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Review of Hypnik’s Accord  Open in new Window.
Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I clicked on the Read and Review option and it took me to your wonderful story.

I see you are new - I would like to welcome you most warmly to the site! *Cow**Balloonr*

Someone (your protagonist) contemplates making an irrevocable choice. But it is a choice and free will of the person speaking that dictates the results here. One can think of things without acting on them.

I did not know what the title referred to, but that may just be a failing on my part with the reference.

This was my favorite passage:

"I had 4 seconds to make peace with the world, 4 seconds to come to terms with relationships lost, conversations without resolve, and hopes never realized."

These are four seconds that one set for oneself. So it is a self-imposed punishment.

I thought this was very well written and engaging to me as a reader. The subject matter (suicide) is disturbing, but you handle it in a tasteful and provocative way.

My reviews are reactions to what I have read and are not meant to be detailed edits. It's been a pleasure visiting with you and reading your work!

HOOves


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for entry "Fictional Town" Open in new Window.
Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
I was thinking about this town. All the ones you name are good suggestions. Seeing Pemberly would be awesome. Because of where I live now, the closest place to me (about an hour and a half away) is Mayberry. It is a nice town that it is based on where Andy Griffith was born. It looks like on the TV show.

Other than that, I would go to Stars Hollow, Ct. from Gilmore Girls. *Heartv*
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Review of Memories of Home  Open in new Window.
Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Photo Taken By My Human June 2009

A YaHOO ReMOO from HOOves!!!

*Cow**Balloons*



What brought Hoovsie meandering in a space time continuum over to your port?

*Cow* I saw your poem featured in this week's Poetry Newsletter and came to read. Congratulations on being featured in the Newsletter! *Cow**Balloonb*

What does hoovsie think about while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea* With that picture, I thought about my Dad, who fought in the Battle of the Bulge. I wish I had the sense to ask him more about it before he passed. And he passed right after Christmas so this was a big reminder of him. He was a funny guy so that brings smiles any day that I think of him. How did he manage to remain so positive about life after seeing what he saw in WW II. I wonder about that a lot, but, again, had not the sense to ask when he was here.

What does hooves moo and applaud about while reading your item?

This was my favorite part:

"There’s magic in the first snowfall.
The memories that are recalled
in places that seem dark and bleak -
like snowflakes, each one is unique."

My Dad was an Army soldier, one of many, but he was a totally unique being, just like those snowflakes. He would call me a knucklehead for calling him snowflake, but that was Dad.

Great poem that brought back memories very vividly. Well done! *Thumbsup*


HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. tHiNG a.k.a. 4ps

P.S. I love to read and send reviews. It has been lovely to visit with you!

Making a Difference One Review at a Time in 2018! *Cow**Balloons**Type*

Ta Ta until we meet again in another place and time....

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Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Boo when we first brought her home

A YaHOO ReMOO from HOOves!!!

*Cow**Balloons*



What brought Hoovsie meandering in a space time continuum over to your port?

*Cow* I saw your poem featured in this week's poetry newsletter and came to read. Congratulations on being selected to be in the Newsletter! *Cow**Balloons*

What does hoovsie think about while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea* I still remember when mine was a puppy (see above). She had the same sort of style and attitude. We couldn't put antlers on her because she just wouldn't have it. That was the last time I tried to pose her or dress her up.

She got her point across with style.

What does hooves moo and applaud about while reading your item?

This was my favorite part:

"Her cute expression will beguile,
but she prefers her domicile,"

My baby is almost 12 now and she loves her home and special places inside it. She has three beds that I make every Monday.

Well, you get the picture. Lovely poetic portrait of a beloved family member.

Well done!

*Thumbsup*

HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. tHiNG a.k.a. 4ps

P.S. I love to read and send reviews. It has been lovely to visit with you!

Making a Difference One Review at a Time in 2018! *Cow**Balloons**Type*

Ta Ta until we meet again in another place and time....

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Review of lonely night.  Open in new Window.
Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I clicked on the Read and Review option on the left hand side of the screen and it took me to your "lonely night", a very poetic piece of writing.

I see you are new so I would like to moo a warm welcome to the site to you!!! *Cow**Balloonr**Cow*

I like that this goes against assumptions about being cold and lonely. A person could be lonely in the heat of summer, also, and you describe this so well.

To me, this is the most memorable passage:

"one more night where I wrapped the disconsolate cold of loneliness.
one more night alone."

In this way you show how a person can be cold in summer, also.

Very fine work! I enjoyed reading very much.
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Review of Magic pt.2  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I clicked on the Read and Review option on the left side of the screen and it took me to your fine story.

I would like to cordially welcome you to the site! *Cow**Balloonr*

Your story is rich with foreshadowing, as Elena tries to live normally while having feelings and premonitions about things she cannot yet comprehend. It seems, at first, as if the danger is at school. Later we learn that the danger is really much closer to home.

You convey a lot about Elena and her reliance on her friend, Sophia, also. Sophia is described as a tall blonde, but I did not have a clear picture of Elena, but maybe that was given in an earlier chapter. The mother character seems a bit harsh and firm, but that is because she is preparing to tell Elena something she would rather not have to say. That was the feeling I got as a reader. In the end, it is clear that mother is hiding something that Elena feels she needs to know.

I think you did a fine job with your story excerpt here.

My reviews are typically reactions to what I have read instead of detailed edits. Others do that better than I ever could, but I enjoy reviewing the text and what the story conveys to me.

Well done!


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Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (1.0)
I clicked on Read and Review and it brought me to your Altar of SPAM.

I assume from your item description you desire a one-star here. Let me know if that is not the case. I enjoyed reading this very much.

We used to have a friend (HE has gone to the great heaven of SPAM delights now) who used to stockpile SPAM in his basement. When his wife would go out of town, he lived on SPAM. We offered to take him out to eat, but no dice. He actually liked the stuff.

The part about gelatinous rot was moving.

Great SPAM! One star for you!

HOOves *Laugh*
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Sniffing Out the Cats Next Door

I clicked on Read and Review and here I am. I was meant to read this today as my Basset hound family member is snoring at my side. She was a little agitated earlier so I will read her this when she wakes up.

This was my favorite part:

"Chase our tails

Flap our ears

Baby we ain't

Got no fears!"

I think you have captured the fact that their main goal and focus in life is eating. The only fear might be not getting a treat constantly from the humans.

Loved it!

*Heartv*
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Review of News Story  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Photo Taken By My Human June 2009

A YaHOO ReMOO from HOOves!!!

*Cow**Balloons*



What brought Hoovsie meandering in a space time continuum over to your port?

*Cow* I clicked on the Read and Review option on the left hand side of the screen and it took me right to your fine News Story.

What does hoovsie think about while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea*I had never heard of car push-ups before. It sounds quite dangerous and I was nervous to read what would happen.

What does hooves moo and applaud about while reading your item?

It all seems to be happening at this gas station. At first I thought the duck on a leash would be the story, but I was wrong. And the facts were all straightly reported, unlike some of the made-up stuff on the news nowadays.

I enjoyed reading this and it took me back in time to a humorous and simpler sort of life at the filling stations.

Nice work!

*Thumbsup*

HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. tHiNG a.k.a. 4ps

P.S. I love to read and send reviews. It has been lovely to visit with you!

Making a Difference One Review at a Time in 2018! *Cow**Balloons**Type*

Ta Ta until we meet again in another place and time....

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Review of Better Days  Open in new Window.
Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Something to do with a favorite Television Series on BBC/Netflix

A YaHOO Review from HOOves!!!

*Cow**Balloons*



What brought HOOves to meander and glide in a space time continuum over to your port?

*Balloonr*I am the judge for today in "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.. Thanks for entering! *Delight*

I am reading and reviewing your item at 10:13 AM, WDC time, and storing it in my review tool for later delivery, after the contest winners are announced. As per the contest rules, no subsequent revisions or edits were considered in writing this review.

This is done so that I can give the next prompt at noon and announce the winner as close to that time as possible. I also like to send out reviews to all the entrants when time permits, so it gives me the morning to do that, also.

What does HOOves think about and contemplate while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea* I thought about how sad it seems for the rose bush, in keeping with the prompt. Your poem flows very well.

What does HOOves applaud and moo about while reading your item?

To me, this was the saddest and most moving part:

"No grave would await the bush's demise
There were no feelings in it's mate's eyes"

To be cared for in life and at the end is a great and cherished blessing that all do not share.

Very moving poem - well crafted and the metaphor for life comes through clearly.

*Thumbsup*

The Writer's Cramp is a great way to meet other writers (by reviewing their entries) and to get your work read. Also, many Newsletter items featured and Quill entries have originated from experienced writers who regularly read in "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.. Whether you win or not on a particular day, rest assured that your item will be read by those on this site who enjoy reading for its own sake.

4ps a.k.a. HOOves, sometimes tHiNg

P.S. I am someone who loves to read and review. That is a pretty simple statement and it is true, in the spirit of Ernest Hemingway, who once said, "Write one true thing."

Making a Difference One Review at a Time in 2018! *Cow**Balloons**Type*

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for entry "Crystal Clear" Open in new Window.
Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Based on a television series on BBC/Netflix

A YaHOO ReMOO from HOOves!!!

*Cow**Balloons*



What brought Hoovsie meandering in a space time continuum over to your port?

*Cow* You sent me a nice review and we are doing this I Write in 2018 activity, so here I am to read and review.

What does hoovsie think about while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea* I could identify with these words about aging and getting slower.

What does hooves moo and applaud about while reading your item?

I like that it is crystal clear now - that only happens some of the time in my barn. I am slow to get things, but when I do they overwhelm me.

You did fine work with the syllable count. I like the name as Crystal is a name in my family tree of a lot of people.

The rustic old water pump imagery is vivid as I remember such a pump on my grandparents farm in Iowa.

Very well crafted as always!

*Thumbsup*

HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. tHiNG a.k.a. 4ps

P.S. I love to read and send reviews. It has been lovely to visit with you!

Making a Difference One Review at a Time in 2018! *Cow**Balloons**Type*

Ta Ta until we meet again in another place and time....

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Review of Mobile pattern  Open in new Window.
Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I clicked on the Read and Review option on the left side of the screen and it took me to your fine poem.

The drifting of the shells is an apt metaphor for life in general. I think your words fit the picture perfectly and take the reader a bit farther to look at how life changes as we go.

This was my favorite part:

"Mirth and sorrow come
Alternately to form an
Ever-changing life cycle.?

Exquisite words, carefully chosen and crafted -

Well done, indeed!

*Cow**Balloonp**Heartv**Cow*
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Review by ♥HOOves♥ Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I clicked on Read and Review and it took me to your fine poem about what a park bench saw.

I like the unique and creative point of view. I bet a bench sees a lot of comings and goings, not to mention strange behavior.

This was my favorite part:

"Seven squirrels in trees and four birds taking flight
This old bench will tell what it saw in day and night"

It is fun to imagine all that the bench would tell us about what it sees and about humans and animals interacting with each other.

Very original and well written! I enjoyed reading this very much!

*Cow**Balloonr**Cow*
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Review of rains over me.  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I clicked on the Read and Review option *Glasses* on the left hand side of the page and it took me to your fine poem, entitled, "rains over me".

The reference to getting soaked makes me think this is literally about rain, but as a metaphor for life and taking chances with things.

This was my favorite part:

"I heard your voice and I knew that I wasn't alone you kept me company
when I didn't want you
today I knew I wasn't alone"

Lots of people find comfort in the rain. I think anyone who does will identify with this fine poem!

Welcome to the site! *Cow**Balloonr**Cow*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I clicked on the Read and Review option on the left hand side of the screen and it took me to your fine poem.

This time of transition to autumn is my favorite time of the year. I have been in Louisiana in the spring time and late winter (for weeks at a time working) and can only imagine what fall would be like. I have a picture of it in my head, thanks to your poem.

This was my favorite passage because the imagery is so vivid and fine:

"The lingering, lonesome sound
of a distant train whistle
slowly, surely gets swamped
by the summer serenade
of frogs singing from the bayou
and the chirping of crickets
crouching in the bushes."

I live somewhat north, but still in the south. We hear that train whistle in the evening and early morning here too.

Wonderful poetry - I enjoyed reading very much! My reviews are more a reaction to what I read than an attempt at detailed editing suggestions. I go with what I enjoy doing here, which is reading and picturing things in my head. Thanks for taking me on a journey to Louisiana again!

*Cow**Ball**Cow*


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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
I clicked on the Read and Review option and it took me to your fine poem.

This is a poem about faith and its rewards, which are many. And God does know our hearts, that's for sure. With rhyming couplets you convey this very well.

This was my favorite passage:

"The Almighty Being who envelops the sky,
Knows whose heart is beating for Jesus and why,"

That last line that starts with "Why", I would change so that it starts with something like

"Still" perhaps insead of "why" because why is repeated in that line and in the 2nd line ending of the same stanza.

That is my suggestion, but ultimately it is your poem and I'm not the expert - you are.

I enjoyed my reading visit with you very much, as always! Well done!

*Cow**Balloonr**Cow*
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Boo Next to My Desk
A YaHOO ReMOO from HOOves!!!

*Cow**Balloons*



What brought Hoovsie meandering in a space time continuum over to your port?

*Cow* You sent me a very nice review, so here I am to read and review your story.

What does hoovsie think about while perusing your item?

*Cool**Idea* Joe sounds like quite a character. He seems to sense when people are receptive to his talking. You never know when humans will be open to that sort of communication.

What does hooves moo and applaud about while reading your item?

*Thumbsup* I liked that he scored a touchdown and doesn't like his bath. My Boo doesn't like a bath much either and she tries to avoid it as long as possible. But it's the nail clipping that we have to have the Vet do that she really hates. Boo and Joe would probably get along well. They are both important members of the family, I reckon.

I enjoyed reading this very much and could picture all the action happening.

Very well written!

HOOVES, a.k.a. COWser Soze, a.k.a. tHiNG a.k.a. 4ps

P.S. I love to read and send reviews, which are my reactions to what I have read. It has been lovely to visit with you!

Making a Difference One Review at a Time in 2018! *Cow**Balloons**Type*

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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I clicked on Read and Review and it brought me to your fine story.

This brought back memories of many Christmas trips in the car. Siblings can be so annoying at the time and endearing in memory, can't they?

Grandpa tracking the route and progress of Santa and his reindeer sounded like something my father would have done for his grandkids. I don't think my grandfathers were as into weather as my Dad was.

This brought a happy tear to my eyes and I enjoyed reading very much. It brought me a little bit of Christmas magic in July!

Well done!

*Cow**Holly2**Cow*

*Heart*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I clicked on the Read and Review option on the left side of the screen and it took me to your wonderful, inspirational story, Jacob's House.

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I see you are new and I would like to warmly welcome you to the site! *Cow**Balloonr**Cow*

This story is told from the heart and will definitely appeal to children of all ages. What a wonderful life your characters of Hannah and Jacob have led. They didn't have any greedy or selfish thoughts, all their lives, but ended up living in a castle. It snuck up on them - the realization of all they had achieved.

There are a lot of self-aggrandizing people in the world and a lot of them are politicians. It is refreshing to read about a mayor who cared more for his people than he did for himself. It all worked out for him, the end.

I thought this story was exceedingly well written and I enjoyed every word.

My reviews are not meant as detailed edits or critiques. I do what I enjoy here, which is reading and writing about my reactions to what I have read.

You might want to check out "The Writer's Cramp" Open in new Window.. It is a prompt driven, daily contest. I am one of the rotating judges for it and I know all the judges would enjoy reading your work if that is something you would enjoy.

Again, you are most welcome here and I am delighted to meet you!


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Welcome to the site! *Cow**Balloonr**Cow*

This poem is so fascinating in the subtle way it changes when the order of the lines is reversed. It has a lot to say about the world we live in. I think the first stanza most closely represents my feelings in the matter. The speaker/protagonist in the first part wants to make a positive change and feels it is in their power to do so.

The second stanza, to me, is more about a sort of helpless resignation to the inevitable problems and obstacles that face us in life.

It is obvious that you put a lot of thought into this and the careful choice of words is both eloquent and moving. With a different approach and word order, you totally change the thrust of what you have written.

When I review, I am giving you my reaction to the writing. I do not enjoy detailed edits so that is not my focus. It is an approach that works for me, but each of us has to find our own path to enjoying the process that is reviewing.

Very well done indeed! I enjoyed reading your words. Bravo!
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Review of Exhaustion  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
I clicked on Read and Review and this took me to your fine story.

I like the title as it conveys the fact that she is exhausted in many ways - from work at home and in the working world, and from having someone who is so deceitful in her life.

There is some ominous foreshadowing on what the reaction might be. Confronting this sort of thing can be even more exhausting to all. The one part that gives me (as a reader) hope is her fantasy of a better man. Of course there is one out there. She just has to summon her energy and look.

I think the color of the lipstick you mean to have is pink. You spelled it piuk with a typo. *Noter* Otherwise, I thought this was a very powerful and moving story.

Well done!

*Cow**Balloonr*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I clicked on the Read and Review option and was transported to your fine poem.

You can always count on the birds to come back and to tell you when it is time for it to be spring. They are very reliable, especially robins with their songs.

It gives us hope in the winter, of things to come. It is a sign of longer and warmer days if you enjoy that sort of thing. I do because it means more time in the pasture.

This was my favorite passage:

"Snow receded, revealed
the spring-soft ground
and fall abandoned field."

I could picture it all in my head, the transition of seasons then, even though now it is summer.

Thank you for transporting me!

Very vivid and cheering imagery here!

Well done!

*Cow**Ball**Cow*
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I clicked on Read and Review on the left side of the screen and it took me to your wonderful poem about spring.

All through the long winter this year, I longed for spring. Yet, there is something ominous in believing that a seasonal change may hold the answer to everything that is wrong in life.

That is how I read this, be careful what you wish for as there may be a catch or something about the change of this season that is bit off-putting.

This was my favorite passage:

"the caterwauling stops and
they withdraw without emotion
but the squirrels persist with their cynical rambling."

I agree that squirrels are rodents who are typically up to no good.

I liked the tone of this and the somewhat surprising caution when moving toward the warmer season. It reflects my feelings (which are mixed) as well.

Well done, indeed!

*Cow**Tulipp*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
I clicked on Read and Review on the left hand side of the screen and it took me to your fine story.

I like the title you have chosen very much. Dad is somewhat of a trickster here. I can picture my Dad doing this, too. Love the enthusiasm of the little girl. It's sort of heartbreaking what they are searching for.

You packed a lot about the parent/child relationship into a very short story.

I enjoyed reading this very much - the dialogue seems very real and true.

Well done and congratulations on your win!

*Cow**Ball**Cow**Balloonr*
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Rated: E | N/A (Review only item.)
I clicked on this because I saw it somewhere, but I can't remember where. Well, it's the heat and my memory not working right.

This looks great and I will definitely be working on an entry for this in the next few days. You have a great selection of prompts and I can tell this will be a lot of fun.

Very clear rules and your set-up is very inviting.

I look forward to a fun contest!

*Cow* *Countryus* *Cow*
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