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Review of An Angel's Smile  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (4.0)
I'm reviewing this for you because of your request on the Review Request Page.

*Heart* What I liked about this poem is it's lighthearted hint at something evil behind the angel's smile!

*Idea* You might want to move the title a few spaces above the poem itself. Perhaps a comma would do at the end of line nine here?

I have no further suggestions to make this a better write.

~Overall, I found this to be an uplifting piece of romantic poetry.

Write on.

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Review of My Pilot  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (3.5)
I am reviewing this for you because of your request for reviews on the Request Reviews page.

*Heart* What I liked best about this free verse poem of yours is your choice of nouns! They are in themselves - eccentric, and stand out here!

*Thumbsdown* The reason I have given this a rating of 3 1/2 *Star*s is because of the following notations:

*Note1* n the first stanza - fourth line - you probably meant to spellmanoeuvre (maneuver).

*Note2* I stumbled through the fourth stanza here. My suggestion to you would be to revise this stanza to make the flow better.
You might even consider replacing the word (hope)with the word(pray) in the third line of this stanza.

*Note3* Have you considered not breaking this free verse up into stanzas here? I think it would help the flow, and be easier on the eyes.

Overall~ My opinion and it's just mine- I think that this poem has the potential of becoming a much better write.

Write on.

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Review of Better  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really like this short but powerful poem.

You've managed to pair up opposites nicely here to get your point across - better - or - worse.

My favorite line - Selfishness claws the breast alongside generosity.

It says a lot about the author and anyone can relate to it.

A wise write.
Write on.

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Review of Penny Candy  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (4.5)
I'm back for a re-read and I appreciate the fact that you have fixed the error.

*Note3* I am re-rating this for you, but you need to take out one of those the's in the the character in the last line.

Thanks for your entry!

Good Luck!

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Review of Penny Candy  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (4.0)
First off I would like to say thank you for entering my first contest!

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Now on to my review of your story ~

*Balloon3* WHAT I LIKED *Balloon3*

*Thumbsup*You have followed the prompt here very well. You keep the prompt as the theme in your story constant.

*Thumbsup*I like that you ended your story with the same words as you started it with.

*Balloon3* WHAT I DIDN'T LIKE *Balloon3*

*Thumbsdown*Actually, you have started with FOUR words and ended with the same FOUR here! When cut back to THREE (as stated in the rules of this contest) - they end up differently. Do you see that?

However, I don't have the heart to disqualify you for that if you change it toTHREE instead of FOUR *Heart*

*Balloon3* FORM/STRUCTURE *Balloon3*

*Note3*This is well written in first person - past and present tense is written fittingly.

*Note3* I enjoyed the "penny candy" plot. You've packed a lot of story into your word count here and succeeded in pulling off a great beginning, middle, and end to your story.

*Balloon3* SUGGESTIONS *Balloon3*

*Idea* The only suggestion I have is that you change your FOUR words at the beginning and end to THREE words instead. I loved your story and want to see your entry remain in the contest. I will even give it a higher rating.

*Balloon3* OVERALL IMPRESSION *Balloon3*

*Note3* I enjoyed this somewhat educational 'penny candy' walk down memory lane with you!

Good luck in the contest!



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Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
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I've been reading some in your port today. I'm back again to review a few.
this one is called "The Ways Of Heart".

I think someone has way under rated this for you!

I happen to like it and I think it is worthy of a higher rating.

*Thumbsup* I like how you list the complexities of the nature of the heart.

*Thumbsup* That you can explain in perfect rhyme and meter in such short a poem the instinctive way of the matters of the heart.

*Heart* How you wrap it up in the last couplet here and give God the credit!

A fine write. I'll be back to review more later.
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Review of You Just Left  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
This is the first time I have ever visited your port. I am so glad that I did, for I've found some pretty outstanding reading in here.

I really enjoyed reading your poetry. Especially this poem.

*Idea* You say you are not a poet. I think you are.

Your words had a profound effect on me as I read from line to line. I like how your emotions roll through each stanza and gather steam, then at the end they seem to explode!

Your choice of free verse is very fitting for the way you present your thoughts.

Thanks for the remarkable read. I hope you do write more poetry.
Write on.

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Review of Allergies  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (4.5)
I happen to think that this is a good example of alliteration presented in a very good poem.

I am not familiar with the form, but then I'm not one to judge the form either.

My favorite part being - For that little pill that
Demolishes your dreariness.

A good write.
Keep up the good work.
ShiShad

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Review of I Miss  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
I don't know if this would be considered a poem or prose, but either way it is expressively and impressively written.

A wonderful heartwarming tribute to your Grandma.

This is packed full of REAL emotions. I don't know how anyone could come away from it untouched by your sense of how much this person meant to you and how dearly they will be missed.

A very good write indeed.
Write on.
ShiShad

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Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a grand tribute you have written here in loving memory of your beloved pet Charlie.

Love flows from start to finish in this somewhat lengthy free verse.

The length of the poem itself did not distract me from the quality of the write, however; it seemed to have added to the grandness of your creation.

I see no errors.

Thank you for sharing this lovely write in my "FootPaws of Friends."

ShiShad

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Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a graceful read this poem is.

You have done a fine job writing this poem about country kind of living.

I love the simplicity of the verse and the emphasis put on simplicity in the meaning of this poem.

I see no errors here.

*Idea* I have only one suggestion. Maybe you might consider using the ~ instead of the - to separate your stanzas. It's just a suggestion.

A very good write.
Write on.
ShiShad


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Review of The Lost Love  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (4.5)
Thanks for the review of one of my poems recently. I decided to come in and check out your port.

I really enjoyed reading this poem of lost love.

My favorite part is the second stanza here. I especially like the line:
A whirlwind; indeed the rapture
to engulf all conciousness.

One can feel your pain especially when reading the last line of your poem.

A good write.
Write on.
Shishad

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Review of Mend your ways  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (4.5)
Well I think that this poem deserves a better rating than the one I see here.

I happen to like this rather humorous write!

It's short, but it does get right to the point rather nicely.

I especially like the way you revealed the results of mending yourself in the last few lines here.*Bigsmile*

Write on. ShiShad
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Review of The Paper Cell  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
I am sure that this is a fairly good story of fan fiction,
However, I could not continue to read through it.

In order to grasp the reader's interest I suggest you break this story up into many paragraphs.

For example: each time a character says something make that a paragraph.

Then when a different character says something make that a different paragraph.

Once you break this story up into separate paragraphs you will have yourself a very good write. One that is appealing to the eye and capable of keeping the readers interest.

Write on.
Shishad

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Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
I really enjoyed this upbeat original poem.

It puts the reader in a happy mood with a smile on their face.

I especially like the lines: The weather is fine
When You rain on Me
I see no errors here.

Welcome to WDC. I hope you stay long and continue to write more.
ShiShad


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Review of The Victors  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
A nicely written poem about wars and war haunts.

This poem flows well from the beginning to the end.

I like how the writer has worded the phrases here with an emphasis on the rhyming sounds.

The poem is rather short...but says so much in it's context about the falsehood of the victor.

I see no errors.
Write on.
ShiShad


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Review of Walk Forward  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
This is a well written poem with an emphasis on 'urgency' all the way from the first line to the last.

I love how you have repeatedly asked to be taken away from the hurt and pain in the world.
"Take me to the future---
where everything is great,"


"Take me to tomorrow.
Won't you take me there today?"

I see no errors here. Only a fine rhyming verse full of emotion.
ShiShad

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Review of Write Stuff  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
I just spent about 40 minutes reading in your port. What an amazing port!

*Star* Your writing talent shines brilliantly throughout it.

*Heart* I especially liked this short, but very sweet poem. I love the way it makes me feel-as if it is I -who loves to write also!

Thanks for sharing.
ShiShad

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Review of Teach Me To Dance  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a wonderfully moving, whimsical delight!

You certainly have a flair for putting your thoughts on paper with this refreshing piece.

I see no grammatical errors.

I love the free flow and felt as though I was beginning to dance myself!

May you continue to write more for our thirsty eyes.

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Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (5.0)
What a special page and a wonderful idea you have come up with here.

Your presentation of these gifted Signatures is very unique and cheerful!

I was totally surprised when I saw one created by myself here also!

*Heart* A warm and wonderful Web Page *Heart*
ShiShad
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Review of Remembering Tata  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: E | (4.5)
I enjoyed this loving poem that paid tribute to a grandfather.

*Star* Nice flowing verses of perfect rhyme throughout makes this a fine traditional form of rhyming poetry.

Great imagery lends to the heartwarming love that is projected in every stanza here.

Good work. Write on.
ShiShad

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Review by ShiShad
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
Welcome to WDC! I hope you enjoy your stay and stay long.

*Note3* I really enjoyed this story about a cat named Lil' Bit.

*Note2* Your use of imagery is well done throughout the story.

*Idea* You began telling your story in the first person, then about half way through you changed the "I" to "We". I think it would make it a better story if you kept to one or the other.

*Heart* I loved the ending! A good read.
Write on.
ShiShad

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Review of LIVING A LIE  
Review by ShiShad
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
*Heart* I loved this poem. I was completely enthralled from the first line to the last.

*Exclaim* I'm left totally surprised at how your words drew me in choked me up and kept me wanting more!

*Note1* The meter may not be perfect, but the rhyme is right on, and the effect of the message goes beyond the words in verse.

I'm your fan. Write on!
ShiShad

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Review by ShiShad
Rated: ASR | (5.0)
What a wonderful write about an American tragedy.

I found this to be- not only informative but all inspiring. The whole article moved me from the beginning to the end. Very thought provoking and well done.

Nothing could make this a better write. It is perfect as it is.
Do write on.
ShiShad

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Review by ShiShad
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
This is such a heart-wrenching poem about a pet cat.

The reader can't help but feel the strong emotion that is embedded in the poem.

A very good write about a topic that isn't that easy to convey feelings about.

I would be honored if you would submit this poem in my Pet Garden forum-
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