That was a twist I didn't see coming. I thought it was more or less a description of a vacation to Sweden. Very good yarn; I think telling a complete story in 250-500 words is a real challenge and hones a writer's ability. Anybody can tell a tale in 2-3000 words. I takes a writer to do it in a tenth of that.
I love it. My dog has been gone a year and today, when I returned home, I expected her to try to run through the door past me. Many, many times I'll think, "When I get home, I'll get a cup of coffee, sit in my recliner, and hold the dog."
But I can't.
Dogs cost a fortune in maintenance but they are worth every cent.
I like it. I could anticipate and then see the roaring stampede before you go to it. I immediately understood the second part's contrast with the first and agree with you.
"With all its sham, drudgery, and broken dreams,
it is still a beautiful world."
I had expected a slightly different ending - perhaps the writer taking her home. It didn't happen that way, which is the way a lot of the time.
Abraham Lincoln said “Folks are usually about as happy as they make their minds up to be.” No matter her circumstances, I expect she could have been happier if she tried. I think that's something we all need to remember.
Nice sketch; I like it.
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