What an emotional poem. How creative to mirror the acrostic, that takes skill. I love the title, it's what pulled me in to read your poem. There is a nice flow and rhythm. It's well written.
I love the title, it works with the poem. Nicely written Haiku. I love the description you use to paint the picture of a woodland path.
I have no suggestions to offer.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
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The title pulled me in to read your poem, great job. I love the moon. There is a nice flow and good rhythm. The last stanza is my favorite. You did a wonderful job writing this piece.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.
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I enjoyed reading your poem, it holds truth as the title states. It has good imagery and flow. It's easy to follow and understand.
A suggestion would be to add stanzas and to make your lines shorter, it would help the rhythm of the poem.
"Gaze up at the tallest mountains in the distance and climb to the highest peak,
Wisdom is in the giving and Knowledge is for those that seek."
Gaze up at the tallest mountains in the distance,
climb to the highest peak.
Wisdom is the giving
and knowledge is for those that seek.
My favorite lines are
With a beating heart and a shattered mind,
We dream at night of the stars that shine.
A rose in a bush can be a forever wish,
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Such a delightful poem to read. It has good descriptive words which paints a picture of my life at times, lol. The title drew me in to read, wonderful job. I have no suggests to offer on this piece. Great job.
my favorite line "Sunlight filtering
Through the roof of green" I love the way you describe the trees overhead.
Lovely poem, I love it. It was the title that grabbed my attention. It has a nice flow and is easy to follow. It has great rhythm. The descriptive words you used paints a spiritual picture and one day we will remember who we are and we will be one again.
I have no suggestions for this piece. It is wonderfully written. Keep on writing. And brightest blessing.
A well written poem. It's easy to follow and understand. There is a good rhythm and nice flow. I can see the demons you describe and the sunshine surrounding your soul. Great job.
My favorite lines are:
"Or write of shadows that come creeping
to caress with mind chilling terror;
shadows born of the fateful moment
I committed eternal error, but..."
These are chilling, wonderful writing.
I have no suggestions for this piece.
Keep on writing.
An interesting poem. I like the title, that's what caught my attention. It's well written and easy to follow.
My favorite line(s) "Why is it that no matter what path I follow,
it is the wretched house I call mine, my only destination to follow?" - I can relate to these words.
Wonderfully written. Great imagery. The poem has a natural flow. And I love the title, it works well with this poem. I feel you captured the form perfectly. I can see and hear a lovely moment in time.
I like how you compared your dreams to silk, "Silk sheets, like my dreams,"
I enjoyed reading your poem. I also write dark poetry. Great imagery, I could see the story unfold. There is good rhythm and flow.
My only suggestion would be to put the poem into stanzas. Please remember, it is only a suggestion. This is your writing. Use what work and discard what doesn't work.
An interesting poem. I feel you followed the form well. There is depth to this piece. It offers imagery and emotion. I feel like you are ending a relationship.
The title works well with the poem, it caught my attention along with the chosen form.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
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I like how you made snowflakes dance. I had to stop and visualize that. And I love the line Soon, Mother Earth greets the dawn. Both lines make me want to go outside and watch the dawn and/or sunset while snowflakes dance toward Earth. And I hate snow and the cold.
You followed the form perfectly. There is good rhythm and flow to the poem. It had depth, imagery and emotions. Great word selection.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
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I love writing about nature. And I love your poem. It made me wonder what beauty you were talking about and why destroy it. The ending sadden me for nature should not be destroyed. I understand the concept of cutting the grass and weeds, which is why I say a small prayer for the return of the grass and offer an apology before I mow.
Your poem has beauty and power. There is a good rhythm to your poem. It flows nicely with a good word selection. My favorite lines are
Its golden petals
Sing a song to the world
In exquisite tints
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I love your poem. The title works well for this piece. The rhythm move the poem at a good pace. Each line flows nicely into the next line. Good rhyming scheme and word selection.
I can see your story unfold as I read your poem. It offers good imagery. The poem is interesting. It has a message. It also has depth and beauty. I can't pick one line as a favorite because I love waterfalls, owls, the night and the forest.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
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The title is good and it works with the poem, however, I had to read all the poem before it fit. I don't feel it set the tone or perspective of the poem. But it does entice the reader to step inside and read.
Rhythm & Flow:
There is good rhythm, the rhyming scheme helps with that. And the way it looks on the page helps with the rhythm. Each line flows nicely into the next.
Imagery & Emotions:
The imagery is good, I could see the story unfold as I read the poem. I feel some sadness, not because of death but because peasant was compared to king. And no matter which one you were you meet the same resting place in the end - within the ground.
Conclusion:
This poem is interesting to read. It carries a message that in the end we are all treated equal. It also has depth and beauty.
Thank you for sharing. Keep on writing.
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The title "My favorite blanket" reminds me of the Peanuts cartoons. I know you do not carry a blanket around with you.
I enjoyed reading your story, it holds lots of love and care. It's always nice to have something we cherish that was given to us from family or a close friend. This piece is well written. I found no mistakes.
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A poem full of meaning and emotion. The rhythm is good and moves the poem along at a good pace. It looks nice on the page.
A suggestion or two would be to add some punctuation throughout the poem it helps the flow of the poem. Also each line doesn't have to be capitalized. If the line ends with a comma the next line can be lower case.
Adding your emotions and feeling to the poem gives it something extra and you have captured that something with this poem.
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I feel your words captured the picture well. I would love to read a second stanza. Nice rhythm and flow. It looks good on the page. The title works with this poem as well.
A couple of suggestions, first change pray to prayer, it sounds better and makes more sense. The second add a couple of periods after fly and sky. It will help the flow of the poem.
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