Jeff's (jeff) Reviews

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Review Style

I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.

I'm good at...

Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.

Favorite Genres

I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.

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#3503488

Review of The Precocious Princess

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with Unofficial Erotica Newsletter ...

Rated: 18+

| (4.0)

Hi percy goodfellow

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I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Unofficial Erotica Newsletter Group review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

Good characterization. I always enjoy the unique characters you create, Percy, and this story is certainly no exception.

Original take on the prompt. I like the fact that you came up with a fresh and inventive twist on the final exam prompt.

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

You know what my suggestion for improvement is going to be...

I'd like to see a little more integration between the dialogue and the narrative. There are chunks of dialogue where the action pretty much stops, and I think if you can keep both elements moving at the same time, you'll have a much stronger story.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this was a solid entry for the HSP Final Exam. Good work and good luck!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3503410

Review of Reflection of Confusion (Extended)

Review by Jeff

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

Hello there,

I came across your item today in the Mystery genre listings and thought you did a great job. It would be my pleasure to feature your item in this week's edition of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

If you do not currently receive the newsletter, you can subscribe through your Account Options settings, or you can always read archived issues under the Things To Do & Read section.

Keep up the great work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3503408

Review of Stolen Within my Grip

Review by Jeff

Rated: 18+

| (3.0)

Hello there,

I came across your item today in the Mystery genre listings and thought you did a great job. It would be my pleasure to feature your item in this week's edition of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

If you do not currently receive the newsletter, you can subscribe through your Account Options settings, or you can always read archived issues under the Things To Do & Read section.

Keep up the great work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3503406

Review of Jacqui Robinson and the missing mother

Review by Jeff

Rated: ASR

| (2.5)

Hello there,

I came across your item today in the Mystery genre listings and thought you did a great job. It would be my pleasure to feature your item in this week's edition of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

If you do not currently receive the newsletter, you can subscribe through your Account Options settings, or you can always read archived issues under the Things To Do & Read section.

Keep up the great work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3503405

Review of Reflections

Review by Jeff

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

Hello there,

I came across your item today in the Mystery genre listings and thought you did a great job. It would be my pleasure to feature your item in this week's edition of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

If you do not currently receive the newsletter, you can subscribe through your Account Options settings, or you can always read archived issues under the Things To Do & Read section.

Keep up the great work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3499602

Review of Cheating

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with The Talent Pond

Rated: ASR

| (4.5)

Hi ~*Arpita*~

-

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Talent Pond review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

Covered many aspects of the topic. I love the fact that you didn't just tackle one or two issues with cheating... you provided a variety of examples and arguments to emphasize and reinforce your argument that cheating is harmful, whether we realize it immediately or not.

Clearly presented. You did a great job structuring this essay into clear and concise paragraphs. It was well laid out, well organized, and presented effectively. Nice work!

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

Honestly, I have no suggestions for improvement. You did a great job with the prompt and this is exactly the kind of essay I was hoping to read.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Even if it weren't the only entry this round, it would have been a contender for the prize. You did a great job with it. In fact, I'm so impressed, I'm going to make an executive decision and award you the full prize for First Place.

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3499573

Review of The Sierra de Baza Horror

Review by Jeff

Rated: 18+

| (4.5)

I'm so sorry it's taken me so long to get caught up with the Sinister Stories contest. With an office move and a death in the family, my time on WdC over the past couple months has been spotty at best, and I apologize for letting it go so long without getting to the judging. Although there were not enough entries in the January 2011 round to award the prizes, I'm going to send you something in recognition of how long you've had to wait for me to get around to the judging.

Thank you for your participation in the Sinister Stories contest, and I hope you'll consider entering again now that we're back on track!

SoCalScribe

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#3499486

Review of I Can't Believe

Review by Jeff

Rated: 13+

| (4.0)

I'm sending along a quick review for each of the WdC Survivor entries I read before voting in the polls. You did a solid job with this entry. You crafted a complete story, complete with setup, rising action and resolution all in comparatively few words. Dialogue-only isn't easy, but you sure made it look that way with this entry!

Best of luck in this first round of WdC Survivor! I'll be rooting for for you (so long as it's not my neck on the chopping block!

).

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#3499480

Review of The Losers-A Dialog

Review by Jeff

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

I'm sending along a quick review for each of the WdC Survivor entries I read before voting in the polls. I thought your entry was well written, and the characters were developed and interesting. We've got some tough competition in our little group, but I think you're right near the top with this entry.

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#3499478

Review of WDC Survivor Challenge -- 2011

for entry "Shameful Actions Come Around, Go Around"

Review by Jeff

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

I'm sending along a quick review for each of the WdC Survivor entries I read before voting in the polls. I thought this was a wonderful item... well written and engaging. I enjoyed it so much, in fact, that I gave it my vote in the poll... instead of voting for myself!

What can I say; you wrote the better entry and you deserve the recognition.

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#3499463

Review of Interview with a Masochist

Review by Jeff

Rated: 18+

| (3.5)

I'm sending along a quick review for each of the WdC Survivor entries I read before voting in the polls. I thought you did a really good job with the dialogue itself. It was engaging, well written, and effectively developed the characters in your story. Unfortunately, it's not technically a dialogue-only entry, since there's an introductory sentence and dialogue tags that present information... but that notwithstanding, I really enjoyed the piece as a whole. Good effort and best of luck in this round of WdC Survivor!

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#3499462

Review of News Test

Review by Jeff

Rated: E

| (3.5)

I'm sending along a quick review for each of the WdC Survivor entries I read before voting in the polls. Overall, I thought this was a fun and entertaining story, although I had a little trouble following along and seeing the complete story being told. Other than that, though, the dialogue itself was fun and engaging. Well done and good luck in this round of WdC Survivor!

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#3497132

Review of The Girl Without Color

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with

Rated: 13+

| (5.0)

Hi Hayley I. (aka Kilpik)

-

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Rising Stars Member-to-Member review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

I loved the creativity that went into this story. You came up with a really great premise, and the Rainbow Man was a wonderful throwback to the snake oil salesmen of old, who peddle wares that are often less than they seem.

Wonderful moral of the story. Your thematic elements shone through and you told a heartfelt, captivating, enjoyable story in just a few short paragraphs. It's everything a short story should be.

Excellent detail and description. You made this fantasy world come alive and jump off the page. It reminded me much of the movie Pleasantville in style and concept, and I thought this version of the premise was just as good.

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

I wish I had some suggestions for improvement, but I loved this story just the way it was written. It's easily one of the most imaginative and elegant stories I've read on this site lately. Great work!

OVERALL COMMENTS

Overall, this was simply wonderful. Fantastic work!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3494664

Review of Introduction to the One Act Play

Review by Jeff

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Overall, I think this is a great format and good introduction to the class. I like the addition of Matty Rosen and Cornelia Cobb to add a little depth and variety to the forum. The only suggestion I have is to perhaps utilize Dropnotes for the lessons themselves. The item feels a little text-heavy, and upon initial skimming of the item, feels like a lot of information being presented all at once. If you utilize Dropnotes for the lessons, people who are interested can expand that particular section... and the item itself will appear less dense to the casual peruser who is trying to determine if the class - on a general level - interests them.

Other than that, this sounds like great fun!

SoCalScribe

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#3487933

Review of Chapter 1: The End.

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

Hi MoralityKid

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I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

Good use of description. You painted a vivid picture with your judicious and yet effective use of detail. There was just enough to give the reader a clear picture of what you want them to imagine, without being too forceful or overbearing. Nicely done!

Effective use of dialogue. You integrated dialogue into the story well, and it helped move your narrative along in all the right places. Good job!

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

Honestly, nothing comes to mind. I really enjoyed this story just the way it is.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought you had a great item, with strong characters, and an effective writing style. It was a pleasure to read your work.

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3487760

Review of Demon with a Child's Name

Review by Jeff

Rated: 13+

| (2.5)

Hi Anitta Bae -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

I thought that there was a lot of great imagination and creativity that went into this story. It was original, detailed, and there was certainly a lot going on! Overall, however, I felt that the story lacked a little focus. The protagonist - Sam - seemed to be pulled from one event to the next, almost at random. There was very little cause and effect in the story; he just migrated from one moment to the next moment. I think you did a great job setting up the mythology and developing some truly engaging story concepts, but a little more polish is needed to bring everything together.

This is a great start, and I think with some time spent revising and fine tuning, this could turn into a very entertaining, enjoyable story.

Good effort!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Also, it would be a pleasure to feature this item in an upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3487096

Review of Something’s Up

Review by Jeff

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi rbued -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

I thought this was a great flash fiction story. It had the feel of a classic noir tale, and the personal, offhanded way Jack narrates the story gives the audience an instant connection to him, which makes the surprise at the end all the more twisted and unexpected. I wish I had some suggestion for improvement, but I liked this story just the way it is. Very well done!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Also, it would be a pleasure to feature this item in an upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3486880

Review of Dreamer

Review by Jeff

Rated: ASR

| (3.5)

Hi Grace -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

Overall, I think this is an interesting and engaging setup for a story. I like the uniqueness of Elsie's gift, and her relationship to the other characters is well-developed and intriguing. I did notice a couple of typos:

"... and I slow down to take a peak peek."

"'You can just call me Elsie,' I say without braking breaking eye contact."

Also, you mentioned that this is a work in progress. A few of the issues that I would hope to see resolved in the finished work are how Charles Thompson figures into the larger narrative of Elysie's life, and what affliction has overcome her fiance.

Within the confines of this part of the story, the only real issue I noticed was the fact that Elysie - at the beginning - says, "I don't want to sleep anymore" (on account of her nightmares), but then - later in the story - says, "I'm excited when they finally leave and I rush upstairs to bed." After ten years of not having the nightmares, and then having them begin again, even more forceful and violent than before, I feel like Elysie - no matter how tired - would be a little more apprehensive about closing her eyes at night.

Other than that, I really enjoyed this story and look forward to you finishing it!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Also, it would be a pleasure to feature this item in an upcoming issue of the Official Mystery Newsletter.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3482668

Review of Witty Lines & Joker's Smile

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.0)

My review has been submitted for consideration in "Good Deeds Go Noticed" .

Hi Revelry new writings soon

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I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

I think this is a wonderful tribute to a talented actor who created perhaps one of the most memorable Joker roles that I can remember. Reading this item reminded me of how great Heath Ledger was in this role, and I can't think of any higher compliment than the fact that reading this item made me want to pop The Dark Knight into my DVD player and watch it again!

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

While I liked the inclusion of the quotes, I think the "you're a freak... like me" line would have been more impactful as the last line of the poem, rather than the "evening, commissioner" line which, to me, doesn't come across as well in this poem as it did on the screen. I think that by ending with the "freak" line it brings together the rest of the poem a little more.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, this was a wonderful item that reminded me of a great actor and a truly phenomenal role. Thank you for sharing!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3479333

Review of You are You

Review by Jeff

Rated: 18+

| (5.0)

Hi SonofDrogo -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant. I thought you did a great job with this piece... Dr. Suess has such an original, unique voice and you managed to capture (and corrupt?

) it for your own purposes. I have absolutely no suggestions for improvement, other than to say more, more, more! This is truly one of the more original poems I've read on WdC and I think you really knocked it out of the park. Well done!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3479328

Review of The Best Part of Waking Up

Review by Jeff

Rated: E

| (4.0)

Hi Chook -

I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that these comments are my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard anything in this review as you see fit.

This was an original and entertaining poem. I thought the subject matter was excellent and unique, and you really did a good job of presenting your observations. I particularly liked the last line of the poem, which really drove home your point.

If I had one suggestion for improvement, it would be to remain consistent with your rhyme scheme throughout the poem. Your first two stanzas are in the ABCB ABCB format, but then you transition to ABAB ABAB ABAB for the following three. I think the poem would have slightly more resonance with a consistent rhyme scheme throughout the piece.

Other than that, this was a really innovative, enjoyable read. Thanks!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

SoCalScribe

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#3479171

Review of Urban Sprawl

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.0)

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Hi Aratena

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I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

I think this piece presents an important, topical theme for the reader to consider. Urban sprawl is truly becoming a problem as many of our undeveloped wilderness areas are being converted into urban spaces for the latest exclusive housing development, strip mall, or business park. It's truly concerning, and writing like this will hopefully cause people to think about what is happening to their planet.

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

I felt like the focus on the Summerhill's cat and the squirrel was a bit unnecessary, especially in a work so short. If it were a longer piece, I think specific anecdotes and narrative threads like that would be a welcome level of detail and description... but with so few words, I felt like they should all work toward the greater purpose of the narrative, IMO.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this piece of writing. I thought it was engaging, interesting, and certainly topical. Well done!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

- S o C a l S c r i b e

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#3479163

Review of The Maid and the Princess

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: ASR

| (4.0)

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Hi Hereward

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I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

I liked the theme of this poem. The idea that love will always prevail is a popular and effective theme, and you really did a great job expressing it in this simple and engaging poem.

I particularly enjoyed your last stanza. I thought "persecute the joy" was an elegant and evocative phrase that really hammered home the essence of what this poem is about. Well done!

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

If anything, I was hoping that the poem would be a little longer, to more fully develop the story. As it is, the switch from fantasizing about the princess to having her appear for real in the bedchamber felt a little abrupt. A few extra stanzas in the middle would - I think - help transition from one part of the narrative to another more fluidly.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. I'm a big fan of poetry that also tells a narrative story, and I think you did an excellent job with this particular piece.

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

- S o C a l S c r i b e

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#3479040

Review of Two Mimes

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: E

| (4.5)

Hi Sum1 In Halifax

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I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

Original subject matter. I think this might be the first time I've read something about mimes on WdC.

Well-written. This item was well structured, well formatted, elegantly written, and engaging. An all around excellent piece of writing!

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

Nothing comes to mind.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought this was a wonderful piece of poetry. Inventive, original, and well written. Nicely done!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

- S o C a l S c r i b e

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#3479010

Review of Meet Yoda...Superdog, Star Wars Wannabe

Review by Jeff

In affiliation with SIMPLY POSITIVE GROUP

Rated: 13+

| (4.5)

Hi Kathleen

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I had a chance to read your item today, and have enclosed the following Simply Positive review for your consideration. Please keep in mind that the following is my opinion only, and you as the author have the right to use or disregard any of my comments as you see fit.

WHAT WORKED

Wonderful detail. Your item is filled with the kind of affectionate description that only an animal owner can truly appreciate and understand. The love-hate relationship of a pet who is so lovable... and at the same time, such a pain in the butt!

I love the photos. They add that wonderful point of reference that allows us to see that demon... er, dog of yours. While words are our stock and trade, sometimes there really is no substitute for a picture.

WHAT COULD BE IMPROVED

This is a very minor point, but I would suggest centering the images in the item, to give the bottom a more balanced, even feel. But maybe that's just me.

OVERALL IMPRESSION

Overall, I thought this was a great item that really captured the emotional highs and lows of owning a pet and bringing one into your home. The good times are great... but oh, the destruction!

I hope that you've found my comments useful. Thank you for the opportunity to read and review your work.

Keep up the good work and keep writing!

Best regards,

- S o C a l S c r i b e

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