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Hello katwoman45 , I came across this item while searching for something of interest to read and low and behold there was this. This was an awfully good poem, it spoke of the human condition. But I'm afraid it spoke to only that which is negative. look around again and you may see: a baby laughing, children frolicking so innocently, a man helping an elder across the street.
We tend to focus only on the negative in life simply forgetting that which is good and positive. I am a spiritual person and I believe in God and His creation. I am a person and that is what I was born to be, not an animal, like ape or such. I have evolved from mankind. and have been created in my Master's
image. Thankfully I believe. Thanks for sharing this story poem I enjoyed it.
God Bless you and good luck and good writing.

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Hello RoyWrites , I came across this item on the read and review pages.
I was searching for something of interest to read and with yours I found it.
This poem is about doctors and scientists who treat patients with drugs without every trying to cure the ills. This way they can make more money. I know what you are talking about, in some instances; for example: How many doctors do you see with stomach viruses or a common cold. They may have a secret cure, but if the public knew what it was they would quit spending all that money on cold remedies.
Perhaps your on to something, who knows. I thank you for sharing this item with me your talent is appreciated, God Bless You.

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Hello MagicalJoey , This is a magical poem. This poem really touched my heart, being a Christian I found this to be an outstanding poem. God is always with us even when we doubt Him. He is all knowing and all loving towards us, He will wait upon us. I didn't see anywhere in your poem that needed changing.
It was perfectly written, Jesus would be Proud of your accomplishment in His honor. Your poem shows that through Christ Jesus we can accomplish anything.
I thank you for sharing this outstanding poem with me, Your title is perfect and appropriate for the poem and your item description is helpful. God bless you.

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Hello Tim Chiu , I found this poem on the read and review page while searching for something to review. I think this is a cool poem, it is about sports which I personally can't stand, but many people do and you sure made a good and entertaining poem about football. I've read other poems you have written and if I'm not mistaken One of them or maybe more were about sports.
You must be an avid sportsman. Anyway This was a great and wonderful sounding poem, it had six stanzas of perfect end rhymes on every other line. Thank you for sharing your lovely poetry with me and God Bless You.

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Hello drifter , I think you have written a fine article, I think everyone at least once in their lives has been called a pain in the neck, at least when they were young. The title of your article is just that a "pain in the neck". I think it is appropriate for the article see As that is what the whole article is about. I liked the item description I think it's pretty cool.
I appreciate you sharing this item with me this evening and Thank you for the entertainment, God Bless You.

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Hello Dorianne ,This was a very nicely written poem, I thought you did an exceptional job creating the words (as cold as ice). I had never seen a poem like this before, I started to tell you that you got it wrong and that your poem did not spell ice. But then I realized what you had done your wrote the words instead of letters vertically in the poem. I am going to have to try this myself. I liked your poem and I thought you did great. Thanks for sharing this unique poem with me this evening, And God Bless You.

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Hello Tanty , and welcome to writing.com. This is a place where we come together as writers to aid one another in becoming better more polished writers. I just read your little short story and I can't help but wonder if English is your second language. I say this because several of your words were missing their last letter. I thought this was a good sample of your work but you might want to go back through it to catch all of the errors .
one such as this:

if I haven't get message from him, because I know his condition

it should read:

If I haven't gotten the message from him, because I know...

if you see mine sounds a little better, but they are your words and it is your story I'm just helping to point out small errors. Just go back through it and give it a little edit and it will read more smoothly. I thought I saw a misspelled word toward the end of the story, so you might want to keep your eyes peeled for that. Thank you for sharing your talent with me today, God Bless You.

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Item Title: The most scenic travels
Author:Tim Chiu
type: poetry
Reviewed by Lisa Noe~Kittylove~

First Impression: This is a poem about a variety of vacations
I liked it because It made me think back over the many wonderful vacations I have had, like to D.C. and Florida. You know that it cost a lot of money to travel but still we can't seem to keep ourselves away from it. You used five stanzas to talk about traveling and spending money. It was a nice poem it seemed that every other line rhymed and it was well received.

EXCERPT:
I’ve boarded taxis, planes, buses, and trains,


Suggestions:
I'm not sure but you might want to check the word taxis I would have thought it might be taxies, but I could be wrong so check it out.

Conclusion: Thank you for sharing this wonderful piece of literature with me I appreciate your talent and the hard work you put into writing this item. You keep writing and I'll keep reading, God Bless You.

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Hello Quantra , and welcome to writing.com, this is a place where we make good friends and help each other improve our writing. I am here today to review this work and hopefully help you by letting you know what I think of it.
This poem is about dreams, which we all have. I know many dream of being rich, or famous, I dream of just having peace. It is nice to dream. Your poem tells of dreams but it doesn't go in to detail, it would be nice if it did. like give an example of one of your dreams. I think the title is good and appropriate for the item. I think you should rewrite the item description, it may turn a lot of readers/reviewers off, and cause them not to read on. it should read something like: What dreams are and are about.*green* or something to that affect. well thank you for sharing and good luck and good writing, God Bless YOU.

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Hello Tim Chiu , I have read quite a few of your works of poetry in the past, now this one popped up for me to read on the read and review pages. I think you did very good creating this item. Your poetry is always above average.
It rhymes really well and has a good rhythm. in this poem I can really tell that you liked rhyming . The title is good and it is appropriate for this work.
The item description is also very good and helpful. I want to thank you for sharing this poem with me, And God Bless You.

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Hello edgework , I found these contents on the read and review pages.
I thought I would give them the old once over this evening and see what I thought about what you are working on. Someday you will have big plans for the woks you have listed. The one thing I see that you need to do is to create a title for the second one. other than that you have good and helpful item descriptions and for the most part the titles are descent except of course the second one, which has no title, good luck and God Bless You.

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Hello ss_writings , I read your entire poem, however I failed to understand it or to be able to communicate. I had a hard time knowing how to pronounce the words. I think it is admirable of you to write a poem about the patriot in India and the Soldiers. I think you misspelled soldiers in the Item description.
I do think since so many English speaking people will be reading you poem It should also be translated into the English equivalent. Than people could really rate your poem in their own language be it Hindi or English. and always capitalize Hindi and India. Thank you for sharing this item with me and God Bless You.

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Hello Prosperous Snow celebrating , I found this item on the read and review pages. it was randomly chosen for me as I searched for something interesting to read.
I thought this was a well written piece of literature. The title was clever and appropriate for the poem. You used the prompt for the item description. In this instance it worked, and was very helpful. I only saw one tiny little mistake with your writing. it's hardly even worth mentioning.

Please, for give my self-preservation,

in the above line you need to close the space between for and give, it is just one word, forgive. Other than that there were no mistakes, and I feel you did a good job. Thanks for sharing this item with me, God Bless You, and I hope you have a blessed evening.