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Review of Too Late  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello esteevius,
this is a touching poem expressing afterthoughts about love. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on completing another year at the WDC. Have a nice day!

This poem mirrors some natural feelings on being late in recognising love.
It is true that sometimes one becomes tongue-tied when someone says, “I love you”.

Disbelief and doubt are well expressed.
“Did you mean it?”
Now that you are sure, you can easily repair the damage you think you suffered. Better late than never, as they say.

This poem is convincing and clear.
Imagery appeals as does the content.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Tabby,
I just read your nonfiction and felt like reviewing it for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations for being active at WDC for another year. Have a wonderful day!

Changes are normal in any marriage. Those patches of unhappiness too are being experienced by all of us. At times, I think we do feel let down for not being paid attention at all. Hopefully, these are but temporary phases. Life is not an idyll. It has its highs and lows.
I can understand that if you are mentally happy, physical hardship doesn't matter.
Children are a great consolation under such circumstances.

Hope things will get better with time.

Language and style are spontaneous and easy to follow.

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Review of Moments of Gold  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Just beautiful!
What a lovely world you surround yourself with, Jack!
I just fell in love with those kids who have so much to teach their grandpa.

My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on turning another year at the WDC. Have a wonderful day!

This little incident is well narrated. You stuck to facts and it is as if I am watching a movie. In other words, I find it visual and effectively so.
Your nonfiction tells me, there is so much to learn from kids and their actions are so interesting and absorbing too.
Clearly, Kaleb is not interested in letting Nana play with the toys. More wonderful is that Nana understood his mind finally and both were happy after that.

It shows that adults need to spend more time with kids, so they can see their beautiful minds.

The pictures great too, each with a nice note.

Language and style are after my own heart, lucid and smooth.

A nice and enjoyable piece of prose.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Asha,

your first line arrested my undivided attention.
The first stanza connects me with one of the points of reflection stated by Krishna to Arjuna in the 2nd discourse of the Gita.
“…..impending future
Fixated on the past.”

Poem turns subjective from the 3rd stanza onwards.
Sensitive to others’ words and thoughts, the poet finds freedom or release of a rare kind and contentment in using words. This is true of
writers,especially, poets.

Finding freedom sitting on rooftop turning “blue” under the sky, thinking about tenacious secrets and writing about them appears to be a favourite occupation of this excellent poet.

Perfect diction and apt choice of words make this free style poem, enjoyable.

It flows well with visual imagery.


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Review of Freedom VS Safety  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hi,
I find it interesting to note the reasons why crime rate goes up or down.
As your statistics prove gun is a necessary aid to empower a defenceless victim, particularly, a woman.
In countries like mine own India, women are encouraged to train in martial arts. Whether east or west, women are at the receiving end of violence, rape and murder .
Indian Vedic practices, which gave women an equal status with men, were corrupted by various injunctions introduced by egoistic rulers and their henchmen priests. As a result, women were degraded and treated as second rate citizens or worse in the subsequent eras.

Your article is encouraging enough and hopefully, is a source of inspiration for women victims.


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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello GerMac,

It is an impressive poem on the favorite occupation of both the dad and daughter. Music being a divine art, it effectively evoked beautiful dreams in the girl's heart.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations on turning another year at the WDC.
Have a lovely day!

Few have this kind of togetherness; a shared love for music.
"Classical piano was their passion
and food for their souls."

The little girl's appreciation of her dad's art is truly touching.
"Classical piano was their passion
and food for their souls."

Experiences like these can work miracles on the growth of a child. I am sure she blossomed into an fine artist herself and played with her dad at the Carnegie Hall as he dreamed.

The diction and mood of the poem are absorbing. They take me to her world on the wings of imagination.

"He played like a one-man symphony."

That's a great achievement indeed!
Imagery visual and aural and appeals to mind and heart.

It flows well.
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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
This is a thoughtful piece.
You raised some issues of significance.

We don’t know how the mind works or what goes on in the world within the self. We have no way of knowing. So, we can’t have conclusions. We can’t be judgmental.
You are right in thinking that we live in an imperfect world. Ten to one, many may disagree. By virtue of their perception, the world we live in is just perfect. Opinion depends on one’s definition of perfection.
Bertrand Russel’s essays are helpful in this regard.

About goodness-
It depends on the way we view and we think about people, on our attitude to society. Even a cruel and harsh person deserves sympathy and mercy.
As I learnt from Shakespeare, justice must be tempered with mercy.
Goodness of the heart is more important than showing it like making a donation.
Your example is apt.
“At the end of the day,……realisation of moral duty that actually makes us good.”

Exhilarating discussion.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Snow,
It is full of unusually hilarious ideas and experiment. Unfortunately, it is a case of man proposes and God disposes.
The reasons behind having a green painted cement lawn itself is prone to give rise to doubts. How can cemented floor have the look of grass? I wonder. Perhaps it is possible, like the idea of painting mountains and trees on the back wall and get the illusion of reality.

But you went ahead nevertheless, a strong-willed person. The pine tree proved to be a fly in the ointment. Armed with a chainsaw you did your best. But life, true to is nature, popped up unexpected impediments. The unstoppable chainsaw for one. The disaster in the neighbor's house for another. The last but the most important is the court proceedings. Oh, what a tangled web, a single idea brought to your yard!

Great story, Snow.
I thoroughly enjoyed it.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
A nice cozy write.
Engaging the reader on a slow evening with nothing much to do.
The setting is after my heart. The pie has a what you so prettily address “French Silk Pie”.

It might be the texture or it must have suited the prompt.
I would like you to have knit one or more incidents with the prompt. So the focus stays with it.

The informal style of the flash fiction is attractive.

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Review of At arm's length  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
A nice romantic sonnet in honor of the poet's beloved.
Poet's hesitation to fall in love is shattered with one sweet look, word or gesture from the one that loved him.
"I try so hard not to fall in love
I was hurt one too many times"

Comparison with an angel above shows the poet's regard and worship of someone adorable.

It is the rhyme scheme ABAB CDCD EE, and the word choices that got my attention in this poem. The rhythm is perfect and the words used are fit the sentiments expressed like a glove.

The imagery is crystal clear to the reader's eye and mind.

It flows well.

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Review of She  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
This is an amazing tribute to your wife, your sojourner in life's journey.
The passages in between give your take on modern life, an empty shell without essence. In this wasteland where everything is subject to momentary pleasures, your surprise gift to your self comes in the guise of your future wife.
I do appreciate your views on the then life which I think are still relevant to what we are going through.
"In a world filled with plastic people
hiding behind their showplace homes,
their fancy cars,
and their sterile, white bread ways."

You must have seen the kind of things you described in images that reach out and speak loud. Adjective phrases like "plastic people," "showplace homes", and "white bread ways" impress on me.

Each description is significant.

However, the silver lining was when you find the right person to share your life with.
"the constant desire to remain
removed from the quickening pace
of a world gone mad."

A well written poem with appropriate digressions and description of life and the world around.

Impressive!

Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary!

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello there,

The chain of poems written in the traditional form of a cinquain is truly appealing. This form suited the subject you have here, namely, the elements.

You have aptly called them "natural treasures" in description. They are also sources of life without which we all die.
"Gives life to plants and men alike"

The fifth element is the space or sky according to the Indian way of understanding elements. This balancing of elements is found only on earth and on no other planet.

Each stanza gives a brief but true description of that particular element.

The syllabic count and the word choices are perfect.

Thanks for sharing.

Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary.

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Review of Tricked  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello graecyn,

this is surely a well shown drama. It is unique that the couple decided to kill one another for different reasons. But she was first in winning the race probably because justice is on her side. He betrayed her for another woman.

The anger of the woman and the husband's frustration at not able to get the knife into her are visibly present.

But the fun thing is that both are aware of their motives. Hence it became a race of some kind. It got the complexion of a duel.

I enjoyed it.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Fin,

This is a typically thoughtful piece. My reflections on it are for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have lovely day.

Although they say that life is a comedy for those who think and a tragedy for those who feel, I see by dint of your train of thought, it should be reversed.

I see self reflections, self examination and finally, a kind of wish for detachment out of disillusion of things of life.
Despite high thinking, we lead our routine lives because we are not prepared to give up. Right?
There is nothing more peaceful if we give up worldly trappings and lead the lives of the sages of yore. They realized this emptiness, monotony, endless cycles you feel and instead of sticking on they left to seek supreme bliss on their own.
All cannot do that. Frailty being our cardinal quality, some of us don't have that kind of detachment.

But it is creditworthy that you question the ordinariness, the low quality of life. Your reflections and rage are of great value.

Thank you for sharing your philosophy.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A nice and meaningful poem which shows the way to feel happy in times of weariness.
"And a sad tired heart laughs with joy
at the wonder of God's creation.

To me this tribute to a red flower with a silky touch and pleasing fragrance represents nature's beauty, the kind of beauty that delights at any given time and whatever the season happens to be.

"...a bright red flower
on a drizzly winter day?"

You have used all the senses to create a nice free style poem with visual imagery.

It flows well.
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Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
He acted like the one born of forest. No amount of civilization could change his mentality or physical habits. He was happy to be back in his natural habitat, the forest.

So the civilizing mission failed and the English masters proved themselves, foolish.
The process-
There seems to be a method to this madness of civilizing innocent natives. This happened with several countries where colonization took place.
Education, religion, punishment and realization have taken place in the life of a Native born and bread in the bush.

I think it is a brilliant narration, wherein fragments meet to make splendid creation of a combination of facts and fiction.

Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary, Leif!

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Review of Grandpa's Road  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Age eight is still innocent and a stage where one believes any kind of information. No wonder your "poppop" got away with that make-believe.
Travel is fun if you have a taste for it.
The keen eye of the boy is admirable. He noticed everything on the road including villages with produce from the farm, the roads that he traveled on.

The story shows the difference between travel of long ago and the present. Everything is done in a hurried way and the chance to observe the passing things, places and people and traveling is not as leisurely as then.

Well done. Thanks for sharing.

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Review of The Stop Off  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello there,
I find this flash fiction quite stirring my curiosity. The presence of spirits next door might have some history of its own. Some mysterious happenings during the Hitler regime or something equally ghastly and horrendous.
You have built up the tension in a convincing manner and the way the whole episode ran to a climax in the dark room.
The outstretched arms surely indicate something that the ghosts would like to convey perhaps.

However, one cannot be certain of safety in a room filled with dead people's spirits. The lodger is sensible enough to vacate it and escaped further agony.

My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations.
Have a wonderful day!

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Review of JUNO  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
A short but compact horror flash. You have the characters, the tale and a convincing twist to it. The eternal question whether ghosts exist or not hangs on.
Yet with certain proofs and feelings of being led by the invisible spirit of the dead dog persuade us to believe in it.
The midnight setting is well done with the girl feeling the dent in the bed and the way she is led out to the kitchen to get the gas leak plugged by the parents.

Interesting write.

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Review of Light and Shadow  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Simonson,
This strikes me like a curious tale of mystery. My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations for being a member of WDC for another year. Have a wonderful Anniversary.

This brings back the age-old question whether there are ghostly or invisible presences in our lives.
There are always two sides to the answer. Some brush it aside as an insignificant nothing while others swear to their presence. Both provide proofs. So we are not sure which side is correct.

I come across this incident in the story that leaves me believing in the unseen presences. The proof is found in the book with a sentence about the dead person. Who wrote it is again unknown.
" Please, help my sister find me."
I am a little confused as to whose remains are they, the patient's or her sister's?

The story ends on a note justifiable logic.
"I am left wondering, what is shadow and what is real?"

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Review of Waking Up  
Review by jaya
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
The confusion and bewilderment of a soul that just left the physical body are visually brought to the reader. The author's imagination regarding the events that take place after life are conveyed in convincing terms. Once the breathing process is over, we imagine the person has traveled to unknown destinations.
Here we see Lowell observing each single person and their purpose. Yet, it is only with the metaphysical plane and not within this material world.

The separating lines between the dead and the living are drawn in quite a subtle fashion. This leaves the reader understand the sequences well.
"“Function complete,” the Curator said and stopped. It didn’t shut its eyes or even close its mouth. It just stopped, motionless, staring blankly at Lowell.'
Lowell is still at the mundane level, just as a soul that just left his body.

Language and style make a mark.

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Review of Exalted Company  
Review by jaya
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Bill,
my review of this poets' poem is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations for another year of creative activity at the WDC. Have a wonderful day.

This is a dramatic poem that takes me into the worlds of mythology created in Keats' Endymion. It also tells me of the love that ruled the hearts of Browning and Elizabeth Barrett Browning. The title justifies the content.

Imagery and metaphor-
imagery paints a quaint pictures of the goddess and the shepherd Endymion, evocative of the Elysium.

"Goddess of the moon--the same who loved
Endymion, now dreaming in his cave"

Lines like these prove that romance lives on despite age and era.
Moon beams on the book makes the poet wonder, in a tone of dry humor,

"Is there no printing press on Mount Olympus?-

The Moon was waiting for me to turn the page."
Perhaps, there isn't one.

Poetry of that kind, I mean the kind that Keats or Marlowe wrote, exists no more.

"And sank back into that symbol-woven world
Where poets dwell--or used to--and we who care"

This is the kind of poem that flows spontaneously right into my heart.

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Review of Life after Loss  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello there,
this appealing poem begins with an empty chair speaking of loss of someone dear.
Almost the whole house echoes with the absence of the person who was in and around not so long ago.
Certain harsh realities are difficult to digest. Although death is a stunning reality, we don’t want to believe it easily.
“The thought you might return to sit
and eat, it’s just a fable.”

Excellent rhyming, apt word choices and an appealing rhythm make the poem impressive.
Imagery is visual and it draws me into the context, effortlessly.

It flows well.

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Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hi there,

the blessings and benefits of rain find fine expression in this poem.
My review is for your WDC Account Anniversary. Congratulations and have a great day.

Rain makes a welcome change to earth and all the living beings after a scorching summer.
Imagery is visual in effect. It shows the grass gleaming greener and the earth feeling happier.

‘’softly caressing the grasses…”

The rhythm follows the falling rain and the way it pleases the lonely flowers.

It flows well.

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Review of Don't Trust Cupid  
Review by jaya
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Rated: E | (4.0)
That's quite a sorry state you found yourself in. It is a rare case, where Cupid failed to find the target, especially on Valentine's day.

These couplets rhyme well evoking an evening of disappointment. The mistake could be by either party.
Some phrases are particularly eye-catching.
"danged old Cupid, sweet Evelong,derisive laughter,thorned plants(stems, aren't they?).
It is difficult to imagine a girl kicking you in the knees. It sounds humorous though.

Have a wonderful WDC Account Anniversary!

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