Hi LisaMarie,
this is a short piece, yet profound.
I got it from your port to review for your WDC Account Anniversary.
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This story is relevant in our present world. Unnumbered girls fall for suave talk and false attention. Once their need is over, these girls are discarded pronto.
Your character is shown realistically. You conveyed a convincing message through the way in which she recovered from a shocking discovery of her evil-minded paramour. It is a healthy way to recover and find roots again instead of being bogged down by an unpleasant past.
Hi Rick,
this is a touching story about the bond between father and child.
I found it in your port and I couldn't resist reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary.
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Characters-
Both characters are well defined.
You have done well showing the father's pain at his cancer ridden four-year-old daughter.
" he had laughed with a tightened chest and choking in his throat."
The young daughter is naturally shown. Too innocent and sweetly unaware of the serious situation.
"“Well not the red ones Daddy, they're the prettiest ever!”,
The appearance of red leaf in the car is credibly shown. The reader feels like suspending disbelief.
I just read your article Becoming Human: The Evolution of Walking Upright and I am impressed. This topic is new to me and left me wondering why I never thought about it. You have convincingly rationalized as to "why bipedalism evolved".
Your lucid explanation as to why arms were longer than legs caused me to see the way they were more tree-bound rather than living on ground.
Another important difference you have brought to focus is the evolvement between male and female of the species. Interesting facts with a logical analysis.
The age-old practice of women caring for home and kids and men taking care of their basic needs is still relevant to many societies and even countries. I think there is logic in this practice at least till quite sometime ago.
Hi,
your nonfiction story reminded me of my experience of opening an account back in '92. I was a complete new comer to the computer. I was keen to learn how to work on computer because both my sons are good at it and I didn't want to be left behind. Also, I wanted to type my thesis on Word.
I actually joined an institute later on to learn methodically.
In your case, it was your mom who helped you create an account, that you changed from time to time. This too is fun.
I could see the fun and excitement of a thirteen-year-old creating and deleting accounts for different reasons.
glad you finally found an appropriate username to your satisfaction.
Hi,
it is a pretty vocal script on your father. I don't see you addressing him. You referred to him as a third person.
Let's call it something like "letting out my feelings" or something similar.
Yes, sometimes we find criticism quite hurting, especially from a parent. It is quite possible that he or she is just letting out steam because of their own work problems or some other bothersome issues.
However, my sympathies are with you. You can't do much rebelling under the circumstances. Just wait for the right moment to be freed of daily torture.
It is decent on your part to take vehemence and uncalled for hostility good naturedly instead raising a ruckus.
Blood bonds run quite deeply indeed.
River's end is the end of sorrow.
This is eloquently stated in this free style poem.
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Format is attractive as the content itself.
This is the story of how the person in the poem overcame loss, grief and "unfortunate things" to cite a few.
The destination of a flow of water is to find its source of union.
The very first line bring in the analogy between human life and a river. It flows through several ups and downs to reach the eternal and steady ocean. It makes sense to see life going through trials to finally find its own peace giving solutions or compromises.
I am reminded of Bertrand Russell's essay on Happiness.
It flows well with fine imagery showing desirable progress in life.
Hi,
this story takes me along. its visuals are telling and there is an air of reality around it.
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Feelings are shown quite naturally. This could happen in real life. The farm boy visiting the local store to shop in. The lady running the store appears young and emotional with her recent past. So does Daniel, who suffered loss too. Sounds sentimental.
Much against their reluctance, they could feel the pull of inexplainable attraction and wish to linger on.
Nice to read a seasoned writer, whose expression of emotions is real, transparent and natural.
Great nonfiction story. I agree with you that these collected items over the years serve as the "data bank of emotional strength." A profound description of the safely kept antiques. The metaphor fits like a glove.
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The collection must be marvelous judging by the pictures you have shown. No way to give them up.
The essay is full of relevant observations of the situation faced by the seniors, once they lose mobility and mental alertness.
I think that it is no longer considered an indignity to be placed in a home for the aged. True that there are certain things they miss. But come to think of it, they have company and they have a common dining room and a lounge to watch movies and read at will.
In India, where I come from, elderly parents voluntarily check into the senior homes because they know that there will always be help if needed.
I have enjoyed the article very much not only because of the relevant topic but also because of the spontaneous flow of language and a telling style.
So many things of beauty are lost due to indifference and gross carelessness.
This happens every so often that it is taken for granted.
It calls for sensitivity and understanding to view and value every "single strand" that passes through the cracked window of life.
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The Bird at the end of the poem seems to symbolize that rare person who is urged to pick up rare things of life.
This poem moves at a pace that is thoughtful and observant of the missing things of life.
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No wonder Earth is addressed as the "Supreme Mother" in some cultures. Some have temples to worship her love for all beings living on her.
What is ironic is the fact that despite knowing her vital life giving role, man betrays her and uses her for his selfish goals.
Life could be much more healthy and happy if we keep her clean as she was when God created her.
Lines are well composed.
Images of earth are visual.
Rhyming and rhythm are effective.
Simultaneously simple and profound.
I can see the killing cycle repeating day after day.
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The poem is in free style form.
It shows the poet's hard working routine at the Psychiatrist's clinic.
It is both tiring and monotonous.
But options are few.
so one must make the best of what is available. Cheer up!
"Your body needs repair
Your in despair"
Indeed, life is so cruel.
It flows well with visual imagery.
A very practical and observational poem on self and society around.
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This free style poem shows the trials and tribulations you have been through. What is admirable, however, is the fact that you surfaced from all only to take on new challenges.
There came point like in anyone else's life when you told yourself "enough is enough."
That is but natural.
" "No! This is too much for me to handle!
Do something,"
Yes, of course, His is the only Hand that can help people in distress or stressed to the end of their reserves of patience and stamina.
He, the Merciful Lord, finally, seems to have become your safe harbour, your protection from the umpteen number of troubles that pester endlessly.
When the lows took you, you don't desire sumptuous life.
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when the spirit is wilting, it craves for a lonely place where there is a chance to lick your wounds in private standing like a starving "tiny roan cow " under a red sun.
This short poem shows diagrammatically, a certain state of mind that is unwilling to go home, perhaps so because home is too familiar a place where dwell the hurtful memories.
"A minuscule piece of my heart
that refuses to come home."
Terms like "crooked wooden fingers", "dead" "heat" "red" "sun" "alone' "low" "starved" seem to bring out the state of a suffering soul as opposed to
"damp new grass
and the wide, wide sky."
Visual imagery and crisp short lines make the poem alluring.
It’s wonderful that I came across this rhyming poem with a number of thought-provoking thoughts.
To a child, storms are exciting, thrilling. They are equally so for an adult as well with a difference. The child’s innocence is lost in the adult’s experience of fear and danger.
You are right in your observation that,
“The storms today are a little scary…”
While agreeing with the feeling that “…it is an act of God”
I also read that man is responsible for natural calamities to a large extent. Correct me if that’s not so.
Deforestation, pollution and global warming are among other reasons that cause natural disasters. So I read.
As for beauty in a storm, a lot depends on the eye of the beholder.
These are just my thoughts.
I’d give eyeteeth to write with rhythm and rhyme that comes so spontaneously to you.
It flows well with visual imagery and wonderful word choices.
I can relate to your fun on the Zippin Pippin! I too hung there for life in a similar way at a different part of the country. What thrill!
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Amusement parks such as the one at Bay Beach are special because they break the monotony of daily routine. The rides and company renew the spirit and prepare us to face routine life with a fresh mindset.
Half the excitement is obviously meeting the pen pal and sharing fun. Your friendship bond might become stronger with the meeting in actual life.
Hope you will have more such visits to interesting places.
Hi,
you have successfully introduced the reader to camping in the woods.
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I like this poem because you told through rhyming couplets, all the details surrounding living outdoors.
Details are well worked out in well composed verses.
"Camping out is always fun,
Until we run out of hamburger buns."
It seems good to live without these regular foods at least for a while.
Imagery mirrors how you filled the day-out in the forest green.
The change from town to forest is shown. The feeling of freshness comes through.
Reflections on self as one grows not just physically but also from inside with precision.
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The short crisp lines mirror the thoughts going on inside.
The wonder and dismay when one realizes " How soon hath Time, the subtle thief of youth” is shown by the Bard of England in Sonnet 7.
Yet, your observation that we refuse to realize the age factor is absolutely right.
But the body says something else when we can't run with the same speed anymore.
"Why does my mind,
Not realise,
That I am not
Who I was."
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It is no easy matter to find the right words, rhythm, and rhyme simultaneously.
Kudos to you.
"Gangly grass grieves."
Each observation fits the season like a glove and so are the word choices. I can see your keen eye taking in the light and dark shades of nature as it progresses from spring to winter. The cycle is brought around in the most agreeable manner.
Hi,
this story is completely absorbing.
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Relationships prove dangerous if one jumps to it blindly. I think it is also a matter of luck to get the right kind of partner.
The details are quite visually shown and graphically described. First person point of view and the narrative style draw me well into the story.
The fact that women are quite vulnerable to the charming men, who in reality are villains comes through clearly.
The tension she suffered from is conveyed in a convincing manner.
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I like this poem because it raises debate.
It is believed that what we sincerely work for is ours and that none can snatch it away from us.
Yet, it is known that what is yours is stolen in a skillful manner and that there is nothing you can do about it except shedding helpless tears.
It is also said that what you think yours is not really yours. This point shreds the fact of attachment to anything. In my culture it is discouraged to think that we have a right on anything materially gained.
Irrespective of the above arguments, the point in the poem is justified.
I enjoyed the poem because it gives me food for thought.
I wouldn’t miss this chance to review this touching poem. I adore my father too.
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The child, that’s you, felt happy at the simple way in which your Dad turned a ‘garden cane’ into a magic wand required urgently. Quite resourceful and ready to oblige the little girl.
That’s just about gives me a fair enough glance into the gentleman’s nature.
I can actually hear the proud moment you shared with friends.
This is exactly the kind of love and support that daughters need from parents.
breathing is indeed basic to life. You found a way to define life as a circle, circle of inhaling and exhaling.
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I notice that the poem is shaped in a certain way, which to me appears to show the process of breathing.
Nice attempt!
Breathing takes place inadvertently.
But to be able to do it with attention can cure ailments of body and mind. This is called Pranayama, an important step in breathing.
Your poem is food for thought giving rise to a number of possibilities around breathing.
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