This is a great poem, and this is a fluent and enjoyable read. I can feel loneliness in the words, but I also feel that the person in the poem realizes that he/she has friends that need attention from him/her. It feels as though the person here don't really trust enough to give to others. This makes him lonely and always wanting something that the perso in the poem can not give.
I miss the feeling of the true love. I had it once I thought, and I am waiting for it to return. You captured the feeling of that new love.
I feel that your poem has a very fluent read. The emotions are strong and created sweet memories from a love that had lasted eighteen years until I was traded in for someone just four years older than our marriage.
You are very descriptive, and the poem flows well. I think that you have create a story that brought me along with your words. I love the way that you are able to create a contrast with the way the waters appear with the way it can turn.
I have enjoyed the read, and feel that it is a wonderful read.
This poem has a great flow, and its rhyme makes it to be a wonderful read. I love the message that you carry with in the lines. I Think that we all can relate. I love the way you remind us that the past can not be changed, but we have remember that the past is a text book to live for today.
I think ths picture is so cute this dog reminds me of my dog reba she may be pregnant so we have no clue if she is or not but we are not taking the chances with it and I love dogs and cats to in fact I love all animals and I can not see how no one can not care for one or hurt one or see on sit there and die with out steping in.
thank you for sharing this picture with us Ida and Charity.
I love this, and would like you to create it into a forum and group when you get the opportunity to do so. I am a single mother also, and it never gets any better.
No about this poem. It has a great flow and rhyme. I loved the way it brought me into this item.
Thank you for sharing this with us, and concider creating a place for th rest of the singles. It is a wonderful time to do so,,,,, it is mother's day coming back.
This is a very visual peice. I love the way you describe your visit, and how you make me feel the emotion of peace surrounding the the new fiend. Your words painted the picture of your visitor, and I find myself back in time. The time was when I too had a visit from someone special. In my case it was a morning dove,
This is great peice, and I think that the politics in it makes it a different kind of read for me.
The flow of this story is great. You show your talent in your skill of discription. And the dialog is fluent. This is the area that I have problems creating a flowing conversation.
THis is a Very good page. I like the way you show the pattern of the lines. I find it hard to get the beat down to a poem, but I write from my emotions. These labled items really help me learn more forms of poetry. I loe the flow, rhyme of the poem on the page. The imagery is great.
This is a great idea, and I will think on what I will be writing. I am doing my first contest, and someone sent me some gps and a suggestion to encrease the awards on my contest. I decided to pass on the kindness. I am sending you 7000 gps so that you can get the first place an awardicon.
Thank you for the opportunity to writing something new.
Ida
This would be a learning experience. I think that this is an oppurnity to study to be able to create a great an interesting item with an air of truth. I realy think that this is an interesting contest.
Thank you for sharing this wih us.
Ida
PS if you pray pleace ask God to help my fourteen year old daughter's newest baby (her little pup Fits), because he has parvo. We are giving him water every 15 minutes to try to save him.
This is a wonderful poem, and the rhyming flow makes it an exciting read. These words are fun, and I would like to have my children to read it. I don't know much about different fomats of poetry. I only write and read what I feel, and this is a fun read.
This is a wonderful group, and I see some very talented names in the list. I am proud of all that they are doing here in the writing family. I am proud of having been a part of such an encouraging place for nearly two years.
These are a very great way to show people how they empact all of us here at Writing.com. I would like to have a gift certificate or two for others her.
I am glad that I have came across this shop, and I would like to send the happiness to some newbies.
This is vey well written, and I can relate to the moods. I found the flow and the pattern with in. I am happy to have read your work. I am also caught up in the forever circling thoughts that are always dancing in my head.
i LOVE this poem. The flow is great, but the catchy part is the essage. I used to love swinging on my grandmother's porch. I spent quite a few hours escaping from the real world on her swing holding my infant brother. I think that this took me back to a happier time.
I love this poem and the adoration that you have fo your brother. The flow made it a great read, and the message hits my heart. My only living brother isn't in the best of health, and he has a mind set of family fued right.
He was a prayer answered when I was thirteen, and I abanded him by getting married at 20.
This is a great madlib. I truly enjoyed this activity. I can see that this could be amazing if I had come up with more interesting answers. I loved the direction of the story that can be created here. There could be endless laughs with the contest alone.
I like the twist. I was expecting a story about a naughty "Chicken Pal" or about bad cookies that made Santa skip the house. Then we find that Chicken Pal was just too eager for the giving season.
There were only a couple of mistakes that may have uncovered. They both were capital letters. One should have been looked instead of "looke" and maybe chicken Pal should be Chicken Pal.
WOW. Some needed GPS there. Too bad that I missed it. I am sure that it was very welcome both to the ones that received the points and those that received the reviews. Please send me a line or two to let me know when you are having another event like this one.
This is a wonderful chance to challenge myself. Though 1000 words are the usual for my writing, I think that I still need work on writing descriptive strories. I feel that this is another way to exercize my writing kills on stories, and not to always focus on poetry.
This seems like a great contest. I am very interested in this contest. Does it have to be newly created material? Does a story about angels or Heaven classify as fantasy? I would like to know a little more about it, as for what is fantasy content.
Thank you for sharing this with us. I don't have many points at the moment, but would like to donate 500 to your contest.
I read this while on the phone with my crying sister and my mother. My sister lost her neice to cancer. I was just reading this as she told me about the young lady. RIght before reading this, I spoke to my ex sister-in-law that is getting out of the hospital from a colon cancer operation. She will have to have kimo and radiation. She had lost six children to the state due to drugs. I know that a lot are running through these minds as I am reading this.
THe Good thing is that my ex sister-in-law got saved yesterday.
Thank you for sharing this you never know whose life you touch.
Ida
Very interesting peice, and it can help me if I am lost for rhyme. I like the way it ends, and I think that it puts everything in to place in the poem. Every word has a place in our lives. I think that this was a hard peice to write. I am a wordy and it would be hard to corver an idea in such a few words.
Beautiful. Haven't we all been there. The love stories of our lives are all around us. I have wanted the touch of a special someone, and the ache in my heart just to know that we would be forever. Now I want to have that feeling and the right person to feel it for.
Thank you sharing this with us.
Ida
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