Verdana font, I would also recommend using three relevant genres, possibly “War” and “Drama.”

This was a heartfelt and haunting read.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Uranus  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

The Read and Review button has given me one of your items again.

This is an amusingly nerdy poem which adheres to the facts as provided by a quick check of Wikipedia. For being a Doctor of Phoolishness, this is hardly nonsensical but rather informative. I can see the initial attempt at rhyming is given up in favor of a steady-ish meter, which is easy to read and lends a poetic feel without the strained triteness of rhyme. An interesting read which reminds one of the vastness and depth of the universe, and the long and arduous process of discovering what’s out there.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Review of Aftermath  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings,

Yikes. I feel this. You’ve captured the emotional turmoil involved in so many things, from basic human relationships to big serious interactions that could change the world. It almost hurts just to read this, because I don’t know how many times I’ve felt like that myself. The lines are perfectly balanced and flow smoothly down the page, drawing us along through the narrator’s experience and tying the beginning and end together with steady repetition, adding a lyrical quality.

I would add “Drama” as a third genre, and depending on what your intentions were in writing it, a dropnote with some info about prompts or larger story arcs would be helpful. I see it’s in a folder with a name, possibly that of a character in a story project. Also, size 4 Verdana font is always recommended to ensure readability and accessibility across devices.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Review of Wonky Steve  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings,

What a fun and humorous vignette of a character. He could almost be someone in the modern world at first glance, but we soon see that the setting is in an older world full of pirates, resembling Treasure Island. I can’t think of anything to improve upon here, but it depends on what role the character will play in your larger story. Is he merely a minor player, intended as comic relief or perhaps a foil to some more sober minded character? Or is he going to be the hapless protagonist who stumbles across a great fortune and perhaps becomes more developed and rounded out as he faces various challenges? It’s impossible to tell from this vignette, but it was definitely an enjoyable read.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
Greetings,

Found this while using the Random Read and Review button again.

I love your summarization of Jane Austen’s writing style and the things a young lady needed to know and understand back then. This newsletter is informative and interesting, with an approachable and conversational style. The colored font is cute. You’ve shared some of your favorite things about your favorite author, and made us remember how much we also enjoy her works.

I think it’s quite a thought provoking idea, the balance of dialogue and narrative in a story. I try to use a lot of dialogue… in fact, I love dialogue as a way to draw characters and “show” without “telling.” It helps me avoid a “corny narrator voice,” which Jane herself probably wasn’t too concerned about, as I remember she had a pretty expressive narrative style. Most writers did back then; Charles Dickens, for example, used lots of telling in his stories.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Greetings,

I’m here for I Write 2024.

A brief and enjoyable story about a dishonest car repair shop owner who gets what’s coming. You have all the essential elements of a flash fiction: beginning, middle and end, well sketched characters, and a relatable situation with a good moral. We’ve all had experiences where someone was obviously lying, and it can be difficult to know how to respond. This was a satisfying ending as we see the brash and careless shop owner shown up by a smart customer (if he’s really smart he’ll have his car towed out of that shop - if Robert lies about being available, what else will he lie about?)

Grammar and spelling and all that are great; there was nothing here to pull me out of the story. I went along wondering what would happen next and if there would be a dark twist or something. I like the realistic “kitchen sink drama” type of setting you’ve chosen; it’s instantly recognizable and easy to follow.

Formatting is excellent - now that I asked SM how to fix the Comic font display on my iPad, I have nothing left to fuss about with that. I would recommend you add a third relevant genre to the item, since that will help you get more visibility and more opportunities to be nominated for a Quill Award. “Career” or “Technology” would be fine.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings, Rick,

I found this with the Random Read and Review button.

A charming summary of what could be a long and fascinating fantasy saga, built with lovely picturesque language that captures the essence of the two fairy tribes. You show us the elements of what make them unique to the lands they hail from, and we see the conflict between them as they try to acquire the magic crystal. The potential for a peaceful resolution is promised in the meeting of the two characters, and we hope eagerly for an expanded story someday to explore the colorful dynamics of this setting.

I have nothing to suggest other than perhaps a font enlargement (Size 4 Verdana is preferred) and a continuation of the story.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: E | (5.0)
Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

This is a double fun review for me because it showed up using the Random Read and Review button. I love riddles, though I have a certain impatience with mind games and puzzles… I have a quick mind for the most part, but the silly thing about that is if a puzzle (those logic “fill in who did what when according to a few cryptic clues” come to mind) takes me more than ten minutes or so to figure out I’ll toss it aside or look at the answers *Rolling*

Fortunately, your creative approach to Pi didn’t take long at all for me to discover the inherent meaning built into it. And you didn’t drag it out too long, either, as we know Pi is actually an infinite number… an extra amusing touch is added by the observation that in fact, a title of two characters is too short. I’ve done that once with the subtitle… or was that a blog entry? Anyway, a thoroughly enjoyable read, carefully constructed and making perfect sense. The note in the subtitle about “purely platonic” and the general wording about the whole and the central concept reminds me of my Mom’s Philosophy classes she’s working on, taught by Dr. Roy Clouser, who studied under Dr. Herman Dooyeweerd many decades ago. Philosophy is a fascinating subject that can put you to sleep, paradoxically… *Sleeping*

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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Greetings,

A cute chapter in a romance saga. You have all the elements of a good story and then some: likable characters with internal and external conflicts, love and snuggles, adventures, mishaps, misunderstandings, and questions that make us wonder what happens next. I may drop by your port to see the rest of the story. It reminds me a little bit of Snoopy’s attempt at the Great American Novel: “It was a dark and stormy night. Suddenly, a shot rang out. The maid screamed. A door slammed. Suddenly, a pirate ship appeared on the horizon!”

But honestly, there’s nothing wrong with that at all. It was a fun read.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Greetings,

This was fascinating and deeply alarming, as we see a timid and mild young man forced into a very strange position. As background for a novel, it does its job well, though I see some hints at the quickness or sketchiness of the writing. Your unique style is evident, showing more than you tell and making us read between the lines and pick up the cues of the context and setting. Remember as you write the novel, the four main ingredients of good literature: goals, stakes, obstacles and character development arcs.

I don’t have much to suggest here, but I’m pretty sure I want to know what happens next. (That isn’t a promise to get around to reading or reviewing the novel if you provide access, however. I’m terrible with big items. I’ve already forgotten about someone’s review request.)It provides a good opening. Will Gregor be the main protagonist, or is he the antihero who gets squelched in the end, or is it something else? Lots of potential here for a long fantasy saga.

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep writing *HeartT*


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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Greetings,

Nice! Allow me to waste your time with a complimentary review of this fun little quiz. I remember building my own quiz for "Game of Thrones" Open in new Window. and being a little confused by the possibilities of a “weighted” score or a non weighted one. I see now that such an option has a lot of potential for “labeling” people, like the pesky irresistible quizzes we take sometimes on websites with a million ads, which promise to tell you what kind of Squishmallow you are if you tell them what kind of movies, books, donuts and other things you like… *Laugh*

I can’t think of anything to correct or suggest here; it helped me understand the point of an element in the quiz building process, and it was fun and also thought provoking, as I chuckled and asked myself how happy my morning meal was and whether I care if the chicken came first or the egg (I don’t!)

Take care, thanks for sharing, and keep up the good work *ThumbsUpL* *HeartT*
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Greetings and Happy Account Anniversary!

I just couldn’t resist another one of your offerings here… I see this is a darker and more dramatic episode. You have painted an all-too-realistic picture of something that could easily happen in real life, with Mark’s foolishness leading to a terrible disaster. I marvel at how you can take a single prompt word and create a memorable story out of it. The little details of the car trip and the characters are easily visualized without being too exaggerated or stereotypical. The tension rises right from the start as we see Mark running and slowly guess what happened as the situation unfolded. We are left at the same spot we were in the opening, wondering what will become of Mark and feeling the distress of this cautionary tale. It reminds me of things I see in the news.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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for entry "Moss (June 19 - Moss)" Open in new Window.
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Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
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Another brief tale from your collection. The premise of those awful big box bargain basement gnomes taking over the neighborhood with moss is quaint and absurdly, darkly amusing. One can apply the theme to different situations; it makes me think of the issues of litter and “trendy trash” that goes from the store to the landfill all too quickly with disastrous consequences. I also can’t help being reminded of what it’s like to live in Florida for any length of time - Spanish moss has the same insidious properties of dank, humid, “murderous” takeover that your fairytale moss does. Indeed, I suspect Spanish moss is the cause of a lot of sickness that goes around down here in the tropics. Bleh.

It also reminds me of the “pillar of salt” story of Lot’s wife; one single failure or moment of weakness led to her demise, even as she understood the source of the problem. You’ve made a quick and creative tale which was a fun read.

Take care, thanks for sharing and keep writing *Smile* *HeartT*


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