Genesis Class Lesson 6

(1) I stood to my feet in our huge-sized dining room and walked around the table.

REVISED
I stood in our huge dining room and circled the table.


(2) The planet on Lost in Space was round in shape and an especially unique place.

REVISED
The round planet in Lost in Space was unique.


(3) Past memories of past history fill the walls of my grandmother’s kitchen wall.

REVISED
My grandmother’s kitchen wall was covered with photographic memories.


(4) The boy roaming the street was in a confused state and headed for a terrible tragedgy.

REVISED
The confused boy was roaming the street and headed for tragedy.


Paragraph to Revise

A large number of people enjoy reading murder mysteries regularly. As a rule, these people are not themselves murderers, nor would these people really ever enjoy seeing someone commit an actual murder, nor would most of them actually enjoy trying to solve an actual murder. They probably enjoy reading murder mysteries because of this reason: they have found a way to escape from the monotonous, boring routine of dull everyday existence.

To such people the murder mystery is realistic fantasy. It is realistic because the people in the murder mystery are as a general rule believable as people. They are not just made up pasteboard figures. It is also realistic because the character who is the hero, the character who solves the murder mystery, solves it not usually by trial and error and haphazard methods but by exercising a high degree of logic and reason. It is absolutely and totally essential that people who enjoy murder mysteries have an admiration for the human faculty of logic.

But murder mysteries are also fantasies. The people who read such books of fiction play a game. It is a game in which they suspend certain human emotions. One of these human emotions that they suspend is pity. If the reader stops to feel pity and sympathy for each and every victim that is killed or if the reader stops to feel terrible horror that such a thing could happen in our world of today, that person will never enjoy reading murder mysteries. The devoted reader of murder mysteries keeps uppermost in mind at all times the goal of arriving through logic and observation at the final solution to the mystery offered in the book. It is a game with life and death. Whodunits hopefully help the reader to hide from the hideous horrors of actual life and death in the real world.

REVISED

Many enjoy reading murder mysteries to escape boredom, having no violent tendencies or any desire to witness or solve a real murder.  Murder mystery fans enjoy the logic the hero employs and the realistic character portrayal by the author.
Devoted fans of this genre enjoy the game of logic and suspend emotions of horror and pity.  Perhaps it helps them to hide from the real world horrors.  Readers who sympathize with the victims and are horrified by the violence don’t enjoy these novels.