I enjoyed Dark Apparition, its fun subject matter.
Its opening stanza is strong and sets the tone.
The language is very visual and does a good job conjuring images in my mind.
My only suggestions for this piece are to maintain a single rhyme scheme (as it switches towards the end) and to work out the syllable count on some of the lines as the cadence gets thrown off quite a bit from line to line.
Summary: Nice job! Thanks for sharing!
I like the intent of the piece, I get what the author is trying to do here. My only suggestion would be to clear up and standardize the rhyme scheme - it seems to falter a few times.
II understand not all poetry rhymes, but it seems as if there is supposed to be a rhyme scheme - so I would improve by making it clear and consistent.
Other than that, I do appreciate the content and it is adapted well. Very Good!
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