I think this could be the beginning of a very good fiction, and I'm not just saying that because I love Harry Potter and because I love H/Hr fanfictions (even though Jr made it very VERY clear their not gonna end up together, but I think there's still hope lol).
I like the whole thing where it's in Harry's and Hermione's POV, that's makes the story extra interesting but the only thing is that you said that Harry's eyes were hazel (?) when they are supposed to be green. But that's minor.
I would really like to see the rest of this story, that would be great.
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