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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar.: As for spelling I found a few mistakes, In the first line you spelled here wrong, and the 10th line you spelled doubt wrong. I found no errors with grammar.
Rhythm:Rhythm is good
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word choice is good as is the use of repetition for emphasis of feeling. Nice alliteration, assonance and good consonance.
Suggestions: I do have some suggestions. First off, I would change the form of the poem so it flow more easily. Example:
My body is here,
But my mind is not.
It is missing,
I don't know where it is.
Next I would capitalize the first word of each line and use punctuation.
By doing this it makes the poem flow better and makes for a easier read. I think by making some changes, this could be a really be and excellent poem.
Overall: Good poem. This poem is a sad poem about someone who thinks that no one cares about them and would not miss them. Very,very sad. They are wishing that someone, anyone would find them. Truly an emotional poem, which come through and between every line. I find it sad that the person feels so lonely and just wants someone to love them. You delivered the emotions in this poem very well. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!
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Title: Title is very good and appropriate for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: As far as spelling I only find one error which was the word universe.
Word Choice: Word selection was good, made for an easy read.
Suggestions: The suggestions I have are the form and also punctuation. Example:
Your smooth skin
looks like the color of melted caramel,
So sweet and sugary,
as you rub your arm against me.
I think the form makes for a better flow.
Overall: Good poem. My favorite lines were:
But you make me so happy inside
You make my heart leap for joy
my insides feel like fire works
Its obvious im in love with you
These lines were very touching to me. Lovely depth of feeling. You expressed the love you have for this person very well. The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabbed my attention from the very beginning and kept my attention throughout. You can tell by what the writer has written that she is truly deeply in love with this person. Good poem. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!
Thank you for allowing me to review your writing -- I consider it an honor and privilege.
Please remember that I am an author, just like yourself, and as an author I am also reviewed by my peers, and I know what it feels like. Please remember that is only my opinion and is given with the intention of being constructive -- only you know what is right for your writing!
Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could not find any errors.
Flow/Rhythm: Your flow is good and complimented by the lack of grammatical matters.
Word Choice: Word selection was good, made for an easy read.
Suggestions: The suggestions I have are to capitalize the first word and would use some punctuation, for example:
Words that mean nothing to him,
But the world to her.
Words that mislead,
That confuse,
Also with the word w o r l d, I would leave out the space between each letter.
To me this is the form I would use for your poem.
Overall: Good poem. The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. The lines that touched me the most were:
Words that mean nothing to him,
But the world to her.
These two lines touched me because it spoke of someone who loves someone else, but that other person does not love that person back. The poem was truly heartfelt. She is longing so much to be loved by him but not getting love back in return. All in all a good poem.
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: Rhythm is good; line to line transition and breaks are nicely done. Nice rhythm.
Word Choice: Word section was good, made for an easy read
Suggestions: I have no suggestions, it is very good the way it is.
Overall: Excellent poem.The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabbed my attention from the very beginning and kept my attention throughout. The lines I liked best were:
Knowing I could love another person through all flaws.
Realizing love is real.
Taken mind, body, and soul.
The one, my true love.
I liked these lines because it truly spoke of someone that is ready to give all of her or his self to their new found love, even with all their flows. And that they were meant to be together. I always like the part where you put in the quote from Martin Luther King " I Have A Dream'. This touched me because the person no longer has to dream of being in love, they have found their love at last. Awesome poem, one in which I would highly recommend. My hat goes off to the author. Keep Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: A good title that is suitable to the subject of your poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could find no errors.
Flow/Rhythm: Flow is nice and easy, as is the rhythm.
Rhyme: Good
Word Choice: Selection of words were good and made for an easy read.
Overall: My favorite sentences of the poem were:
Overall I am nervous but hey thats alright,
It's Highschool it ain't gonna happen overnight.
I liked those two lines because it brought memories of when I first started High School and how afraid I was. But knew that in time things would work out just fine. It also made me chuckle alittle bit. All in all a good poem. Keep Writing and Rock On!!
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Title: Title is very good and appropriate for the content of the poem.
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could not find any errors.
Imagery: Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a sad picture of war.
Word Choice: Selection of word were good and made for an easy read.
Overall: I found the poem to be very emotional because to me, it spoke of someone who has just come back from war. Even though he waves a white flag he still has the scars. All in all a very good poem. My hat goes off to the author. Keep On Writing and Rock On!!!
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Title: The title is suitable for the subject of the poem.
Spelling,grammar: I could find no mistakes
Flow/Rhythm: Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
Imagery: Imagery is good as are the descriptives. You paint a lovely picture of our Almighty God.
Rhyme: The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm.
Word Choice: Word selection is good and makes for an easy read.
Suggestions: No suggestions, I think it is good the way it is.
Overall: Very nice poem. The line I liked the best was: Creation is designed by the Almighty God. I liked this line because everything on earth was created by our Almighty God. This line brought chills down my spine. I think some people forget that God create this earth and everyone should give thanks and praise to him. Good poem. Keep On Write and Rock On!!!
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Title: The title is suitable for the subject of the poem
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could not find any errors.
Rhythm: Rhythm is good
Imagery: Imagery is good as are the descriptives.
Rhyme: Rhyme is nice.
Word Choice: Word selection was good, made for an easy read
Suggestions: The only thing I would suggest is in the third and seventh line, I would capitalize the first word.
Overall: Good poem. It speaks of a girl living in a shelter and telling her never to give up. Very touching. My favorite line was: Your faith is awesome. Keep the faith, Hold it tight. This really touched my heart because although she is living in a shelter, she is also keeping the faith that things will get better. For someone living in a shelter and to still have faith, that just amazes me, not an easy thing to do if you are living in a shelter. Good poem. Keep On Writing And Rock On!!!
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Title: The title is suitable for the subject of the poem
Spelling,grammar and punctuation: I could not find any errors.
Flow/Rhythm: The flow and rhythm was good
Suggestions: The only suggestions I would have is to capitalized the first world of the sentence. Also, did not like it in color, it distracted me and did no make for an easy read. That is the reason for the low rating. If you change these few things, I would be willing to do a re-review.
Overall: Good poem. My favorite lines were:
from God's grace the silent is heard...the unspoken words
it is God's love that allows Love to be
as beautiful and quiet as the rising sun for all to see
These sentences told me that God is the one who allows us the privilege of being able to do stuff on this earth. And he is the one who makes all things happen in our lives.
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The title was suitable for the subject of the poem.
As far as spelling and grammar, I could not find any mistakes. The word selection was good and made for easy read.
I enjoyed the poem very much. I had to laugh to myself at line where it says: Monsters under your bed. I laughed because I remember being a kid thinking there were monsters under my bed. You did a very go job with the imagery. I could picture all those imageries in my head. Very good poem. Keep On Writing!!!
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Title is suitable for the content of the poem. As far as spelling and grammar, I could find no mistakes. Form of the poem is good, flow is nice and easy which make for an easy read. Word selection is good. The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm.
This poem talks about the cycle of life, how we are born and then how we die. Very touching poem and really makes you think about life and how you should cherish every moment on this earth. Good poem. Keep On Writing!!!
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The title is very suitable for the subject of the poem. As far as spelling and grammar, I could find no mistakes. Word selections is good and makes for an easy read. Form of the poem is good, the flow is nice and easy which makes for an easy read. Good poem. Keep On Writing!!
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Title was suitable for the subject of the poem. As far as spelling, grammar and punctuation, I could find no errors. Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading. The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm.
This poem is very emotional. You can tell the pain inside this person longing to be a mother and every month she is disappointed. Truly brought a tear to my eyes and pulled at my heart strings. If this is a true story, I wish you much luck, that soon you will become a mother. Good poem. Keep On Writing!!
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Title is very suitable for the subject of the poem
As far as spelling, grammar and punctuation I can find no errors. Word select is perfect and make for an easy read. The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, being centered on the page and the flow is nice and easy.
I really liked this poem. It talks about the time you want to spend with your spouse. It also talks about that you are apart and some day you will be together again. Really like the verses: Of a wonderful day, where you filled my heart.... etc. That was really touching. All in all very good poem, one in which I would recommend. Kudos to the author. Keep On Writing!!!
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A good title that is suitable for the subject of your poem. Rhythm of the poem flows well and makes for an easy read. As far as spelling, grammar and punctuation. I could find none.
A heartfelt and emotional poem which comes through and between every line. It really pulled at my heartstrings. The poem is speaking of someone who is blind and can see the world from a different point of view and never gives up. All in all good poem. Keep On Writing!!!
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The title is very suitable for this poem. As far as spelling, grammar and punctuation. I could find no mistakes. Form of the poem is good and flows nice and easy. The rhyme is very good. Word select was good and makes for an easy read.
Very emotional poem, kept my attention throughout. Talks about someone who loves someone from a distance, then finally they are together. Really good poem. Very touching. One in which I would highly recommend. Hats off to the author. Keep On Writing!!
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Title is good and suitable for the subject of the poem.
As far as grammar and spelling. I could not find any errors.
The poem flows well, kept me interested from beginning to end.
This poem is very emotional and talks about loving someone who will not give another person the time of day. Very nice poem. Keep On Writing!!
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Very touching poem. I enjoyed it from beginning to end. I know what you are saying about the rhyming, I did a poem on my mother and some did not rhyme. But, it was a tribute to her and I will not change anything either.
Grandmothers are very special people and they hold alot of wisdom. I love talking to the elderly and hearing their storied. If I was you I would not change anything about this poem, it is good the way it is. Keep on Writing!!!
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The title was appropriate for the content of the poem. As far as spelling, grammar and punctuation, I could find no errors. Form of poem was very good and was easy to read.
In this poem I felt much emotion and sadness. It talked about hatred which brought a tear to my eye. This is an excellent poem,One in which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author. Keep up the good writing and keep sharing with out community.
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The title Hang Off was appropriate for this poem. I found no spelling or grammar errors. I would have like to see punctuation. Also, did not like that is was all in small letters.
Word selection was very good. All in all a good poem.
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Title is very good and appropriate for the content of the poem. As far as spelling, punctuation, and grammar are concerned, I could find no errors. Good assonance and alliteration. Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading. The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy.
The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. poem, one which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author.
This poem sent a tear down my face. What a beautiful poem. I'm truly sorry about your sister. Loved the last two lines of the poem, it moved me very much and was so touching. Great Poem........
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Title is very good and appropriate for the content of the poem. As far as spelling, punctuation, and grammar are concerned, I could find no errors. Good assonance and alliteration. Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading. The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, page and the flow is nice and easy.
The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. Yo All in all this is an excellent poem, one which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author.
Very emotional poem about a woman wanting love and her friends supporting her. It is always nice to have friends that will standby you no matter what.
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Title is very good and appropriate for the content of the poem. As far as spelling, punctuation, and grammar are concerned, I could find no errors. Good assonance and alliteration. Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading. The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, flow is nice and easy.
The poem is deeply emotional and the feelings come through and between every line. It grabs the reader's attention from the very beginning and keeps the reader's attention throughout. All in all this is an excellent poem, one which I would highly recommend. Kudos to the author.
This poem sent chills down my spine. Very touching poem....
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Title is very good and appropriate for the content of the poem. As far as spelling, punctuation, and grammar are concerned, I could find no errors. Good assonance and alliteration. Word selection is perfect and makes for easy reading. The rhyme scheme is very good, as is the rhythm. Form of the poem is excellent, and the flow is nice and easy. Nice poem.
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