and it happens just that fast. A glimpse into a a situation that could have ended in complete disaster. Good writing and the dialogue and actions are believable. The last line is great and the family is back on track, cheers zanzigirl
This is a tender story. Your sweet, little heart just looking for love and acceptance. You are perfect just the way you are. I can only imagine the pain and uncertainty you feel. I guess that you have read Ellen's journey and the frustration that she experienced coming out, Her Father didn't accept but her Mother was behind her every step of the way, I just love her Mom. I watched a show on her life and when her mom, kd lang and Melissa gathered round her and kd lang gave her a big kiss, you could see the joy on her face and her journey became absolutely clear. This is your journey and you must be strong in your convictions. People will see that strength in you. I wish you peace, love and clarity, cheers zanzigirl
I like this concept, a little girl ghost trapped in time while the world continues on. Family, friends and toys are gone and yet she remains in her little world. I enjoyed this, cheers zanzigirl
Oh I am so glad to find a foody. I also love to cook and have experience in extreme cooking, where there is no electric, like in the woods, beach or sailing.. I was cooking for a group of young 40 volunteers that were visiting zanzibar. The little kitchen was supposed to be set up, but when I arrived there was absolutely nothing, I mean no even a fork!! and the guests were arriving the next day. That job was a huge challenge and I loved every minute.
I would buy all my vegetables and fish local .I had a scale hanging on the tree outside the little hotel and twice a week, the fisherman would come by with huge fish that I would weigh out and pay 7,000 shillings per kilo (about 2 dollars a pound) for fresh tuna.. The students loved my coconut crusted fish (even the ones that told me, defiantly that they did not like fish)
I would buy my fruit and veg every morning from people that knew to be on the beach at 8 o'clock with whatever they wanted to sell. I would buy these pumpkins and carrots dice them up and cook on my gas grill with a little butter and sugar just at the end to make them sweet and glazed.
Don't get me started on recipes hah. Anyway I look forward to reading more about your kitchen. I love the idea that you taught yourself to cook from so many different cultures and styles. How exciting and satisfying ...and delicious! I enjoyed this, cheers and bon appetit, zanzigirl
This is so sweet and heartfelt. Oh, those wonderful feelings when we fall in love. The newness and potential of this love is almost overwhelming. I know what you mean about the mind going silent, as you lose yourself in those kisses, sigh, zanzigirl
A heartfelt thanks to the community that supports you and your writing. It is a wonderful feeling to be among your peers, sharing life experiences, good and bad, I wish you all the best, cheers zanzigirl
This is great writing. A glimpse into an ugly period in the United States. Stories like this went on every day I am sure. The dialogue was believable as two young friends spend an afternoon fishing. This reminds me of that famous expression to judge a man not by the color of his skin, but by the content of his character. Toby had more bravery and character than all those guys combined. I enjoyed this. Bravo zanzigirl
This is a heartwarming poem. Sharing your journey with your true love is what it is all about. A feeling of security,love and anticipation for the future comes through in this poem. I like the idea of seeing this as a further adventure, while others see it as the end. Bless you both, zanzigirl
Well, the first step is taken where she realizes what the problem is. The next step is how to get motivated. It is so easy to waste days in front of the tv feeling sorry for the life we find ourselves in. When I feel like this I open the door and go for a walk. I think positive thoughts and give thanks for all the blessings in my life. She must begin to think positive and find something real to focus on. You never know what tomorrow will bring, zanzigirl
You have given us a glimpse into your life. I would use those little angels to maybe reconnect with your daughter. Wrap one up, write a little poem and send to her. Maybe you both could remember happier times and make things better. A little angel might just do that. I wish you peace,love and clarity, zanzigirl
A poem of self awareness and worth. So many people just get by or adapt to a life that is not fulfilling because of reasons long forgotten. It is a great idea to soul search and realize what it is that brings you genuine joy. Just by thinking on that passion, you will find that people and circumstances will be drawn to you to make this a reality, like magic, nice piece, zanzigirl
This is a powerful piece. This is your journey and you are perfect, just the way you are. I can only imagine the frustration and confusion as a young man, trying to adapt to a life that did not suit you. I wish you peace,love and clarity, zanzigirl
A scary tale, but I imagine that people that suffer from depression,bi polar or schizophrenia suffer something similar to this. Not so much the physical pain, but the confusion and suffering these diseases bring about. This is good writing, creating a very vivid image of someone in extreme mental anguish. cheers zanzigirl
This is really touching. You have given us a glimpse into a loving and safe home with a daughter that you are so proud of. A few words and yet a wonderful, warm image emerges. I like this, zanzigirl. ps. I think this site is perfect for young girls to express themselves and get really good at an honorable hobby. (unlike the useless video games) Those years of teen age exploration and independence would make a wonderful gift printed and bound for her one day.. Cheers to you and your daughter
Okay this is a good little story, but you have to break it up with paragraphs and punctuation. There are also a few spelling mistakes. I would re read this and put in a few periods a paragraphs. This helps the story to gain momentum and the reader to adjust. I think this could be a great piece, cheers zanzigirl
A wonderful glimpse into a young girl's life and her journey. Her search for fresh clean water is touching. She is a strong girl and is trying to find joy in the life that she is in. I just want to give her a hug. Great writing and you have created a wonderful image of this life with it's trials and dreams, cheers zanzigirl
Sounds like the seven year itch. A believable dialogue between husband and wife, I like the way it starts out all fuzzy and warm then slowly crumbles as nerves and patience wear thin, ha ha maybe separate vacations for something to do? And I'll bet this is not the first time this conversation has taken place. Cheers zanzigirl
Ahhh catch and release. A unique story giving us a glimpse into the world of a fish.Your word choice is great and the story flows well. I like the image of the fishes darting around looking for the source of this smell. Great writing, I enjoyed this, cheers zanzigirl
This is a clever aabb poem and it reminds me of autumn in Vermont. I love the line, fish-less hooks with dreams as bait. Every fall my friends and I drive around and collect the apples from the trees I scouted in the summer. We go back to her big old wooden porch and spend the day making apple juice and cider and her antique apple press. Thanks for reminding me of a wonderful memory, cheers zanzigirl
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