Hello Amber,
your expression of true feelings appeals to me.
My review is for your Wdc Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a creative member of the Wdc for another year. Have a wonderful day!
Life becomes a challenge when expectations are not met with, when dreams turn to disasters.
Your feelings and fears are clear and understandable. We walk into traps made by the self with our eyes open. We can’t blame anyone, not even fate.
What I appreciate is your language and style. Meticulous grammar and construction of sentences make the piece quite effortless and spontaneous.
Hello Peter,
a nice poem of “ifs” to read and contemplate.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on ushering in another year at the WDC. Have wonderful day!
Aside the fact that despite using the reserves of nature, there still be a lot left, I like the way you let your imagination fly.
“If I used every drop of water…”
As for love, however casually used, it has positive vibes. One of the most precious words in the dictionary of any language is Love.
I like the concluding note of your poem. The free style poem flows well.
this poem depicts the vision of an angel when surrounded by darkness. He is like a candle that shed divine light on you and your life.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on having completed yet another year of creative activity at the WDC. Have a lovely day!
You poem describes the angel visually. As he knelt by your bed, shedding the light of hope and courage, there comes new leash of life for you.
"As I woke the morning after
I felt so content without a single fear"
I am totally convinced of the divine presence that fills your mind and heart making life free and pleasurable.
With visual imagery, this rhyming poem flows well.
Hello Mela,
this is a pretty engaging story.
Both the characters are depicted clearly. Their motives inspired later events.
You have spun an interesting tale of well-thought out sequences, such as Mela’s tragic married life, her visit back to the island, her reunion with Nicholas and their long and happy marital life.
Apart from a few edits you did a good job.
Edit-
“Leak my wounds”
(Lick….)
“Nicholas Adams in your service.”
(Nicholas……at your service)
“Overexposure”
(Over exposure)
I am under the impression that the last line is not appropriate in the context. This is just my opinion.
Your statements are frank and sincere. Your method of writing is free and liberated from rules and rituals. Your pen follows its own drift of mind. I feel there is nothing wrong in doing this.
"I write one story one-way and then the next another way. Outline for one and not for another."
You can view it as a useful way and not an impediment to your writing.
My only suggestion is that you should come back to the story you left half way through a few days later. Just don't desert it.
As for outlines, they are a good beginning for great stories. They hide a story, which you alone can unlock and make it complete. you will be surprised by the outcome. I do this at times. I have never regretted it.
Good luck with your writing!
Hello Brian,
It’s a true-to-life observation of love, its changing phases and its constancy despite temptations.
My review of your thoughtful and well pondered poem is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a year older creatively, at the WDC.
Have a great day.
Content-
The undying love of the past and the fresh renewal of passion are well mixed showing the inevitabilities of life.
So they marry to fill that imaginary gap not knowing any other alternatives. As the last stanza shows true love once felt, has no alternatives after all.
Pace-
Leisurely, reflective in accordance with the thoughts and feelings, some of them, deep and profound.
It flows well with images from the past and the present.
Hello Kristina,
You told the story of your marital history in few short effective sentences. I tried to give my autobiography in twelve sentences for a writing exercise. Quite fruitful and worth trying.
My review is on this sweet little piece of nonfiction is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a creative member of the WDC for another year. Have a wonderful day!
Fifty years of togetherness, by any measure deserves applause. All the experiences, the highs and the lows, the agony and ecstasy are to be read in between the lines. Obviously, it was an ideal marriage and worth being congratulated.
The incidents you have mentioned appear to have stayed on mind for the pleasure and excitement they have given you both.
Hi Jesi,
You have used a unique figure of speech regarding wind in this poem. Winds of different seasons standing for various feelings are described quite effectively.
“Soft fall breeze
warm and sweet.”
Poet’s feelings come to fore finding expression in appealing imagery.
“Ever changing
ever lasting”
Life never stays steady and sure like the winds of change.
Free style poem flows well with simple and apt word choices.
Hi Connie,
These simple three lines hide truth of lasting kind. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a creative member of the WDC for another year. Have a wonderful day!
Nature has this effect and I am saying this out of my own experience. Whenever I feel depressed or sad, I just step out into the small patch of our garden. I wander around among the trees, walk on the grass or try to do some weeding. My gloominess disappears soon and I become normal and ready to face the world again.
The effect wind is shown quite visually in this Haiku.
"Calming, soothing wind."
The wind is not only "soft" and "gentle" but also makes a lot of difference for the sad person.
It is "soothing and calming" as well.
The brief crisp lines bring the wind to touch my face, my limbs and my spirit.
Hello Ann,
I can see the shock of the sudden passing of your husband. Death cannot be comprehended. When it happens is nobody's guess. Yet life goes on. Tragedy and heartbreak have nothing to do with the finality called death. It is the most cruel of the events of life. The departure of a loved one leaves a cypher in the wife's life.
Hello Rose,
this poem of yours talks to me on several levels. First, it shows my own assessment of self, which is vulnerable being subjected to fear, thrill, sadness and melancholy. Yet, it shows boldness and will power.
It also reminds me of my social obligations to the people, to those in need. It wakes me up to my duty. My work is not over with my retirement. It starts anew with a smile first to fill the world with positive vibrations, lend positive energy to those who suffer, who need moral strength.
"He gave it a bright smile,
To light up your world,
Your poem brings up the issues of differences of color, creed and such. It tell me to make no such demarcations between one person and the other. We are all born free and bold. Let us keep it that way.
Great poem. keep going and spread the message of equality and liberty and brotherhood.
your tribute to the old mother, Sea is praiseworthy. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being a creative member of the WDC for yet another year. Have a nice day!
This is a poem written by someone who was probably on a voyage at sea. The authentic description of the heaving, pitching and rolling seas vouches for you. How true! It wouldn't let you sleep continuously with its sudden jolts. you cannot stand steadily either on a heaving boat.
The sea is a vital part of many lives, particularly the marine life. Its cooling effect is discussed by many.
The seas occupy the major part of the earth. None can destroy it. It will be there as long as the sun and stars exist.
This free style poem flows well with visual imagery.
Hi,
I like these thoughts you have listed here. They are pretty much inspirational and provide good guidance.
The ones that l consider above the others are the second and third on the list.
I appreciate the thought that everyone has talent and that it comes out with the right attitude. No one should be underestimated.
Friends are true support. True friends are forever. Such friends last all our lives. I am lucky to have such friends who are ready to help me no matter when or where.
I like the way you have shown through an object lesson that “storms pass in life. No low spot is permanent.”
The last paragraph clearly explains what makes it easy to wrestle with the toughest battles of life. I could gather from your experiences that you and your mother were rich with patience and forbearance.
Missing TV and putting up with helping in the kitchen were not easy challenges for you. It is not just “what” they were but it is “how” you came to grips with them is the point that stands out for me.
Hello Marvellous,
this is a pretty interesting nonfiction. My review of the story is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on entering another creative year at the WDC. Have a lovely day.
Looking at the childhood scenario of yours, I get the impression that you had a wonderful childhood with a number of sweet memories to carry.
The fact that you have Indian heritage is an extra attraction that draws reader’s attention. The colourful dances, the night time gatherings, music and the bugs make a fantastic mix of memories for a five-year old girl of Oklahoma.
It is written lucidly making it easy to understand and enjoy.
The style and the leisurely pace are additional plus points.
When it comes to knowing yourself, we look in, instead of out. That way, we can watch ourselves closely. We get to know our likes and hates, our sincerity and falsehood, our thoughts about self and others. This kind of self observation shows the defects, which we can correct there and then.
I take it that you did discover yourself after all, judging by the lines,
“Where I saw myself bare, naked, exposed.”
With half the mission completed, the rest becomes much easier.
Again, answers have to come from within.
The title is spot on for the No Dialog Contest.
Hi, I am Jaya, unable to resist reviewing this splendidly narrated romance. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being creatively active at the WDC for yet another year. Have a lovely day!
Actually, the story is not far from reality. If there is an “emotional bond”, words won’t be necessary. You told a real romantic tale.
Your story makes me wing into their world of love with ease and effortlessness.
And how’s that possible?
Language and sensitivity, imagination, precise expression and many things besides.
Hello Regis,
I understand how much you miss your partner. My review here is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations! Have a wonderful day!
Judging by the tone and drift of this poem the affinity and attachment between the two of you might be imagined.
“Feel the breeze
Your hair on my face.”
Imagery shows the sharing of activities by the kindred spirits.
It is written in a simple , crisp stye with a fine choice of words.
It sounds natural and spontaneous.
I enjoyed this farm story thoroughly. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
You have very well shown the farm activities and the way all of you are working together to manage the land.
Conversation between the siblings is quite engaging and I can see how the kids learn to weed and keep the farm clean. I am also impressed that the young Dana and Marie are able to attend to milking the cows.
As the eldest in the family, you have been pretty responsible and nice to your siblings.
Your advice to your father must be quite valuable and useful.
I think there is a lesson in there in this ghost story. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a wonderful day.
So Jerry was almost dead but regained life and felt grateful for such a merciful event. Now the other person,the dead guy is Steve, who feels remorseful that his ghostly life is not what real life is.
"Jerry then realised that life is worth living, even with all the restrictions, to live each day as if it were his last."
Obviously, restrictions refer to the Covid infection.
The above last sentence sums up the message inherent in the story.
Enjoyed the dialog and the brief accidental visit to the other world.
I can see that it is a tough challenge to deliver a double acrostic and you did it well. A short love poem that sounds assuring to the beloved.
"You are my only"
Much to read in between the lines. The usage of "pragma" is new to me and I am glad I came across it.
This sounds like a "model of love" no doubt.
Imagery shows them as ideal lovers and worth emulating by others.
My review of this interesting poem is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations for being creative for another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!
This poem wins my praise on several counts. First, the theme. I am impressed that you want to set right the past mistakes.
Second, the tone. There is a note of urgency to accomplish the mission you had for yourself.
“And I can’t wait”
Finally, I like your confidence to go ahead and correct the things you think are not right.
And then, there is this concern to reveal the love that is inherent in human nature.
this is a flash relevant to our pitiable present. My little review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on being creatively busy for one more year at the WDC. Have a great day!
This story the picture of future climate. There’s no more clean snow for the kids to play with.
“…kids won’t be able to build a snowman or throw a snowball…”
That’s a bleak picture indeed.
It makes us realise that the greedy are accountable for this chaotic present. They should soon wake up and make amends so our earth is saved from further damage.
If not, punishment is not far away.
It mirrors the cause and effect of the damage done against our earth in quite an appealing way.
Hello Gray,
There’s definitely a push and a smile behind this poem. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on opening another year at the WDC. Have a nice day!
Smile is no doubt doubly blessed like mercy. The giver and the one that receives are blessed with joy.
Your comparison of a smile with the beauty of autumn makes sense.
It is so much easier to smile than to frown.
Your poem has imagery drawn from nature. It is quite visual.
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