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Review of Fairy Tale  Open in new Window.
Review by Justine Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.5)
It's funny, well built, so that the words fit, though I thin there has to be mention that the objects need to be eatable, cos I chose a wooden bowl and chopsticks and the granny couldn't have eaten that...
All in All I find this very amusing and appealing, also the red riding hood reference is just gross :D
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Review by Justine Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (3.5)
Although it's only a prompt, I don't like the simplicity. I don't feel that it's so obvious that if you have had a big breakfast you are happy. On the other hand that is just an exapmle quiz and I undersrtand it was made just to show the way the new item type works.
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Review by Justine Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
I am in absolute awe...
Robyn's mind is fascinating enough to provide everyone with their share of puzzlement...
And her memories of WTC Accident are I think one of the bet wirtten I've read. Not coming from US, but still caring about it, I fing here an appropriate point of view on it all.
GP given. All I have ATM.
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Review of Cry of the Wolf  Open in new Window.
Review by Justine Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (5.0)
So far so good.
Your vocabulary use is outstanding. The characters, especially the magical ones, are well designed, and realistic (if you can say that about something unreal ^^'). I admire the way you take your time to reveal the details of the plot and the pace you set and keep in the story. There might be too little desprition, but I don'tmiss it at all and it's a good feature to focus more on the action and character development.
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Review of The Bus Ride  Open in new Window.
Review by Justine Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.0)
I like your language ^_^ You definitely know how to use it when writing stories :) Also there's a good drift in this story towards creating an atmosphere (bus ride, lo of adjectives). You prooved an exceptional writer when creating Alianna (:( what about continuation?) and this piece of work lved up to the expectations.

Although I would prefer something lengthier and the ending compared to the beggining is too short. The character of Amanda s v.interesting :) I'd like to know some of her thoughts!
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Review by Justine Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
I like the story. I felt interested in it from the very beginning and although I had to stop for a while to do something else I was hugely distracted by it.
Allianna is a good main character surrounded by many interesting personalities, and the story so far prooves to be well made. I liked the scene between her and Alex, the one which ended up in sleeping with eachother, it seemed very convincing and romantic at the same time.
It is a very good romance, and it keeps the mind occupied but you have to work on your language skills. I don't know if english is your first language but it needs work all the same.

Neither the less, a very good story, I enjoyed reading it, and I certainly encourage you to keep up the good work and write more, which I'm looking forward too eagerly.
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