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Review of Missing  
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Joy, I am totally blown away by your poem. You really drew me in and the imagery is fantastic.
The question of whether he left or you left him stuck out a bit though because the whole poem sounds like he is the one gone, and at the end you mention that 'he is gone'.

I have to tell you, the teakettle brewing hemlock...made me wonder how he left.
I like the detail you put in about the paintings and the lines, also the 'silent words'.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us,
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Hyperbole  
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Okay, you made your point, quite well I may add, but there is one exception to the 'rule'. lol You CAN fry an egg on a sidewalk in some areas. In Tucson, Ariz when it gets to 115 degrees, you can cook that egg on a sidewalk. You may not be able to turn it over for well done. Sidewalks aren't Teflon coated. lol

In a couple of spots the rhythm was a bit off. I even counted syllables to make sure it wasn't just me not getting it right. Even though there were a couple of spots like that, I thoroughly enjoyed your poem. I do know how to say hyperbole, but you could have shared that a decade ago. I would have been smarter, sooner. lol

Thanks so much for sharing this delightful poem.
love, LinnAnn
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WOW, I know, cliché, but WOW. So soft and silky in nature and whispery delicate

first verse, last two lines, loved how they brushed against my senses.

I have no idea what frangipani means, care to share? It drew me out of your poem, the little world you created. I did like the little lass part

Last verse in its entirety, I love it. So sad though. 'Aire' is that a European spelling?
Thank you so much for sharing this.

love, LinnAnn
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Review of Distant  
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Thank you for introducing me to a new form of poetry. I do not think I will remember how to spell the style, lol. I'm not sure if I'm even saying it correctly. Thanks for the info at the bottom as well.

This poem was so sad. It made me think of a woman who had dementia. I was in the nursing home for a week or two while recuperating from surgery. I started to sing oldies, and she came out of her fog and started talking and interacting.

Your poem brought a vivid picture to my mind and it saddened me.

You did a great job in all the 'd's and how they still were relevant and meaningful. Thank you so much for sharing this.
love, LinnAnn
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I like the little picture you have. It is what helped me to know the poem was about dragon fly's. The ending, 'for I have heard them sing' confused me until the pic.

I must say, this was a very inspiring poem. It had a lot of imagery that pulled me in and made me 'feel' the poem. I live near the ocean so the whale song also caught me, Also the part about the 'unwritten score' and 'notes are scattered across the stars'.

Some parts rhymed, and I liked that but the whole poem was fluid and delightful.
Thanks so much for sharing this.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of Irish Limericks  
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I'm getting used to a new tiny keyboard, so please forgive typos.

I'm still not sure if that is all one poem or several small ones. I got a bit lost. I thought it was a story at first but then you mention different names.

The tempo was a bit off at some places. I said them out loud too and still couldn't get the rhythm right in a few places.

I do love limericks though, so thanks so much for sharing these. Aren't they so much fun?
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Thank you for including the rules to this style of poetry.

This is a very sad poem, and unfortunately there are way too many people in this type of relationship.

The last line of verse one says it all very well.

Your last two lines of the last verse are voiced as a hopeful question. Some people do not understand, love is not selfish. All it takes is both parties giving pure love and forgiveness.
Thanks for sharing this with us.Glad it was an award winner! Congrats.
love, LinnAnn
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I am impressed with how you covered so many of the different facets of love and the many ways love can be shown. There are so many people forgotten on valentines day and endure heart ache year after year.

YOu are so correct in stating that love and affection should be shown year round. Good for you to state it so nicely.

Love, LinnAnn
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Review of White Horses  
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What an outrageously cool picture to go with your poem! I love it!

Your rythm was good and consistent throughout. It was easy to read and entertaining.

I couldn't be sure if it was just a day fantasy, or a dream, or if you did grow dreams in your special world. I thought it was you growing the wings until I got to the last line, then I got confused.

'instinct, on this course that I flew' if it was instinct, wouldnt flew work better than knew? Just a suggestion.

Thanks for sharing this, lovely poem.
love, LinnAnn
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I really liked the title of your poem. It was very touching and set up the mood instantly.

The different colors threw me out. It was to distracting. Just my opinion.

I liked your first line, very expressive as to state of mind. The third line, impending, wasn't it already a state of mind?

The other verses, being saved, but the last verse, I didn't know if you ment she was in the void, but I figure you meant while you were alone in the void you didn't know she existed.

I love the last line, such a happy and hopeful ending.
Thanks so much for sharing this with us.

love, LinnAnn
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Review of A rose is a rose  
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If you get two of these reviews, it's cause th site is giving me a hard time.

I enjoyed your poem, the rhyming was great and spot on, no old standbyes. You worked the bold words in wonderfully. Was it for a contest? You didn't say.

Your first verse set up the story very well and caught my interest.

Verse two got me pulled in more with your last line, the 'pretense' had me wondering. I also wondered why she would want an old man.

You mention the portrait and how it shows the thorns, but I didn't get it. Was there a spell on her and once she was married she was ugly or a crone? I do hope you answer my questions if you had any thoughts on them in mind when you wrote this.
Thanks so much for sharing this with us. It made me smile.l

love, LinAnn
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I was torn between laughter and pity when reading your poem. Smiling won out by the way. lol

I've had a few strokes, but my name I remember. As a special ed teacher, tracing raised letters help dyslexic kids learn to read. I've also used finger spelling with them or others to help in learning their spelling words.

Now for the review, lol, sorry, ADD here, easily distracted. lol

Your rhyming was consistent, and none of the old boring rhymes, you were creative, thanks for that! I really grinned at the room but your out in the hall line. very original and entertaining. I liked the running enigmas too.

Thanks so much for sharing this cute poem with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Jessica's Cloud  
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That is so cool that you included a picture with your poem. Is this a true story? If so I hope you save this poem and the picture for your granddaughter to have and share with her children and grandchildren.

Your rhyme is consistent all the way through. The meter was easy and flowing. I also liked the response from grandma, and the different color helped to set it off so it was clearly a change in character.

Thanks so much for sharing this adorable story in verse with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of A name's worth  
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wow, that was very interesting. I may not have gotten all of it correctly, but the name calling and pulling someone out of a dream I think I got. Reminded me of when a mom calls her childs name to rouse him or her out of a nightmare.

I did not understand how a name could be serene AND mean. That part eluded my understanding. I'm sorry.

The Pandora's box part was puzzling along with life itself, but my science fiction brain started to imagine creating worlds and life just by naming them.

Thanks for the interesting read and getting my creative juices flowing!
love, LinnAnn
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Rated: E | (4.0)
Very interesting picture you have on there! lol Reminds me of when my son was death in a parade. lol

This is a very intense poem. It makes me wonder if it is real or not. You have some choice phrases in it. the beginning soundes hopeful, then the end sounded like death was to be hoped for and welcomed. The part about heaven and hell, the figure in black with the cyth, that was kind of sad.

I hope you also consider the 'go toward the light' aspect and realize that there are people around you who care and when it's time will welcome you home.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of Laura  
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I was confused at first, lol, I thought it was going to be in the Metzic format.

I didn't understand most of the poem, which is common since it springs from your inner being and I read from my inner part.

I kept trying to imagine the springs of golden chaos--At first I thought it was very long wavy or curly hair. Since you mentioned belts later I didn't think of that.

It's all very musical sounding and intrigued me even if I didn't understand it. It had good imagery with the pastel skin and aqua waters.

the spreading fire with a brush of the finger, I think I got that part! lol

Thanks for sharing this with us.

love, LinnAnn
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The stacked so high you can see the birds kicked me out of the poem and it seemed to make the meter off. It didn't seem to fit, but what if it were so high you could no longer see the sky? Just a thought.

Please pardon typos. I got a new keyboard and it's very stiff and different from my other one.

Can you imagine a mom's reaction to a gift of fleas? giggle

I sure hope that giant giraffe is not a real animal! lol It made a cute mental image of a giant paper mache' one.

Rhyming shoe, and a size 16 no less, with gnu--very cleaver!

yummerious--made me laugh

and the crowd (,) it will....

There were a lot of sentences starting with 'and' and 'then'. I'm not sure if that is a good thing or a bad thing.

Thank you for sharing this delightful poem with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Review of MY VALENTINE  
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What a tender and lovely poem. It's the kind that could go into a greeting card. You might want to send it in to one of the lesser known card makers. Hallmark has it's own crew of people with gazillions of years of pro writing.

Go for it! Google greeting cards and see what happens!

The last two lines in verse one are great and make me go 'awwwww'.

The last verse is great in showing she loves you even when you are cranky.
I really like this poem. Thanks again for sharing it with me.

love, LinnAnn
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I loved your story in the poem, and hoped it wasn't real. lol Pardon typos, I lost my glasses.

I thought there were a few little errors of grammar--

turned and chimed--chimed usually means added to another voice doesn't it?
something so simply--the ly doesn't fit grammar wise, but it does for your ten syllables a line.
both hung our hat--shouldn't that be plural?

I liked your 'ladder of hurry'. nicely done to fit in a rhyme in a unique way.

By the way, what is a kinkajou? lol I was thinking a kangaroo type animal?

Thanks for sharing this. If it is based on a true story, then I hope you loved the bed and breakfast.

Love, LinnAnn

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Being a tomboy when younger, I'm not as bad as you suggest all ladies are. lol But when I asked my son to finish building my book shelf I was annoyed he took, out one shelf and wasted the space.

I loved your poem. I'm not used to reading the sentences like that. They rhymed just fine, and you were very cleaver in the words you chose. There wasn't an old standby in among them. I am just used to pausing at the end of a line. lol

You got and held my attention, and I think in most cases you are spot on with you evaluation of women and their decorating.

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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Review of The Human Painter  
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I couldn't get into the meter of your poem. It is a lovely tribute to someone obviously very important to you. I read it over again, counted syllables, I just couldn't find a pattern.

I wonder why you 'stab' youself, mentally I presume. That caused me to worry about what you are tormenting yourself.

Your rhyming is consistent all the way through until the end. I wonder why the last line doesn't rhyme with any other word in the last verse.

Such devotion is a rare thing. Thanks for sharing this with us.

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Review of Autumn  
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I have forgotten this form. So I cannot comment on it. However, I can still comment on the loveliness of the poem.

You painted a lovely fall picture with great imagery. I could see the leaves falling, and the awkwardly made an image of leaves maybe touching the ground but caught in a breeze and tip toeing around.

I wondered about the 'ashes of yesterday' figurativly or or a dying fireplace in the present. And as I was reading, someone came into the library smelling of 'smoke' not the cig kind, the flavoring or burnt leaves. It really added to the enjoyment of your poem. You don't have smella vision eminating from your computer to here do you?

You say 'shiver indoors'. Makes me wonder why the person is shivering inside their home or self.

thanks so much for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn
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lol, at first when I started to read I thought 'This is like the wicked witch admiring herself." lol Then as I read further I realized it was a lake or something. Nicely done on the imagery!

I do have some concerns about the punctuation. You have periods where there isn't actually a complete sentence. In poetry complete sentences aren't needed, but are they if they have periods? Your first sentence using 'reflecting', where 'reflected' is the verb so there is a noun, 'mirror' and verb. I understand why you used reflecting-I'm just not sure if it's accurate. I am not a pro, but it did pull me out of the poem.

I was told when making your own form you still need to remember some basic rules, unless you are experimenting. But then some experiments work better than others. To be fair to you, I did ask for advice on the punctuation so I could grow and learn. No one gave me a clue. Sorry if I let you down.

I love each descriptive line. I love you gave credit to the Creator! Now, what made the birds take flight? lol You caught me and held me after the first little bit, and left me wondering.

Thanks for such a beautiful poem, matches our brisk winter day here in Aberdeen, wa. usa.

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Review of Bookmarks  
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Please pardon typos, at computer where screen is under the table and my trifocals don't work well with it, can't see.

I love your opening, that is how I feel about books, I have an ereader type thing, never use it.

Then you surprise me and I see you've likened your man to a beloved book. Well done.

2nd verse, last two lines, how sweet and nicely done! and the 'first edition of a classic'. love it.

...to dream of heros. I guess you have one right there!

Thanks for sharing this with us.
love, LinnAnn

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Please forgive any typos. I'm using a library computer and the screen is under the table, and I have trifocals. Can't see very well this way.

What a delightful poem you shared with us. I did not count the syllables, since you were introducing it to me, I felt you would stick in the paraameters of your choice of poem.

You drew me in with good imagery. I'm afraid I imagined my cat, and she's calico. lol

I really enjoyed the choice of words you used to describe your cat. and his/gher antics-gentle rumbles, I couldn't tell if it was a he or a she. I guess that doesn't leave out any cat lover readers! lol

Thanks so much for sharing this with us.
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