Some interesting thoughts on the color yellow and its significance. Of course, preferred authors should be proud of their work. It took time and dedication to reach that level. Your imagery is good and the tone of the piece is nice. Thank you for sharing your work with us and happy writing.
Broken relationships are hard, and healing can take years. It sounds like the split was amicable, but that does not erase lingering feelings and the desire to fall back into old habits. I think the author will keep the cherry tree for no other reason than it reminds her of dreams that need tending. Have a great day and thank you for sharing your work.
I would say this relationship was intense. The poem itself is frenzied, which it should be to match the imagery. I like the form and flow of the poem and find the stanzas to be processed properly. The fact that you speak of fire in a barn is intense. Keep writing and sharing your work. I enjoyed my time in your portfolio.
I thought the husband was the one who would leave, but the wife did it first. It is bittersweet as leaving a relationship after such a long time is a daunting task. There are so many unknowns and the breaking away from the marriage may become quite messy indeed. Thanks for sharing.
I didn't see the twist in the ending coming. This is well written and I'm assuming it was written for one of the contests or flash fiction forums. I enjoyed reading it and will peruse your port again. You have a wonderful style of writing that engages your audience
It is true that some create their own prison in which the walls are insurmountable until they face the fears that have put them there. This poem seeks to inspire, but it does so by pointing out the darkness present before the light. It was an interesting read. Thank you for sharing.
As I was reading this, I found myself rushing as there were many run-on sentences. The idea is good, and the basic format holds well, but the long sentences made it a little difficult to follow. Good luck in the contest and keep writing.
I thought this was clever. It depicted a wide range of poetry styles in one work. I found it easy to read and understand, and I loved that it was spiritual as well.
Before reading this, I didn't realize the number of ways one can say goodbye. This was well written and flowed smoothly. I would break it down to stanzas just to make it easier to read and for more impact on the reader as it would enhance the power of this poem.
The basic elements of this story are sound. However, there is room for fleshing out the details so that changes in the story adds up better. I would also like t see her use the powers she has as a phoenix. I think it would make the story better
I believe children are special and should not be treated poorly at any cost. What we instill in them today they will carry to tomorrow. I believe we should think hard about what we want tomorrow to look like.
I can relate to this poem as I have sustained a great deal of trauma in my life. Know that it does get better, but it will never be completely gone. you have changed, and those changes stay with you forever. however, you are better than you were before because you are overcoming the trauma someone else triggered.
I think that we forget that each species has a purpose, a reason for being. Before we reach for the week killer, perhaps we should be thinking about bees and pollination as well as fresh young dandelions that are prepared for our palettes
This is so true. So many of the middle and upper class want to forget that homelessness is a problem, so many could help but don't. so many help that can't. I enjoyed this read and will come back to your port for more tidbits.
This piece was entertaining and well written. I thought it wouldn't work at first when I saw all the dialogue, but I really enjoyed the flow and the banter between the characters.
I enjoyed reading this poem. I think too often people think only the hardest things can be faced with courage when for some the simple things like showering are acts of courage. I do believe that what you give comes back to you. Karma will get you every time.
This was a wonderful story. The only thing I would change would be near the end. I would take out the there's something you should know line. I think the daughter's discovery just wraps this up so nicely without it.
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