That was beautiful!!! I feel like a lot of people will love this poem as I did. You have a beautiful way of writing this. I think that as a writer you can relate to how others feel. You are a good writer from what I have read so far.
You did an amazing job on writing this. I could honestly feel the pain while I read the words. In my opinion you put enough details in this poem in which made it beautiful. I think that is piece of writing is one of those writings that allow your readers to think of someone in their own mind. I say that because while I was reading this I automatically thought of someone I have lost. The person is not dead but the pain I feel is as deep as one would feel in death. You did an amazing job in writing this and putting what a lot of us feel into words
Nice poem! Great job on the details. I enjoyed reading your work and I would love to see how his friends romance went with the girl with the red sweater. I honestly am curious about what happened to make them divorce. Overall I think you did a great job on writing and I hope you continue to write!
I loved your poem!! This sounds like something that could tell a story about Halloween. I feel a mysterious story or another poem that could go along with your writing. I didn't see anything that you would need to correct. Overall I enjoyed reading your work and I hope you do well in the contest!
Great job on your poem!! I love reading poetry and yours was amazing. I enjoyed reading this! I kinda wish that it was longer so I could read more about the characters mind. I feel like you work enough to make people curious about the mysterious man. I hope you continue you write stories or poems. I think you are talented at writing just by reading this short poem.
This was beautifully written. I am curious. What was your inspiration on writing this? I enjoyed reading your work and I am able to connected with this piece of writing on an emotional level. I love the way you wrote this. I find this style of writing amazing. This piece is short but the right length. You are able to touch the hearts of your reader through your writing and that is something to be proud of.
i like the way you wrote the story. i think that it would be better if you talked about how they meet and fell in love. i feel like the Gaia is his version of the garden of eden. She is the sun in his world. I love it. its very good but i think it could use a little more emotion from him about his mate
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