This is a very good poem. The message is smoothe, and the rhyme makes for a great read. I like the AA/BB rhyme. This is second only to ABAB. I am learning more with every item that I read, and this too was a joy to read.
The only thing that distracted me was the size of the font and the bright blue letters. If the font was bigger or black, it would be easier for me to read.
I love this idea. When I had alot of time I would be a shoe in. I think that there will be alot of winners. I hope that everyone takes the time to realize how important writing.com is to each of us. I think that I could never be any closer to anyone as I am to my writing.com family.
you were able to bring me into your story. The flow was nice and the read was able to keep my attention.
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At this point after hearing the insulting tone and demeanor of this guy I started chewing on him â Look, I donât know what you people are up to, I shouldâve called the news instead and let them handle this because everyone acts surprised when I tell them there are freakâin sharp pieces of metal in the freakâin chili and all you want to do is give me the third degree!
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At this point after hearing the insulting tone and demeanor of this guym I started chewing on him. "Look, I don't know what you people are up to, I should have called the news instead .They can handle this. Everyone acts surprised when I tell them that there are freakein sharp pieces of metal in chili and all you want to do is give me the third degree!
This short well written poem is so deep. I love the message, and it simplifies love inot something everyone can relate. I was brought into the lines of your words. The flow and rhyme makes this an entertaining read. This is one of my favorates.
This is a very well written poem. The flow is smoothe and the message is related. My partner has a lovely cat. His name is chopper, and nothing could be more fun and entertaining than our little blue russian.
The only thing that I question is that I needed to know how both of her parents died at the same time.
Other than that, I was brought into the item by your descriptive words. I could feel the longing that the daughter had for approval of her parents. The confusion when she was left everthing in their will was strong. I felt the guilt when her friend tried to comfront her.
This is a touching story that has a very deep message.
You told such a wonderful story in such a few words. I have been in the shoes of the lady in the story. Loving and knowing it is better to not love than to be hurt all the time. This was something that most can relate to. If it has not happened than we know someone that it has.
This was truly inspiratonal. You seem to have the talent of total description and dialog. I have a problem fitting dialog into my work. This is the third item that I have read of your's this morning, and could not be more pleased.
Very needed words right now. So many discouragement in the news. It is wonderful to have something described in such beauty. The words were well chosen. The flow was smoothe. And you were able to take the reader into a beautiful place. This is a job well done.
The flow was great, and the rhyme is easy. I enjoyed the read. Your words brought me into your story. I think that if you write stories this would make a great one. I found this to be inspirational.
You were able to accomplish something that I find hard, and that is how easy you were able to create a smoothe beat.
These are words of fresh air. Any more in this day and age, we use this day as a day off from duties. It is good to remember that it is a day set aside fo remember and communicate with the creator. I found this poem to be easy and smoothe to read. The flow was very enjoyable.
This is a very deep poem. I love how you were able to take power back from past heart break. The words were well chosen. The lines were easy to read, and every word was related. I know the way that past memories can haunt us, and sometimes we miss our own emotions and connections to other people. This was one of my favs.
Though I really had a problem with the name you chose as your user name, I found this a very relatable poem. There were some gramar errors, but the message and the fact that you were able to take me to a place in my life was more important than any mistakes. These words were as if they were taken right from my life.
I yearn for your love, your touch and your feel
These words were beautiful and relatable to start the poem off with. The flow was smoothe, and the rhyme made it an easy read. The message was wonderful, and most have been there. You were able to bring the poem alive to the reader.
This is a very well written poem. The flow and rhyme was smoothe and the message was one that most can relate to. I found that you chose words that painted a picture and brought me into the story. I found this poem a amazing read.
I think this is a great peice, and I enjoyed the story. This is a message that we all can relate to at some point. I love the dialog. I can see the skill in this item. I have peoblems with dialog, and I am always happy to read it from others.
I was able to see this date and the thoughts that was traveling in the minds.
I love the idea, and see where this can be a deep contest. One that has you to focus on things that can ignite passions, anger, and different emotions. It can inspire cause and effect of the seven deadly sins.
I am going to check the links that I see on this page. I love the idea of this group, and would like to know more about it. I have a busy life with five children, but I want to know how I can become a part of this good cause. I do not know how to create contests and such. I would like to be able to hold one for newbies to receive awardicons to encourage them as I was when I was a new family member here.
I love this group page. I am having problems with my memory, and I think that by looking up the answers will help me remember things from my teenaged years. I will come back and answer the questions. Using Google, I hope to give the right answers.
This is a great that page, and the information is wonderful. I wonder if you have thought of holding a class with this. I think that this is a lot of things that we need to know. My self I would love to know how to hold auctions, create banners, and contests. You seem to be very smart here. I have been on since 2007, and really would like to learn more.
I would like to start a group to give awards to newbies.
Hate to see the closed sign. This page is set up well. There is enought information to lead the reader to the decision of being a member or not. I agree with the message, and have found myself searching for words so that my reviews will not be useless.
Thank you for sharing this with us for a while.\
Ida
This sounds as if it is a great idea. However, I don't see enough information on this page. I am going to follow the other item listed here. I love the picture of books. It matches the theme.
Thank you for sharing this with us.
Ida
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