We all can relate to these words. I mean I am really touched by t he message that you are displaying. I had an anxiety attact last night, and I found your words describing the emotions that I felt during the night that never seened to end. I enjoyed the read.
This has a very good poem. I love the message it shows. The flow was smothe, and the rhyme made the poem an easy read. I found it to be true. it gives the reader insight into the mind of the poet.
Thank you for writing this and sharing this with us.
Ida
I really can relate to this poem. It is the way I feel right now. Things should not be the way it is right, but it is. I am in love with my soul mate that has forgotton how to love. Maybe he just don't realize what danger he is in about loosing what he isn't sure that he does have.
I love him too much. Every thought of my day is how to make him happy. This sometimes is too much for a person, and he finds no challenge in the relationship. It wont be long until I ask him to go, and I will remember his love. Then I will find myself in an empty room.
First of all my fav teacher and the people that has been mentors to me was the English teacher. I would like to tell you that I am sure that you have made a difference in a lot of lives.
I feel intemadated reviewing your work. Due to my spelling skills and rusty Language Arts skills, I feel unworthy.
However, I do love the cheer. I found it inspiration to my frightening new adventure of novel writing.
Thank you for making a difference in the lives of many, and for sharing this with us.
Ida
With the world what it is now, relationships are so hard to keep going. I think that this is a way to keep our eyes on what keeps us going. That is love.
We are so focused on money, work, and pokitics that we no longer spend the time needed to show the attention that is needed to keep our families together.
I think I may have a poem or two that I can enter (at different times. of course).
I love the way that you used the time line. It made it so easy to read. That being said, I think that this could bring in readers from school age to adults into the story. The flow was simple and calm. I found myself being a part of the work, and that is how things should be.
I enjoyed the read. It is something that could keep the attention of anyone from the grades 4 until adult. It is nice to read something that is universal for the readers. I love the dialog because that is a skill that I truly find hard to hone in. This is a wonderful story.
This is a very good poem. The message is smoothe, and the rhyme makes for a great read. I like the AA/BB rhyme. This is second only to ABAB. I am learning more with every item that I read, and this too was a joy to read.
The only thing that distracted me was the size of the font and the bright blue letters. If the font was bigger or black, it would be easier for me to read.
I love this idea. When I had alot of time I would be a shoe in. I think that there will be alot of winners. I hope that everyone takes the time to realize how important writing.com is to each of us. I think that I could never be any closer to anyone as I am to my writing.com family.
you were able to bring me into your story. The flow was nice and the read was able to keep my attention.
Here is a sentence the may need to be rewritten.
At this point after hearing the insulting tone and demeanor of this guy I started chewing on him â Look, I donât know what you people are up to, I should’ve called the news instead and let them handle this because everyone acts surprised when I tell them there are freak’in sharp pieces of metal in the freak’in chili and all you want to do is give me the third degree!
Possibly to:
At this point after hearing the insulting tone and demeanor of this guym I started chewing on him. "Look, I don't know what you people are up to, I should have called the news instead .They can handle this. Everyone acts surprised when I tell them that there are freakein sharp pieces of metal in chili and all you want to do is give me the third degree!
This short well written poem is so deep. I love the message, and it simplifies love inot something everyone can relate. I was brought into the lines of your words. The flow and rhyme makes this an entertaining read. This is one of my favorates.
This is a very well written poem. The flow is smoothe and the message is related. My partner has a lovely cat. His name is chopper, and nothing could be more fun and entertaining than our little blue russian.
This was truly inspiratonal. You seem to have the talent of total description and dialog. I have a problem fitting dialog into my work. This is the third item that I have read of your's this morning, and could not be more pleased.
Very needed words right now. So many discouragement in the news. It is wonderful to have something described in such beauty. The words were well chosen. The flow was smoothe. And you were able to take the reader into a beautiful place. This is a job well done.
The flow was great, and the rhyme is easy. I enjoyed the read. Your words brought me into your story. I think that if you write stories this would make a great one. I found this to be inspirational.
You were able to accomplish something that I find hard, and that is how easy you were able to create a smoothe beat.
These are words of fresh air. Any more in this day and age, we use this day as a day off from duties. It is good to remember that it is a day set aside fo remember and communicate with the creator. I found this poem to be easy and smoothe to read. The flow was very enjoyable.
This is a very deep poem. I love how you were able to take power back from past heart break. The words were well chosen. The lines were easy to read, and every word was related. I know the way that past memories can haunt us, and sometimes we miss our own emotions and connections to other people. This was one of my favs.
Though I really had a problem with the name you chose as your user name, I found this a very relatable poem. There were some gramar errors, but the message and the fact that you were able to take me to a place in my life was more important than any mistakes. These words were as if they were taken right from my life.
I yearn for your love, your touch and your feel
These words were beautiful and relatable to start the poem off with. The flow was smoothe, and the rhyme made it an easy read. The message was wonderful, and most have been there. You were able to bring the poem alive to the reader.
This is a very well written poem. The flow and rhyme was smoothe and the message was one that most can relate to. I found that you chose words that painted a picture and brought me into the story. I found this poem a amazing read.
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