Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a very good poem, and I think that this a great picture.
My favorite parts!
You have taken the reader into a very lovely and peacful night.
Changes that I think should be made!
I think that this is great the way it is. I don't suggest any changes.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
I think that this is beautiful, and I can relate to it. I have three children, and I have felt this with each of them.
My favorite parts!
You are my child and I will love you the same as your sister and have no different way to tell you or show you.
This is so real, and is so true.
Changes that I think should be made!
This is perfect, there is no changes needed.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a very good peice. I am able to see the picture that you are trying to show.
My favorite parts!
it scatters across the sky to
visit with the lonely stars
Changes that I think should be made!
I think that this is a very good peice. Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a very good peice, and this is a funny peice.
It have a good flow that makes it a very good read.
My favorite parts!
What if we found a cure for cancer?
Would another disease take its place?
This is my fav part. It makes me think of the many times that people have said that if I could be 16 again and know what I know now, I would love to go back. I always reply is always not me, I would just make different mistakes just as bad.
Changes that I think should be made!
I love this peice the way it is. I dont see any changes needed.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
I think that this is true of most of us. I love this little poem, and it has a great flow.
My favorite parts!
Is the way you change sides so easy in the poem, and the way that you are able to grab the attention of the reader.
Changes that I think should be made!
No changes are needed.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
I think that this is a great poem, and the mesage and flow is very good.
My favorite parts!
Evil glares are cast
in the shadows.
This is a true statment that we can see in our own lives on a daily basis.
Changes that I think should be made!
I don't think that there is any need of change.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a very good poem, and a message that we can relate to.
My favorite parts!
Then am I,
A happy fly,
If I live,
Or if I die.
I think that we all have felt that way...
Changes that I think should be made!
I think that this is a great poem, and I son't see any changes needed.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
I like this poem, and I think that this is a very fluent read. I loved it. I remember this when I was married for a long time, and he kept leaving.
My favorite parts!
Shut up
I'm sick of your lies
Shut up
This choice is mine
This is what I need to do to those in my in general. Those that push their orders and ideas on me. I wish I had this courage in my life since learning to talk.
Changes that I think should be made!
I dont think that it needs change.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
I love this. It has a very good flow, and I think it was funny.
My favorite parts!
I bit into a jerk
Well, I will say that this is the part that first brought the laugh. It made the whole peom funny.
Changes that I think should be made!
I don't see any changes needed.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a very good and has a great flow.
My favorite parts!
I like the way you are able to bring the reader into your poem.
Beautiful flower too beautiful to be pulled from the ground,
Sometimes I feel this way about people. I think that I am not good enought for them, and I keep my feelings about them a secret. I just don't want to take them into my life and be pulling them out of their nurture.
Changes that I think should be made!
I like the poem the way it is.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a wonderful poem with a fluent rhyme.
My favorite parts!
And I will love you until I die
A sentence that we all want to become reality.
Changes that I think should be made!
I didn't see need for changes. It was a job well done.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
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I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
You did a great job and the rhyme was really good.
My favorite parts!
I hope that I don't die
This is a statment that I have had cross my mind when things get bad.
Changes that I think should be made!
The only thing that I can say here is that I would like to know a little more of who the person was that struck the fear in your heart. What kind of trouble was you into.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
Invalid Item This item number is not valid. #1375336 by Not Available.
I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
I love this poem. I have been there, and after my 16 year marriage I am trying for this place.
My favorite parts!
Then you pulled the chair from underneath me,
you were gone and I had fell.
That is what he did since he left me for a girl just four years older than the marriage its self.
Changes that I think should be made!
I think that it is great the way it is. I don't see any need for change.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reviewer, and I know fair judge.
Invalid Item This item number is not valid. #1375336 by Not Available.
I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayer warriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a great poem and it has a great rhyming flow.
My favorite parts!
I think that the fact that you leave the poem open for discusion is a very good skill for and writer.
Changes that I think should be made!
I don't see any need for changes. You were able to make your message clearthe way it is now.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
This is a great poem. It takes skills to make a message in such a few words. I loved the rhyming patterns.
My favorite parts!
I have to say that I like it all.
Changes that I think should be made!
I think that this would be a good picture story book with other items: hat, gloves, glassese, and such...
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
I can see death in this poem. I love this poem, and I think that it is a challenge to make a statement with few words. I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
This group is a very new and is growing every day. Each person prays for the needs of others. Sherri b is called to keep the little prayer wheels turning. They are there when you need them.
Ida
This is a very good poem, and it can be taken in many paths. I see that it can show how we allow people to disect us to see what they want to see.
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
I can see death in this poem. I love this poem, and I think that it is a challenge to make a statement with few words. I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
I enjoyed taking your survey, and it really got me thinking. Thinking is what any written peice is out to bring. This is a great question.
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
I can see death in this poem. I love this poem, and I think that it is a challenge to make a statement with few words. I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
I think that this is a very well written poem, and I can relate to it. I have a twelve year old son, and I can see him in the words on this page. I think that this is a job well done, with a good laugh.
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
I can see death in this poem. I love this poem, and I think that it is a challenge to make a statement with few words. I can see that you have met the challenge. This is a very good read.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
I think that this is a very well written poem, and I can relate to it. I have a twelve year old son, and I can see him in the words on this page. I think that this is a job well done, with a good laugh.
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
I love your poem, and I can relate to this. When I was married (16 yrs), I used to starve for attention. I hurt to see others holding hands. This captured the pain that I felt back then. This is a job well done.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
You did a very good job discribing death, and I thought that this was a very good read. You were able to bring me into the story. I cold see the vampire sitting on the setee. A job well done.
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
I think that it is a real well written poem, but I just grasp what it's message is.
I would like to introduce you to a new contest, and this guy does get the poem.
Wes Hall has started a poetry contest called the Mended Heart. This is the first round of the first contest. You may be the first winner of the first contest of Wes Hall, a very talented writer, poet, reveiwer, and I know fair judge.
Thank you for sharing your work with us, and check out this new contest.
There is also a forum that is ran by some very faithful prayerwarriors, and you can leave a request without leaving a name. The place is The Open Door to Grace or the Prayer Hotline.
Beautiful, I loved this. As stupid as it sounds, Tears come to my eyes. I just see that happening with all three of my children even now. My oldest is 13, and my sons are 12 and nine. They still draw and pick flowers for me. I was just playing with them wrestling with them.
Before I leave this nice port and the talent in this peice, I want to tell you of a new place here at WDC.
Well while I am here I want to tell you about a new contest called Mended Heart contest. It is hosted or judged by Wes Hall, and it is brand new. Take time to read it or email him, and let him know that I sent you. Maybe you may witn the very first contest.
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
I think that this poem is the message that we all have felt from time to time.
My favorite parts!
I don’t know where I’m headed, but it can’t be as bad
as the loss of hopes and dreams that I once had.
This is how I feel now. I have repeated my downs of my life so much on here that I just want you to trust me on the fact that I cna relate.
Changes that I think should be made!
This is a great read without any changes.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
Hi my name is Ida and I am here to review your work. I am sure that I will love each and every word that is written. So with an open mind and kind heart here we go!
My comments about this poem/story!
Ouch! I love this poem. I wish that I had the courage to open up to a relationship that I needed to end. I really appreicate your boldness in this poem.
My favorite parts!
I can not pic one peice of this poem. It all is so unique and carries a great message of courage.
Changes that I think should be made!
This needs no changes.
Thank you for sharing this with us. It was a pleasure to visit you. Ida
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