I truly enjoyed this piece on every read through. I especially like the form.
I know this isn't a helpful review but it serves to help me remember it and its always nice to know you've touched someone..
Your spelling and grammar are atrocious. The sentences lack structure and the whole story is a single paragraph. I didn't want to rate it on a scale of 1 to 5 because I can't adequately judge it in its current form, but I was forced to.
On the upside, the story itself is heartfelt, the imagery was lovely and I like how you used the Greek gods.
Please take some time and properly format this story, work out your grammar and spelling mistakes, normally I would name then but there are too many.
I like a lot of the words you were using go nicely together, and you manage to write without depending on rhyming, which is cool.
I don't like how the poetry doesn't flow too well line to line. I like the overall structure but again, the words don't flow, which makes it a struggle to read sometimes.
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