this is the kind of story that tells me how simple things can bring out profound values of life.
I couldn't resist a review for this sweet short story.
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The entire story came via a clothespin, which involved love, friendship and family bonds.
The change in clothes show the change from childhood to a mature age.
A mother's love-
clothes may change from small to big size, but the mother's affection remains the same. A house is a home only because of her presence and service with love.
"The clothes fill the line. The sunlight streams across the wide swath of yard behind our home. It infuses the clothes with warmth as my work infuses them with love."
The style and transitions used in the story are worth winning accolades.
The dark shadow of drugs is on the family, one brother already the victim and another worrying day and night for him.
The misery and fear and the change for worse resulted by addiction to drugs are clearly brought out by the author so the rest could open their eyes to this wide spread evil of intoxication.
"You're going to lose every thing you've ever had.
Even your baby girl called me saying she wants you to go to rehab"
A man-made evil should be eradicated by man himself.
Hello Teresa,
It feels really marvelous to review a poem of yours, titled, "My Best Friend".
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This free style poem describes the way partners in wedlock ought to live during their journey together. The elements of love, equality, sharing of tasks and facing joys and obstacles together are well highlighted.
I can see this is the best way to a successful marriage.
"We shall divide our chores so that we may enjoy the fruits of our labor."
I love the idea of absence of male domination in the house. Understanding is more important than proving superiority.
Style-
This is a prose poem, each line bringing out the features of a sound marriage poetically.
Imagery appeals to my eye and mind as I picture them leading a harmonious life.
The meaning and the making of music is briefly, yet beautifully explained in this contest entry. Congratulations on a deserving Awardicon decorating this poem.
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This poem is a winner on several counts.
Imagery-
The very basis of this poem is a well explored device of imagery.
You showed how the teacher explains the subject of music to a group of kids. I can see them paying you an attentive ear. Great preamble to a class on music.
Every single vital element of music is given its due place of vital importance.
"And then there dynamics
How soft or how LOUD"
A great point.
Refrain-
Another winning point is the way you used the refrain to bring our attention back to the basics that music is a source of beauty and joy.
"Oh music oh music
You bring joy to the world"
This is the kind of lesson meant for all, not just kids.
Although there is a lot more to write about, I suppose I too should
"stop now
Before you think I'm a bore."
your poem on death and loss as presented from the point of view of the dead is appealing and hopeful.
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This rhyming verse assures me that there is nothing fearful about death and that we should let in a feeling of freedom into our spirit at the final hour.
"Our spirits long ago have soared
We are free to go home"
No amount of mourning and sadness will bring back the departed soul. It is true as observed by all of us. Yet we feel extremely sad and in many cases, heartbroken, when someone close is no more.
It is energizing to read.
"Now we live through you
Fear not death, for it is just the beginning"
It flows well, ringing in hope.
Imagery is visual and appeals to my mind and heart.
facts and fears that we entertain in this short life are well aired here. It is so true that we do worry over small things and forget to leave it to God.
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This rhyming poem sounds soothing and makes me see we do worry too much about tomorrow while the present is wasted. You are so right about other things like a missing phone or bills to clear.
I think we can attend to these existential needs without anxiety.
What we cannot repair like broken vase should be left alone. No use crying over spilt milk.
Rhyming appeals to me. So does the content of this poem.
that’s a pretty interesting incident of a two-way love, between you and the BMW, and you and wife.
Sometimes, the so called inanimate objects gain more affection than human beings.
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In my own experience, I have noticed this perennial rivalry between the wife and the car. For some mysterious, inexplicable reason, a man refers to his four-wheeler as “she”.
I admire your everlasting love for the car that you bought after love at first sight and stuck to it despite the “fall”. First love is the best like first impressions, I suppose.
I am sure your wife has compromised on this rather serious bond between hubby and the car. Good for her to be resigned about this affair.
Loved the humour, the philosophy and the play of psychology through the story.
I am a bit fascinated with sports like parasailing. It gives one the feeling of floating in the air and overseeing the world from the whispering clouds.
Dreaming of parasailing in adorable company of your grand daughter has its advantages. First and foremost, you have someone to fall back upon if a situation demands.
Dreaming of something you know you will never attempt, gives your wings of imagination more power and as I can see create convincing pieces of writing.
I couldn't hold back from writing this review on your inspiring thoughts so well put in this article.
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Comparing your hard working self to a strong willow tree is apt and awesome. On the physical side, the willow looks so delicate and yes, crooked too. Yet, I saw them surviving storms and such. I just came to know that it needs a lot of water.
You thoughts are quite novel, when you say that a person who goes through trials and tribulations in life, like you for instance, is like a willow. In turn all the sadness and depression are turned to being helpful to others by offering timely advice and inspiration to find new hopes.
The analogy is perfect and I am happy I found this note on how to stand strong in the face of sudden shocks and life threatening tragedy.
I love your style of writing and the way you have brought in transformations from one para to the next.
the spiritual experience you have gone through appears rare and unique.
It shows how happy you are with the Divine Mother and that you find her as a soul companion and guardian.
Dancing with her in a kind of emotional and spiritual high can only be experienced. It is beyond anyone's ken.
Finding freedom via religious fervor is so very special. Nothing in the world is comparable to that freedom.
"I am free
and I am whole"
I can believe you.
The rhythm is felt through the poem as I read it.
Imagery is otherworldly.
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This short poem sounds sweet with the images of night sky and the twinkling stars.
“Twinkling stars appeared
Shining brightly”
It is a glorious experience to watch stars at night shining like little gems on a clear sky and wonder about what lies behind them.
Eternal stars and eternal nights! Glory to the Creator!
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Writing from a child's point of view has nicely suited the content. Children keep trying shoes of different people as I noticed. Here's Charlie trying on every single family member's shoes and enjoying their feel and sound.
Onomatopoeia has done justice to the different sounds and their effectively matching words.
"Shoes are fun. I run, scamper, skip.
Spin, spin super fast. Flap, flop, flip."
This takes a lot of observation, thought and imagination.
Rhyming verse flows well with visual and aural imagery.
Your love of dreams drew me to this poem.
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Dreaming in the morning comes through this poem with clarity.
The time between predawn and dawn makes it look surreal like an ephemera, liking a passing shadow.
Your description of the disturbed dream shows your reluctance to come out of it, yet surrender to life's demands.
So you wait till night falls when you can slip back into favorite world of dreams.
Nicely written with well chosen words and with a great flow.
Christmas memories are well shown through this nicely written story.
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I notice that among other visits during the festive season, you also visited nursing homes. I am impressed by this. Those elderly helpless individuals need Christmas cheer brought to them. I appreciate your effort in cheering as many people as you could. I am sure you are a cheerleader par excellence.
"We would visit at least one nursing home. Some times we could get to a couple of them."
Just great!
Your prose style is a pleasure to go through and the feelings expressed in here are so spontaneous.
I came across this love poem in your well organized port. This poem speaks to me from the point of view of not only someone who knows how to love but also someone who loves wisely.
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It is so true that love is full of sweet pain. But you grin and bear the pain and continue to love. As the Bard has wisely put, " love is not love that alters..."
Your mention of Dove is interesting. You have separated love from dove and shown the difference quite convincingly. Meaning, keep religious feelings and love separate.
I know what it feels like letting them go. In a way, it's not us letting them go, but time decides to do that.
Your refrain, "My sons/ My sons" indicates the degree of pain you have undergone, and the intensity of attachment to them. It was the same with our parents I am sure.
None escapes the pleasure and pain of these unions and departures.
Memories and the attendant emotions are very clearly recalled.
"Friends and buddies
My sons and I"
More the affinity, more the attachment and more the lonely one becomes.
I also realized that there is no end to longing to have the past back but...unless one decides to get a grip on it.
Imagery is the best part of this poem written in free form.
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My guess is that you were bidding goodbye to your classmates at the end of the year. If that is so, your feelings are similar to mine and several others, I am sure.
“ once upon a careless teenage summer”
It could be harder than I imagine!
They go back to their places carrying carefully stored memories.
Yet, saying goodbye could be hard. It leaves a cypher in one’s heart no doubt. That’s life.
Excellent use of images from nature to show the persistent loneliness.
“as a palm outward extends and waves goodbye
and leaves only the lonely boughs behind.”
Aptly said.
A poem about natural and inherent love. Though two halves, they are in fact a whole. One cannot exist without the other.
The way you have shown the oneness of being in love is consistent and convincing and weathers no opposition. A well made point.
"We, together, are a union of Two"
That two people in love become one is everybody's knowledge.
The special point here is to treat an old theme in a novel way.
"We, together, hold the certainty
Of Love Everlasting"
The value and meaning of togetherness is shown very well. It causes me to think about the ways and means of loving sincerely and devotedly.
It flows well with visual imagery and it offers a lot to ponder.
I like the way you translated something damaging as rain leak into a precious painting into an artistic manifestation.
That definitely explains the advantage of a positive outlook.
Points to ponder-
The weather in London and the condition of roads.
"The large droplets of water crashed against Martin’s raincoat as he skipped from puddle to puddle."
A tough walk to the art gallery.
The reckless way of handling something exclusive.
".... inevitably, had a gaping hole in the front of it."
I wonder why "inevitably".
this is a touching poem. The poet's thoughts are profound and meaningful.
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All the feelings she expressed show the kind of loving person she was. Her intent in writing this verse too is so impressive. She knew how much she would be missed, yet she didn't want to be chained.
"Perhaps my time seemed all too brief
Don't lengthen it now with undue grief"
I admire her fearless nature in the face of death. She obviously took it as a way of God. There's so much to learn from her regarding life, happiness and the ultimate death.
this pleasantly rhyming verse is enough evidence of your poetic talent.
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You traced the Sun’s journey in quite an appealing way. I get to go over hills, dales, fields and rocky shores and much more. The thrill and joy you offer are priceless and precious.
Rhyme and rhythm of this poem are equally excellent.
I commend the fine word choices, and the concise and controlled content.
A fine poem with sensory imagery, it is one of a kind.
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this is a moving story, I appreciate a lot.
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You have shown in the first part of the story, how to understand horse and maneuver him while riding.
Not an easy job by any means except with patience and love.
Bonding with a horse paid off in saving him towards the end.
The power of prayer is shown clearly.
Your flowing prose style and smooth transformations are winsome.
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