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Review of Ragdoll  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Ragdoll

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A good poem describing a little rag doll that the writer has sitting on the edge of his desk. This is a free verse poem and easy to read.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Simple plot. Just describe the doll.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I like your poems because they deal with so many things, This was a good poem.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

I don't have to say because i know you will. but keep writing and sharing.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


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Review of Blood of Winter Snow

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A perfect little Haiku.


SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Great visual and simplicity.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing and enjoy your WDC anniversary


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Review of Awakening  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)


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Review of Awakening

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Very good story. You have captured a mysterious account of a not dead vampire who is just needing blood to once again have power. The story told from the viewpoint of the vampire is exceptional.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

An exceptional plot while developing the characters first only by what the vampire can hear. As the story continues more is revealed until we are clear what is happening.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your work. Enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (3.5)


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Review of Truck Drivers Are All The Same

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An explanation by a truck driver of an incident that occurred in Florida. While the story is well detailed I found it a trifle boring.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Professional truck drivers may try to guardians of the highways but the problem with so many more entering the profession, their experience level is decreasing. I found the story interesting but there was too much detail.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions other than use a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and I hope you enjoyed your WDC anniversary.


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Review of The Sandwich  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)


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Review of The Sandwich

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A comical story about the mistaken sandwich. A chicken sandwich has two people fighting and eating one sandwich because each thinks it it their sandwich.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

The real story is between Bill and the black businessman, The one sandwich get closed in the laptop and two men eat the other.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I would like to see a slightly larger font to make the story easier to read.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Write more and enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of Yikes  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)


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Review of Yikes

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A simple task of moving some furniture and a misunderstanding leads to a lot of work and a disaster for the Glee Club party.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

the family individuals are not defined but I can almost see them all pitching in and getting the wrong job done. Too bad no one listened to Anna.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Please enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)



Review of Before Her Wedding

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A free verse poem written from the viewpoint of the mother of the bride. It shows the deep love the mother has for her daughter.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

This supports what the mother has seen as she sees her daughter with the man she loves. She prays for them and that their marriage will be successful.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions for improvement.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing with all of us.


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Review of Play Pretend  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)


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Review of XXXXXXXXXXXXXX

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

I am really not sure this time. It seems to me that you are expressing you are unsure if you can support your own ides. You fall back on pretending you know the answers and you are not always sure.. It sounds to me like a political party.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Free verse poetry is just ideas placed out there without the need for proper sentence preparations. So you once again have tossed out a lot of thoughts in an effort to get us thinking. Well done.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I like reading your stuff. It makes me think.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and keep us thinking.


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Review of fragrance shop  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of The Fragrance Shop

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A twelve line free form poem. To be overcome by the various scents of a shop that sells many of the intriging scents.

FLOW & RYTHMN:

Since it does not rhyme I tried reading it with different styles of voice. It is not any better when it is read aloud.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your work with us


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Review of Dead Eyes  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)




Review of Dead Eyes

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A poem about losing ones sight and gaining it again but gaining it with a cost.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Not a fixed rhyming pattern . His vision was taken from him when he was young but at age sixteen he is given vision again. However he now sees a dotted line on the necks of those soon to die. It would be terrible to know who would soon die.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

I love the concept of the story.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your poetry and thoughts.


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Review of A cruel place  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of A Cruel Place

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

This poem is like a prayer for the children of the writer.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

It is a good free verse poem and has some very emotion content.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Worlds which is contraction of world is should be world's. i think should be read loud in a soft almost whisper. A larger font would provide more emphasis for the importance of the poem's message..

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep up the good work.. Write more.


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Review of All Behind  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)


Review of All Behind

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

once you go down a road you might never travel that way again. Sounds like a poem written by Robert Frost. But it is just a similiar idea and you have carried it a different direction. Like much of your poetry I am impressed

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

I enjoyed the format and how the poem was presented/

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Since I am getting older I would have liked a larger font.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep up the good work.


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Review of Broken again  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of Broken Again

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A plaintive cry over the fact that the love has been lost from a relationship.

FLOW & RHYMING:

Five four line verses of free verse poetry. It has a good flow when it is read aloud.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

None

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your poetry.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)




Review of The Shadow of the Mountain

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

In a cabin in the mountains a man finds his wife is cheating on him. He kills both the lover and his wife but the gunshot triggers an avalanche that wipes out the cabin. He is injured and trapped. The ghosts of the people he killed stay with him until he dies.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Richard and his wife Karen have a few moments together before he shoots her and starts the avalanche. The connection between them is bonded. Good Story line

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions for improvement.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing.


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Review of February 14th  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (4.0)
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Review of Februart 14th

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

You ask a great question. I look out my own window at the white frozen landscape and I am asking the same question that you ask.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

A distinct and direct somment on the choosing of the middle of winter as a date to celebrate love.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Good thinking. Use a larger more expressive font. The thought is well presented.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

keep writing


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Review of Neo Eden  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



Review of Neo Eden

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An interesting futuristic story where young men and women are bred to provide food for the people they refer as gods The young people look forward to being welcomed into the City of Wonders.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Everything seems wonderful because the young people move to the City of Wonders when they become 16. The story is told thru the eyes of one male. eventually it becomes evident that these young people are systematically killed for food.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Use a larger font to make your work more readable.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Good story write more please.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Driving a Gravel Road

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

The story is a bit confusing. I understand that there is an underlining story about a multiple murder but there is not enough detail to connect to the date(?) that this story line seems to be about.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Again I am confused because the reason for the story is not clear. The characters are not adequately identified either. The dialogue did not help to make the characters motivation any clearer

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

that taht??? A larger font would make the story more readable.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep working and writing.


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Review of Stranger  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.5)




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Review of Stranger

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Good story and a great twist at the end. You set us up with the story on the television about the murdered girl and we had in out minds picked out the killer. We were wrong. We didn't have all the clues that come suddenly at the end.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:
Balanced plot and character which are lightly identifies. Leaving just enough unsaid to keep us guessing and normally when we guess we are in error. Well done.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Spacing and font size might improve readability.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and sharing your work. I hope you enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of The End  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)



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Review of The End

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A scene from something larger? It seems that this is just as the writer wants it. I found it a bit melodramatic You remember watching the old movie where the guy gets shot and then spends the next five minutes dying for the audience, I guess that is alright because this is exactly what this is.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Woman killed by icicle through the chest, What a cold way to die. Characters particularly Brittany are a bit overdone, I am sure this is what the writer was going for,

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Second last line it should be play's .

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Well done keep up the good writing and please enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of Decomposition  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: ASR | (4.0)



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Review of Decomposition

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An interesting concept to death by letting the body decompose. While this seems a little spooky I guess that is one wish a person might have.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep writing and sharing your poetry with all of us.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of Tea or Coffee?  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
It is interesting but I would love to see the demographics of those who responded to this poll. The factors of age and sex are just the beginning. We also have to look at ethnic background as well as country where the responder currently resides.
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Review of I Love You  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



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Review of I Love You

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

A thirteen line partial free verse poem expressing the affection one has for the other. The expressions are short and followed by a question.

FLOW & RYTHMN:

The short lines followed by the longer question gives the poem a jumpy sort of flow. The lack of a rhyming scheme does aid that. However the emotional level is strong.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Write more.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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Review of Historical Poll  
Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Historical Poll

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

While I think this is a great poll you obviously did not much input. Actually it is too small a sampling to be very effective.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

perhaps limiting the choices and having several poll might help.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Keep trying.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

At least you are thinking on creating more.


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Review by dblameck (David)
In affiliation with The Talent Pond  
Rated: E | (3.5)



Review of Chocolate or Vanilla

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

An interesting poll but one which I think was too predictable.

PLOT & CHARACTERS:

Only two flavours are listed. Perhaps with a greater variation you might have seen much different results.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

Run the poll with a variety of tastes. Also there are different tastes between the sexes.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Thank you for presenting this poll.


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Review of Words for goodbye  
Review by dblameck (David)
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Rated: E | (4.0)



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Review of Words for Goodbye

First and foremost, thank you for sharing your work . I am not an expert reviewer. I am just another writer, but I know it is the reviews that help us to perfect our craft. My opinions are just that; my opinions.

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS:

Three and a half verses of words that express the difficulty and sorrow of saying goodbye. It is well written and moving.

FLOW & RHYTHMN

The Rhyming pattern is AABB. The poem reads well when it is read aloud.

SUGGESTIONS/EDITS:

No suggestions because I am not a great poet.

FINAL THOUGHTS:

Keep writing and I hope you enjoy your WDC anniversary.


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