I love the feeling that this story is true. I love Georgia, and have
only passed through it. Down into Florida. You have good lines,
I like the repitition as a theme, and the title as it flows into the storyline.
For a short piece, it is very well-written. Saw it highlighted in this
weeks' Short Story Newsletter. Luck. Best Regards.
Like a song, this poem sings a destiny that fills the heart. I thought
it was very original, and loved the naming of women and their place
in the poem. The poem was very well-formed and the lines were evenly distributed to which the ends justified the means as the poem returned us to its source with the line: And I'll love all of these women, til the day you
make it home. I couldn't help but wonder about the circumstances of
that last line. A very fulfilling poem. Best Regards.
What a journey! I'm one for saying I followed it all, Wayfarer was "some journey!" Shorts are interesting and this has great pluses to it. The sections with Jane's embarrassment and the state of affairs of her mind and the tension of "computer-gargon", gave this piece an originality and yet a slick time-frame. I went along for the ride. Smoothly done. Great piece for the Newsletter to feature when suggesting highly evolved characters. Best Regards.
WOW! This is the most complete item I have ever heard of on Writing.com. You had a printable item about forms earlier, and I had printed it out. But this is a text in itself, a massive undertaking. Highly informative and eye-opening for the amateur poet who would like to learn more.
I like the formula with the word "she" involved. Here I see a good "short". Eventually, it will all work out. Critically, you have begun . . ., nicely. Best Regards.
Schematically correct in the essence of this poem, it is can be thought of as simplified in its form and yet carry a "moral"kind of meaning that I really liked. --Put Christ in Christmas. So often churches are a bit more full at Christmas, yet actually we should visit him year 'round. "Angels" I have heard on high, as they say, is mentioned here and "Thanks". Very commendable. May you have a Happy New Year!!!!{:snow3}
This is a good attempt to share with the reader a certain "sweetness" which is apparent in the poem. Although it is a blatantly simplistic poem I think it stands up to criticism because of its message. Showing a graphics is always a (+) here at Writing.com. I liked it. Very nice. Best to you.
Well-meaning, adorable poem. I like candid, avorable caring poets. It's facts of life, I think, that you equate for us here. Misspelled for future use: Fourteenth line down: interruption instead of interuption.
So sweet, almost like a prayer. This intends to give you technique, I think, and really does. You have crafted this piece and is genuinely candid and marvelously set. I never went for horror witchy supernatural pieces without SOMETHING being attached to our love for each other as human beings. Delightfully, this piece is a cut above the rest, gives us the paragraph about death too and I find it uncannily true. Those three little words can move the earth. Good reading. Best Regards.
Great. I have always liked your poetry and you are no stranger to Poetry Newsletters! I had to chuckle at this one, it was sweet. Good to see you are in Amazon.com.
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Firstly, I loved this. The lines are very even, which is a great plus. Your style is very trendy, and it is not only an ancient secret but a contemporary poem. It does build, and it conquers boredom in the the stanzas. I really value the message. Very nice. Best Regards.
Sweetly posed, it is a character study of a Princess who feels, loves, and is very adorable. The detail, as I have always said, is apparent here, as in all of your very best tales. Your study is fertile with nice characters and gives the reader a sense of adventure that may well be in the offing. I liked the "first person" for this story, it made it personal and we got a first-hand view of Princess Misty's actions and thoughts. Even though it is an easy piece to read that does not mean it can be dismissed as "simple". The tapestry of the royalty you write about have always been complex in nature as the story evolves.
{i]Pertinent words for today's situation. Poetically this is such a statement! I really liked it. Saw it in this week's Poetry Newsletter. Best Regards.
I used to dream heavilly of insects and I believe it was because Mum's house was very close to Woodlands. An owl came to alight on my bottom bedboard, having flown into the window one night. I used to worry about my brother's in bed in the next room quite often with protective moments. Your poem is great! I really liked it. Best Regards.
For this poem, the point-of-view has it "all". I imagined, from the description what it might say, and then going on into reading it, it was well-played-out. Those last few lines:
with people stepping
over her, around her
it seemed the pinnacle of what happened. Well-written piece.
Best Regards.
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A wonderful, meaningful poem. The distinctions are sublime.
Good lines:Living Water quenching us whenever we drink.
