I think that this is a very nice poem. I loved trhe rhyme and the flow made it a great read. I loved how you made the note with it. This shows your talent of poetry. You were able to take me as the reader into your words. It makes me kind of miss the mountians.
You can fill the emotion in this well written story. I could see the emotion of the lost boy when he sees his mother. Your words touched home, I am a mother with three children, and daughter chose to live with her dad. It has been over a year since I have seen her. I could not go on knowing someone had taken her away.
I loved this poem. I can not tell you much about the grammer or spelling. I am unable to tell you of the rhyme. The words took my attention away from the grading eye. I got cought up in the emotion. I could feel the loneliness of the Jester. Thinking about what his story could have been, and the blessed connection that he had with the children, was all that I could see. That is what makes a great peice.
I love this page, and found inspiration in the words. I am so insprired by the way you have it set up, and would love to take the time someday to take the idea and set one up for myself. It seems to be a wonderful way to set goals, and to monitor your growth.
Truly a work that we in this day can relate to. The wording is great, and the flow is smoothe. I found this to be a poem that is written at the right time. With all the news about the dept of USA and the government right now, your words blend right in.
You have a great talent for dialog. This is a skill that I need to improve. You were able to bring the reader into your story, and have them to feel your words. The discriptions were well written. This was an enjoyable read all the way around. I am sure you will get nothing but good reviews on this one.
I love this poem, and the picture is so clearly painted with the words that you chose to use. It brings me to think of my dad. The litteral seas have not taken him away, but the seas of time has taken most of him. We are still children to him, and I wish that the waves that took him from could bring him back for a time before he crosses that river.
Thank you for sharing this story, poem, a well done item with us.
Ida
Very well written poem. It touches a place in my heart that compares life with other creations of God. It is a talent to be able to bring such a deep subject in such a manner that the reader (no matter who they are) can be brought to understand the workings of the Lord himself.
This is a very well written poem. It is easy to read with a great flow and smoothe rhyme. I could feel the move of God on these words. I feel that it is truly inspired by God and that the words are chosen that we all can relate.
This is an item that connects our heart with God's.
I love this poem. Its flow and rhyme created a great read. The words and the message is an inspiration. I think that I read this God is truly assoiating it with each reader. The words become ours to God. This is a peice that will stick with me for a long time.
This poem is well written. The flow carries the reader into the words. I love the suprise ending, and it is relatable to many events in my life. I like the way it makes you laugh. I have enjoyed this poem and can't wait to read more. The greatest thing is the way you made the situation so visisual.
The poem is very smoothe. It reminds the reader to not take for granted the older people in our lives. They have things to share that we can learn from. Things that we would otherwise not know. You have painted a picture of the wisdom of this poet, and the thoughts that one day it maybe someone choosing your words for me.
I think that I often spend alot of time thinking about what is awaiting for us. You have chosen brought me back into my thoughts of God's plans for us. The poem is very well written. The lines read very smoothe. It brings the reader into thoughts of where we need to be going.
I love this poem, and in the days of troubles everywhere, it speaks pages to what God must be thinking. I found the read to be smoothe and very deep. I can not imagine what God thinks about what his creation has become. It took me into evaluating my own decisions.
Job well done. Thankk you for sharing this with us.
Ida
This is a well written peice. The flow made it a great read. THe subject matter is deep and takes us back to different times in our lives that make us feel as though we are the only people in a situation.
Thank you for sharing this poem with us. I can not wait to read more of your work.
This is a very special poem. The picture would be painted to each readers loss of people in their lives. Some first loves, other's lost family members, or some has lost memories of just their lives.
I think that this poem shows your real talent and skill. thank you for sharing this with us.
I love this poem. The flow was smoothe and the read was enjoyable. It reminds me of the Kentucky Men's college backetball. I have such a high on watching. It is a emotional roller coaster. I am so happy at time and mad at another. Bein ahead in the game, just isn't enough. They need to beat the other team with every basket.
THis is a very written poem. The flow kept my attention, and the flow created a enjoyable read. I was taken into the poem with the word choice that you chose. I was able to relate to the poem, and found it easy to follow.
This is a poem that reaches to everyone. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
This a wonderful poem. I love the picture that it paints. It had a smooth and enjoyable flow. I found my self back to places in my life that has helped create who I am. The words were well chosen, and the questions really brought the reader into the lines.
This was well done. Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
You are talented, and your choice of words painted a beautiful picture. I find that your poem has a great flow. It was a very enjoyable read. This poem reminded me of a baby or a small child. They are clean and waiting to be created. I wish that I could start over empty and clean.
This is a very well written poem, and it is so vivid. This is a great read. I know that the word is just waiting for the undefiled and believing hearts to bring them hopelessness and helplessness. I can relate to your words and have found myself about to give up and giving in to the battle the world and times are raging on me.
This is one of the deepest and wonderful poems that I have read in a long time. I can just see a man standing watching a family that he worked hard to create. I could feel the presence of his late wife lingering with pride side by side with the love that she is still waiting to reunite with.
This poem was a very well written poem, and I was proud to read this emotional peice.
I know the pain of moving forward. It is never easy to find the right choices to make the future any better than the past. This poem was deep. It had a great flow that created a very enjoyable read. It fits the theme of my day.
Tonight seems as though the world is hurting. Hearts are being broken. And tears are being shed. This is a great poem. Its emotion is deep and easy to relate to. I love the way that you able to explain the fear of not being remembered that most of us experience.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
This poem had great flow, and the rhyme is excellent. I was brought into your work with well chosen words. I find that this is a sweet item. One that we all can relate to in one way or another.
I hope to see more of your work. I hope that you find this site a good vent.
Ida
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