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Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jeff

A "The Dark Society" Open in new Window. Review!


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Your words capture the picture perfectly. I like this poem, it speaks to me. The title fits and it catchy. The rhythm flows well, and it doesn't feel forced. Great job.

An interesting form to write. I may have to try it.


Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Among the Branches.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Jeff

A "The Dark Society" Open in new Window. Review!


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A wonderful poem. I can envision people building sand castles like crazy to hold the honor of best creation. The sun high in the sky and a warm breeze with blue water crashing onto the rocks in the distance.

The rhythm flows at a good even pace. Each line flows nicely into the next line making it easy to read and understand. Good word selection and use of punctuation. The title works well with this piece. It sets the mood of the poem. And the title lives up to my expectations it created for the poem.

Blue sky and vibrant sun
The scene for
Towering castles in the sand.
Love these lines. This is the imagery I described above.

I have no suggestions to offer.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Castles in the Sand.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of The Uninvited Hat  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)

Hello W.D. Wicox


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I found you featured in the Horror/Scary Newsletter.

What I like:{/b}

I like the story line. A hat comes in to spook an old man. The following line really caught my attention:
The old man imagined it escaping from a freshly covered grave like some grotesque moth climbing from a diseased cocoon.
I can see this happening.


Overall Impression:{/b}

A great read. I was hooked till the end. A great ending, you left me wondering what the creature looks like and what happen to the old man.

The beginning captured my attention. Your main character is very believable. Great description of his appearance and manner. And an awesome job at describing the setting.


Suggestions:{/b}

The man doesn't have a name, but in a story like this is really isn't necessary I guess.

I almost skipped over reading this because the title didn't catch my attention. However, the title does fit the story.


Final Thoughts/Conclusion:{/b}

I enjoyed reading The Uninvited Hat. Great job.
Thank you for sharing your story. Keep on writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Lost on the wind  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Spidey

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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I can so relate to this poem. I wish I was on a deserted beach, toes in the sand, dreaming of nothing.

Okay, back to reality. I like the title, it fit perfectly with this poem. It sets the mood and lived up to my expectations of the poem. The imagery and emotions are easily seen and felt. The rhythm is smooth and flows nicely. Good use of words and punctuation.

in caressing sands of misplaced time.
My favorite line. I love the thought of misplaced time.


Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Lost on the Wind.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Phantoms  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Dave

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Title

The title captured my attention, I had to read your poem. I love reading and writing dark and spooky poetry. The title also established the mood of the poem. And the poem lived up to my expectations created by the title.


Rhythm & Flow:

This piece has great rhythm. The way the stanzas are broken up and the punctuation really help the rhythm of the poem. Great word selection. And each line flows nicely into the next line.


Imagery & Emotions:

The imagery is amazing. I can see shadows whispering to a soul about memories. Emotionally I can relate to this poem. Great job.


Conclusion:

I love this poem as a whole, however, the following lines are my favorite:
bringing
hazy recollection,
reflection of times past--
not remembered, but
not entirely
forgotten.


A shiver runs up my spine every time I read these words.

I have no suggestions.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Phantoms.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*


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for entry "Midnight" Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Storm Machine

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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I chose this poem to read and review because of the title. I enjoy reading and writing spooky and dark items. The title gave insight to what the poem was about and it lived up to my expectations.

The rhythm of this piece flows at a nice pace. And each line flows nicely into the next line, making it easy to read and understand. The punctuation helps the rhythm. Good word selection.

There is good imagery used here. I could see someone setting up in bed watching a creature destroy his work. I could feel the fear of being woke up at midnight and seeing a creature in my room. Great job.


Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Midnight.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Ben

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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I know a little about Norse myth, so I had to read your poem. Great job on the title because it pulled me in to read about Thor and Loki. The title lives up to my expectations.

I can feel emotions throughout the poem. And great imagery, I could the story play out as I read. The rhythm and flow are nicely done. The word selection and punctuation helps maintain the rhythm. And each line flows nicely into the next.

The first stanza is my favorite, however, I like the poem as a whole. The only part I don't like is where you repeat lines, but I understand that is part of the writing scheme.


Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Thor and Loki in Jotunheim.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Fall Roses  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Tommy

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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After browsing through your port, I chose this poem because of the title. It spoke to me. I love roses and fall.

This poem has a good flow and rhythm, making it easy to understand. Each line flows nicely into the next. It has a good word selection and imagery. I could see the roses falling to ground and people walking on them. It made me sad.

burst from their
delicate buds in
crimson splendor
The poem is great as a whole, however, these are my favorite lines.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Fall Roses.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (3.5)
Hello Sue

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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And interesting poem. The sun so loved the moon that he died every night so she may live and shine.

The title is good, it catches the attention of the reader. It also lives up to my expectations of the poem. The rhythm and flow are okay. Could be better if the poem was broken into stanzas. There is a lot of good emotions and imagery. As I read each line I could see the story unfold.

I have a few suggestions to offer:
with drew make it one word, withdrew.
the could hear his lifeless body fall to the ground. they could hear . . .
Also the title should be capitalized.

Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading When the Moon Dies.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Can't let go...  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Kalesh

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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Catchy title. It caught my attention while looking through your port. The title lives up to expectations of the poem.
It sounds like it was written from the heart. Full of sadness and pain. A longing for someone you can no longer have in your life.

This piece has good rhythm, flow, word selection, and punctuation. Each line merges into the next nicely, making it easy to understand. And it is full of emotions.

Fly on, Oh beloved! on the iron bird
Into the deep sky – now being dyed red of blood
Ride the wind and the lightning bolt
My love as the shield, right through the clouds
These are my favorite lines. There is such imagery used here.


Thank you for sharing. I enjoyed reading Can't let go.
Keep on writing.


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Review of Whisper Her Name  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hello thing

I found you featured in spiritual newsletter.

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A nicely written poem with a hint of sadness. The title fits the poem. It also pulls the reader in to read it. There is a nice flow to it, with a good rhythm which is easy to follow.

A suggestion would be add punctuation to the poem.

I enjoyed reading Whisper Her Name. Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Review of Everything  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hello Fillius von Straught

I found you featured in the poetry newsletter.

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A wonderful poem. Well written. The flow is smooth, making it easy to read and to understand. It has great rhythm and a nice word selection and placement.

The title needs some work, it's not catchy enough to pull the reader into reading your poem. The rhyming flow is not constant. Parts rhyme within the couplet and then other lines rhyme to the stanzas.

There is good imagery through out the poem. I get a sense that Mary is a smart woman until the owl asks about creatures of the world. Then a lost to Mary.

I enjoyed reading Everything. Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*


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Review of The Butterfly  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Kira Jane Griffin

I found you featured in the poetry newsletter.

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Title

A lovely title. I love butterflies so I was drawn into reading your poem. The title lived up to my expectations of the poem. It also established perspective, mood, and tone.


Rhythm & Flow:

It has great rhythm. The word section and punctuation help with the pace of the poem. For a story poem you managed to add a rhyme scheme as well. Each line flows nicely into the next making it easy to read and understand. Great job.


Imagery & Emotions:

A wonderful job at imagery and emotion. I can see the story unfold as I read. I can feel the joy the butterfly felt in the beginning then fear of not completing her mission. It ended on a very sad note. Great job.


Conclusion:

And so she flew above the trees
And though the wind did blow-
She never tore her wits away
That place which she must go.

The above lines I can relate too. It shows courage.

I have to say I didn't like the ending. I don't like to see the creatures of the world die. I know it is a part of life though.

I enjoyed reading The Butterfly. Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*


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Review of Into The Wild  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Whitemorn

I found you listed on the reviewing page.

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Title

The title is catchy. It captured my attention while reading through the list. It gives the perspective of stepping outside and your poem lives up to that expectation.


Rhythm & Flow:

Nice bouncy rhythm with a rhyming scheme. Each line flows nicely into the next line. Good word selection and the use of punctuation.


Imagery & Emotions:

There is great imagery here. With your words you have painted a picture of the glimpse into the morning of a bunny.

Conclusion:

I close the door, she hops away into the orange hue.

I see a beautiful sunrise with a bunny happily hopping away. One of my favorite lines.

I have no suggestion to offer.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*


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Review of The Luring  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hello Fairport

I found you listed on the dark genre page.

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Title

The title is very catchy. It pulls the reader in. It add depth and mood to the poem. The title lives up to my expectations. The tag line adds more excitement and helps entice the reader.



Rhythm & Flow:

The rhyme and rhythm pulls the plot along at a good pace. The words flow together nicely. And each line adds to the flow making it easy to follow and understand.

A little more punctuation could help the flow of the poem.


Imagery & Emotions:

This piece is full of imagery and emotions. I can see someone walking quickly down a lone path frighten. With terror rising up at all the unseen noises.

Conclusion:

I like the last stanza best. The final moments before passing into the shadow realm.

I enjoyed reading The Luring. Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*


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Review of Being Thankful  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (5.0)

Hello Prosperous Snow


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I found you featured in the Spiritual Newsletter.

What I like:{/b}

I like that you have kept true to yourself about your gratitude lists. I feel if everyone would do this on at a weekly basis the world would be in a better place.


Overall Impression:{/b}

I wouldn't worry if you can prove anything to others. If it satisfies you then that is all is needed. It is a great way to express your spirituality.

I feel the essay is well written. You have let emotions flow into your writing. And you stayed focused, not straying off topic.


Suggestions:{/b}

I have no suggestions to offer.


Thank you for sharing your story. Keep on writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Prom Queen  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
Hello Legerdemaim

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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The title and tag line pulled me in, What kind of secret could the prom queen have.

There are lots of emotions in this short piece. I felt terror riding up as I read about blood and unheard cries. Then sadness for the secret left behind. Anger came next because of what happen, abandoning a life.

Each line flows into the next line nicely. Making it easy to read and understand. I feel the piece is well written and I have no suggestions.


Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Synchronicity  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: ASR | (5.0)
Hello Jace

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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I feel a lot of emotion in such few lines. The love here is eternal. An interesting title, it seems to fit with this piece. I like the type of poetry used, it looks hard to write. I mean to get just the right word to make sense.

I feel this poem is well written and I have no suggestions to offer. Amazing job.


I enjoyed reading synchronicity. Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (5.0)
Hello Joy

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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A poem full of imagery. I see the rain cascading down intermingling with the leaves of the trees, leaving the ground muddy for the forest creatures to play.

The title attracted my attention. I love Spring and gentle rains. Each line flows nicely into the next line making it easy to read and understand. The word selection and punctuation help the rhythm, along with the rhyme scheme.

I feel this piece is well written. I have no suggestions to offer.



I enjoyed reading Under the April Rain. Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Wonderland  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello Jeff

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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The poem follows the prompt well. It has a good flow, each line flows nicely into the next. The word selection and punctuation helps the rhythm and the rhyming scheme. The title fits well with this piece.

I like the 3rd stanza the best. To give over your soul if you travel deeper down the rabbit hole, to me this is the darkest stanza in the poem.

My only suggestion is that I don't feel this poem is dark.

I enjoyed reading Wonderland.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Arrival of Autumn  Open in new Window.
Review by The Dark Faery Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Dragon Rheyne

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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A most delicious poem. The title lives up to my expectations of the poem. It caught my eye as I scanned through your port. It offers creativity and imagery. I feel you have captured the perfect picture of Autumn.

It has a great flow, making it easy to read and to understand. The word selection and punctuation add the rhythm. It moves at a good pace.

The trees stand bare now,
A skeleton of their former selves,
Seemingly lifeless,
Autumn sweeps across the land,
I love these lines, great description.

A suggestion: Curtaining the with earth with a blanket of fog, Curtaining the earth with . . . sounds better.

I enjoyed reading Arrival of Autumn.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Gravity Strings  Open in new Window.
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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Hello DiskartetHaraya

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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A nice piece of prose.

The title fits well with this piece, it lives up to my expectations of the poem. It has a catchy effect. The poem has a good flow to it. It also has good imagery.

A suggestion: to make this piece into a few paragraphs. That would make it easier to read and have a better flow to it.

I enjoyed reading Gravity Strings.
Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Hourglass  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hello Gruesum1

I found you featured in the Poetry Newsletter.

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Awesome, the poem is in the shape of the title. There is a great rhythm to your poem and each line flows nicely into the next. I also noticed there is a rhyme scheme. This piece took time and creativity to write.

Hourglass is an amazing piece I feel it is well written. There is emotion. I have no suggestions to offer.

Thank you for sharing.
Keep on Writing!


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Review of Emelie  Open in new Window.
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
Hello iKiyasama


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I found you through the Read & Review.


What I like:

I liked the idea of the story line. It's been done before, but you pulled it off nicely. I also like the title, it seams to fit well for this story. However, I don't feel it hooks the reader into your story.

Overall Impression:

Good start to your story. The first paragraph pulled me in. I had to continue on. Good description of Emelie, her character comes alive. And you added negative traits to her as a teenager, Good Job.

I can see the bedroom and closet through your words. And I can see the story unfold as I read. You kept the ending real.

The plot moves at a good pace. It not slow, but it doesn't rush. It is easy to read and understand. Good job.


Suggestions:

Those piercing green eyes seemed to mock her through the pages and she shivered, closing the book to shut out the images of the big fight they had had that night.
I believe there needs to be a comma between had and had, because you are using the same word twice so there should be a pause. If I am wrong, please ignore.


Final Thoughts/Conclusion:

Emelie is well written and I enjoyed reading it.

Thank you for sharing your story. Keep on writing!


Gypsy Ann *ButterflyV*

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Review of Transformation  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
Hello Wake up and Live

This is an Angel Review *Angel*  *Angel*

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Starting with the title, it's a little catchy. It gets the reader wondering what happen in August that we need to know about. I feel this short piece is well written and I have no suggestions.

There is good description of the setting and the transformation from human to fish. You established the setting. Good way to end the story. I could see the story taking place as I read.

The plot moves along at a good pace. It's not slow, however, it doesn't rush everything.


I enjoyed reading One Morning in August
Thank you for sharing.
Keep on writing.


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