You have written an excellent little 55-word story. I could really see your characters, and you did a good job of developing them in such a short space.
You have followed the format well, and have a good beginning, middle and end.
Hi, Hildegarde33, this is an intersting little 55-word story. The setting was a bit unusual, but I liked that. Did people dress for Halloween back then? I am also not quite sure why James "stormed" out the door. I realize you only have 55-words with which to work, but the story didn't quite gel for me.
This is a great little 55-word story. You have said so much in just a few words. You did a wonderful job with the format also. I hope this is only a story and not something that is a part of your life.
This is a nice little 55-word story. You have done a good job with the format. I don't know that it has a clear beginning, middle and end, but still a fun read. Of course, I have no idea how to play this game either, so maybe I just didn't quite understand it.
I enjoyed reading your haiku style poem about the summer sun. You have done a good job with the format, but I don't feel like it quite has the essence of a haiku.
It just seems more like a short poem to me in haiku form.
Have you written many haikus? Maybe you just need a little more practice.
I really enjoyed your little haiku about love and lovers. You have done an excellent job with the format, and have also captured the essence of a haiku.
Soothe is misspelled in the second line. Probably just a typo.
This is a nice little poem in the haiku form. You have used the right number of syllables in each line, fulfilling the haiku format, but it doesn't quite seem like a haiku to me. It just seems like the beginning of, or a short poem.
Hi, Barefoot Bob, I loved your erotic haiku about making love on the beach. I too believe in no rules, and totally related to this poem. I hope you are writing from personal experience. Thanks for sharing.
By the way, Pleasure is misspelled in the heading. Probably just a typo. I always overlook the obvious too.
I loved your poem! I loved the way you compared writing.com to a gem cutter's store, and the way your poem is filled with jewels bright and rare.
I can find nothing wrong with this lovely free-form poem. No grammatical errors, no spelling errors, but then, I wouldn't have expected any from you as a senior moderator.
Hi, color me connieann, Loved your little diamante poem contrasting comedy and horror. You have done a good job with the format for this type of poem. And you have chosen excellent words to describe your subjects.
Hi, Elisa, I really liked your little diamante poem about Lucifer/Satan. I especially liked the way you describe his Lucifer persona as elusive and dangerous, versus his more fiery and monstrous persona.
And by the way, monsterous is misspelled - should be monstrous.
Hi, almelle, This is an interesting little diamante poem. You have done a good job of contrasting friends and enemies, but I don't think it really conveys the meaning of the title "Schoolmates." Maybe I was just expecting something else.
You also did a good job with the format. Keep up the good work. Best Wishes, Cynaemon
Hi, MarkShark, This was a really fun littlel diamante poem. I thought it was kind of backwards to go from dogs to puppies. But nice words to describe "man's" best friend.
You did a good job with the format also. Keep up the good work.
I enjoyed reading your diamante poem on a love-hate relationship. It seems like a lot of people write about this subject. I could really see a relationship going like this.
I really enjoyed reading your diamante poem. You have done a great job with the format, and have done a good job with contrasting your chosen subjects. I especially liked the way you described love as natural and heavenly.
Hi, Rosealee, This is a good effort for a diamante poem. You have done a good job of following the format for this type of poem. I like the words you have used to describe summer.
Excillerating is misspelled - should be exhilarating
Hi, Squishypeach, I really liked your diamante poem. You have used excellent words to describe the sea and the sky. But you did not follow the format for this type of poem. The middle line should be four nouns, not a sentence.
Diamante format:
Line 1: Noun
Line 2: Two adjectives
Line 3: Three action verbs that end in "-ing"
Line 4: Four nouns
Line 5: Three action verbs that end in "-ing"
Line 6: Two adjectives
Line 7: Noun
I suppose this could be considered a variation on this type, but I couldn't find any examples like this. Still, a good job.
Hi, Bixbygirl, loved your little poem about parents and teens. I think you have chosen excellent words to convey your meaning, and I liked the way you contrasted loving and hating in lines three and five.
Hi, StephB, This is an interesting diamante poem. You have done a good job of following the form for this kind of poem. I can also really feel the emotions in it.
I am not sure that using the word "haunting" in two different lines is effiective..
Also the word "nauseating" is misspelled.
Best Wishes, Cynaemon
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