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I believe in constructive criticism and honesty. I can adapt my review style to fit the kind of feedback an author is looking for (e.g., developmental suggestions, fine-tuning, proofreading, etc.), but will always try to be as encouraging and helpful as possible.
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Plotting, characterization, dialogue, structure/pacing, and professional considerations. I can also do serviceable technical editing/proofreading, but I'm much better with developmental/creative feedback.
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I read almost everything. I particularly love genre fiction (mystery/thriller and science fiction/fantasy especially) and nonfiction of all kinds.
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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Adherennium Dr of Phoolishness

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this essay on the topic of retail and main shopping areas in metropolitan areas. I thought you laid out your position well, and illustrated it with effective statistics and details that kept the reader's interest.


*Firework* Suggestions

No particular suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a really solid job with this essay. It was a quick, easy, and informative read. Well done!


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Review of Midnight Light  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Dec-of-Glory

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed the structure and pacing of this piece. I thought both really accentuated the themes of this poem and you did a great job of putting everything together into an appealing, well-organized piece. Nice work!


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job. Well done! *Smile*


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Review of Homesick  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi ~Camrin~

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*Firework* Positives

I thought this was a well-written and thought-provoking piece of writing. The periodic questions you pose to the reader in the poem helps keep the reader engaged and contemplating throughout the reading experience. I also thought the second person point of view was a good choice for this type of item.


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions come to mind.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a good job with this poem. Nice work!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Soul sister

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*Firework* Positives

I liked the overall message of this letter. You did a great job of covering the basics of how one goes about achieving salvation from a Christian theological standpoint, and emphasizing some clear steps that individuals can take to accept Jesus.


*Firework* Suggestions

In my experience, just telling people that they are sinners and in need of repentance is a difficult way to reach the lost. Given the brevity of this piece, I think it would be better to focus on why Jesus is worth following or learning more about. Getting someone to accept (or even see) their own faults can be really complicated and, while this piece may speak to those who know they fall short, it might have a difficult time reaching those who think they're already good people and don't have a need for salvation.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read and thought you did a great job with this letter. Nice work!


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Jeff
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Review of On Reviewing  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi spidey

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*Firework* Positives

This is a great essay on reviewing, with some excellent tips and advice for how to improve the quality of one's reviews. I particularly like the advice that recommends approaching a review as not just a writing critic, but also a reader. I think that's an under-utilized perspective in reviewing, and it's great advice.


*Firework* Suggestions

I don't have any particular suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

You did a great job with this essay. It was clear, concise, and informative. Nice work!


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Jeff
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Review of Cowboy Roam  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi Smee

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this poem. It felt like reading one of those American tall tales that relays the folklore around a particular legend. I thought the structure of the poem was great and it was an effortless, entertaining read.


*Firework* Suggestions

I don't have any specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

This was a fun, enjoyable poem to read. Nicely done!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi super sleuth

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a particularly good job of using the prompt words and working them into the poem in a naturalistic and eloquent way. Given the number of words and the brevity of the poem, that's really impressive.


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

I thought you did a great job on this poem. Well done!


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Review of Yesterday  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi Amay

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*Firework* Positives

I really loved this poem. I thought it was a really eloquent, beautiful tribute to the principal you knew. You did a great job of highlighting some of her best features and memorable details in comparatively few words.


*Firework* Suggestions

I don't have any suggestions for improvement. This was a really excellent poem!


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was a touching tribute to a principal who so clearly had a positive effect on you and others. Nice work!


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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*Train* Positives

I really enjoyed this poem and the sentiment you conveyed. I think it's easy for a lot of people to see the negative connotations of concepts like "worthless" and "useless" and think that the world would be better off without such concepts in them. But it's only through the experience of things that are truly worthless or useless that things can be seen to have worth or have use. And whether something is of worth is definitely in the eye of the beholder.


*Train* Suggestions

I don't really have any suggestions for improvement. I thought your poem was straight to the point, clear, and effective. If I were going to nitpick (and I have to because I need to get this review up to 1,000 characters! *Laugh*), I would maybe suggest finessing the claim that there is "no such thing" as normality or worthlessness. While the point that someone can find value in anything, and that there is no one definition of what it means to be "normal" are well taken, it's also true that some things are by definition in the spectrum of normality or widely recognized as having essentially no discernible value. It might be worth exploring how to make your overall point without a blanket assertion that normality and worthlessness are completely subjective constructs.


*Train* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this poem. Nice work!


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Review of Wishing Well  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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Hi Orion69

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*Firework* Positives

The tension and sense of urgency in this piece is really great. You did an excellent job setting up a dramatic and tense narrative where the reader is always guessing what's going on.


*Firework* Suggestions

I was hoping for a little more clarity on how the different elements of the story tied together by the end. In such a short piece, there were so many different elements (e.g., Jack visions, visiting his old cabin, his family is there, the fact that his injuries seemed to have healed themselves, the significance of the well, Jack's experiences right before he leapt into the well, etc. I wanted the story to have a little more of a connective throughline for all these disparate elements.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was a really engaging, entertaining read. You did a great job!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi G. B. Williams

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this item. I thought a lot of the semi-rhetorical questions that you asked were thought-provoking and interesting, and really challenge the reader to think about where they place their attention, desires, etc. I thought the structure was really nice and the brevity worked well for the piece.


*Firework* Suggestions

There were a couple of statements that I thought could use a little more explanation. Particularly the assertions that "the government has become the primary provider" and "churches are practically empty, while schools are packed."

This may likely just be my own opinion and experiences speaking, but there seems to be a lot of discontent lately with what the government does (or does not) provided to its citizens, and that of course differs depending on which government you're subject to! Given the level of discontent with what the government provides, it might be helpful to explain what you see it as the primary provider of, specifically.

Similarly, the visual of empty churches and full schools is a vivid one, but based on the juxtaposition it seems like you're implying that children can only go to one or the other; that churches are empty because schools are full. I'm not sure I see the connection there. It might be a good idea to further elaborate on the connection or causation you see between church and formalized education.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought you did a great job with this piece. It was thought-provoking and inspirational. Nice work! *Smile*


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Review of Sleepless Sunday  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Purple Princess

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*Train* Positives

I really liked the use of onomatopoeia in this piece. It gave everything a sense of dynamism that really kept my attention as I read through everything. I also thought you did a great job with the amount of detail in the piece. There was just enough to create vivid imagery without dragging down the pacing or making it feel overly long. You also did a great job working the three prompt words into the story in a natural way.


*Train* Suggestions

With such a short word count, it can be difficult to tell a complete narrative story, and this one felt like it was lacking a bit of a defined beginning, middle, and end. It read as more of a vignette or anecdote than a narrative. That may well have been the intention, but I found it a bit difficult to tell whether I was reading an actual short story (as the item labels imply) or a nonfiction accounting of just a routine day.


*Train* Overall

Overall, I found this piece well-written and engaging. It was a clever way to address all of the words in the prompt and the fact that you were able to describe a morning routine in such detail with so few words is really impressive. Nice job!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
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Hi Lana

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed the action and the sense of urgency in this piece. You did a great job of keeping the tension building and the story moving along at a brisk pace. This was a fun, quick read.


*Firework* Suggestions

There's a tendency in this story to alternate between past and present tense, with descriptions like, "She pushes through the crowd" followed by "She struggled and then slipped out" which made the flow of the read a little difficult. There was also a point where the POV changed from third person to first person. I'd recommend sticking with one tense and POV throughout the story.

Typo: "She pushes through the crowded aisle of newly boarded passengers..."

I'm a little unclear on where she pulled the gun from. The narrative says that "her hand darted into her shirt and produced a small gun" but earlier in the story it's mentioned that she's wearing "a skimpy white top that was so tight you could tell the bra color" (which seems like a tough garment to hide a gun in, even one of a small caliber.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was a fun, entertaining read. Nice work!


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Review of Car Confessionals  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi SIC

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*Firework* Positives

I thought you did a really great job with this item. It was really evocative and well-presented.


*Firework* Suggestions

I was a little confused by the intro, which said "a glimpse into [your] writing style." Based on that description, I assumed it was a poem about your writing style rather than a poem that is simply an example of the types of poems you write.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I thought this was an excellent poem and it was an engaging read. Nice work!


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Review of Go Big or Go Home  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 13+ | (3.5)
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Hi nomlet

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*Firework* Positives

I really enjoyed the amount of detail and description you managed to fit into such a short item. With less than 300 words to work with, that's not easy to do!


*Firework* Suggestions

The extent of the injury felt a little off in terms of intensity. From the way it's described, it sounds like a really grievous injury, but the language of the story, as well as Kyle's reaction to it (i.e., just deciding that maybe he'd try the bike trick another day) kind of shrugs it off as routine.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was an enjoyable, well-written story. Nice work! *Smile*


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Review by Jeff
In affiliation with I Write  
Rated: 18+ | (3.5)
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*Train* Positives

As always, you do a great job of setting the scene in the reader's mind. Your use of description is detailed enough to give the reader a clear picture of the scene, without weighing it down with unnecessary description that slows down the read or detracts from the actual story you're trying to tell.


*Train* Suggestions

In the second paragraph, "wheelchair" is two words, and the word "slamming" is repeated twice in a row which seems to be a typo.

I'd also recommend varying the structure of this piece a bit to create some more variety for the reader, as there were a lot of similarly structured elements (e.g., starting paragraphs with "Susie" and repeating "loud angry noises" several times. While repetition can be really effective for making a point, it can also cause the reader to lose interest if it's overdone, and in this case I think some diversifying of the language will help maintain reader interest.


*Train* Overall

Overall, this was a short, easy to read item that definitely clearly communicated your intentions to the reader. Nice job!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi writer

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this poem. I particularly liked the structure and the easy flow of the read, as well as the theme of someone you're attracted too hacking your attention and focus. That was really unique and kept the poem engaging throughout.


*Firework* Suggestions

In the second line, I think you're missing an article "I am not an/your/etc. attacker." That was the only small issue that I noticed in an otherwise solid piece.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was a fun read and I thought you did a great job with it. Nice work!


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Review of Songs And Lyrics  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi Chef Juan

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*Firework* Positives

I really identified with the emotions you conveyed in this piece. Identifying with a piece of music, not so much for the specific lyrics but for the way it connects to your own inner thoughts and memories, is a feeling I'm definitely familiar with and while "A Million Reasons" by Lady Gaga isn't one of those songs that makes those connections for me, I am familiar with it and can see why it would be so powerful for some. You did a great job of connecting with your reader to express what you're feeling.


*Firework* Suggestions

Presenting this item as a single paragraph block of text made it a little difficult to read and follow along with, especially given that there are a couple of different major points that you're trying to make. Breaking this item up into smaller, more manageable paragraphs that follow with the central point you're trying to make would increase reader engagement, I think.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was a well-written item that definitely got its point across. I've similarly had periods of time where I'm not terribly productive as a writer, and all I can say is that, based on this item, I hope you keep finding time to write because this was really well done! *Smile*


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Review of Pizza Party  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Dorianne

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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed this poem. I thought you did a great job with the personification of the pizza ingredients and the epulaeryu is a great poetry form for this subject matter. It's a new form for me, but I'm excited to give it a try!


*Firework* Suggestions

The only small suggestion I have is that "Pizza Party" felt like a slightly inaccurate title given that the poem was about the pizza ingredients themselves, personifying them, and making the pizza. There wasn't anything in the poem that seemed "party" related, except maybe the last line, so I can't help but think there might be a better title for this poem that would give readers a clearer picture of what they're about to read.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I really enjoyed this poem. Well done!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Ned

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*Firework* Positives

This was a really charming, entertaining story. The character of Crustbin Thistlebum was well-developed and likable (despite having some rough edges), and the worldbuilding that went into this story about the fairy world was really interesting and humorous. Nice work!


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement.


*Firework* Overall

I noticed at the bottom of the page that this was a finalist for a Quill Award in 2019, and I can definitely understand why. Overall, it was a pleasure to read. Great job! *Smile*


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi Schnujo Enjoyed Colombia

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*Firework* Positives

Congratulations on your account anniversary! Hard to believe you've been here for eight years already! *Shock2*

The Contest Challenge is a great way of recognizing other activities on the site and giving them a chance to be highlighted and see increased participation. You always do a good job of picking a good selection of different types of contests, so that every month has something that should appeal to most people.


*Firework* Suggestions

The only real suggestion I have is to potentially offer is to consider updating the mechanics for how to participate in the "January celebration." Going back and entering every round of the contest is a worthy challenge, but each year we get chronologically further and further away from some of those contest rounds and it increases the chances that a contest will be closed or even gone entirely (I believe you and I spoke about this when I was attempting the Contest Challenge).

It's an awful lot of pressure to put on yourself to have to monitor the participants, encourage them to work on other months if the contest they want at the moment isn't open, etc. It might be worth looking into some kind of universal rule about make-ups that's a little easier on everybody; perhaps something along the lines of having to find a comparable substitute contest to enter that's currently active, or something like that.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I admire everything you've accomplished with this activity. It's a great way to highlight so many other people's activities on the site, and you're certainly second to none when it comes to the generosity you lavish on your participants! *Smile*


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Jeff
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Review of Stage Kiss  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi Niki

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*Firework* Positives

I thought you did a really great job of conveying a story full of emotion in this poem. With just a few short lines and a handful of words, you were able to pack a ton of complexity into the narrator's emotions surrounding her first kiss.


*Firework* Suggestions

No specific suggestions for improvement come to mind. I thought you did a great job!


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was an engaging, entertaining poem to read. Nicely done!


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Review by Jeff
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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*Firework* Positives

I enjoyed your review of The Killing Floor by Lee Child. Like you, I stumbled across this book not really knowing a lot about the author or the series, other than that it was highly recommend by several people. Like you, I really enjoyed the way the book played out and thought it was quite well written.


*Firework* Suggestions

I don't really have any suggestions for improvement, as this was a piece detailing your thoughts on a book you read... and you did that just fine! *Smile*


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I enjoyed reading this review; it brought back memories of when I first read and enjoyed the book years ago. Nice job! *Smile*


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Jeff
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Review of Dizzy  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Shepard

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I really like the use of the formatting on screen to add to the feeling of disorientation and dizziness. I thought it was a great way to visually put your reader in the mindset of the author as they experience disorientation.


*Firework* Suggestions

The very last line seems to have a bit of a conflict with the verb tense. "I've" is past tense while "waken" is present tense. I'd suggest either "I've awoken" or "I awaken" in order to make that line fully past tense or present tense, whichever you prefer.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, this was a really fun item to read. I thought you did a great job with it!


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Review of Water  
Review by Jeff
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Rated: E | (3.5)
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Hi Pinkpaws66

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This item in your portfolio caught my attention because I'm also someone who finds water comforting. I find swimming very relaxing, and I've been lucky enough to live within driving distance of the ocean for the better part of my adult life, and I've always found the sound of water to be therapeutic.

I think your theory about feeling a connection to water due to our inherent dependence on it for survival is an interesting one and a primal connection to it could definitely explain why so many of us feel that way around water.


*Firework* Suggestions

This item was labeled as an "essay" and it feels a bit short and underdeveloped to truly be considered an essay. I think there's plenty of room to expand it into a full essay with a little expansion, developing some additional points, etc. That said, if this piece is truly includes the extent of your thoughts on the subject and you prefer it to be more of a statement of a brief theory, you might want to consider changing the item sub-type to "prose" or "thesis" in order to better categorize it.


*Firework* Overall

Overall, I enjoyed the read and found this a thought-provoking piece of writing. Well done!


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Jeff
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