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Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: ASR | (4.0)
Hi! Hope you are doing fine!

*Notev* Title:

I found your item on wdc and was intrigued by the title. It made me wonder what the story was about. Great choice!

*Notev* Body/Narrative:
I really enjoyed the story, and the choices it gives for the reader to choose. I chose the friends, not enemies, I also chose to go inside of house and overreacting.

It was fun to read a d even though I know is a mystery, sometimes it made me smile.

Great job! Keep on creating items like this one for the whole community to enjoy!

All the best
Winnie
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Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi Nasser!
Loved your poem. As you read it out loud you can feel the musicality on every stanza, even though it changes from time to time. As you start reading you get the idea this is a lovely and sweet poem, but as you keep on reading it changes your perseption completely. Love the ending. A great and unexpected twist. Never thought it was her father. The little girl really deserved to die.
Great choice of words and rhyme.
Keep up the good work. It takes courage and a lot of reasoning to be a poet!!! Proud of you!!

Write on!!!

Winnie
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Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 18+ | (5.0)
Hi! Hope you are doing great!! *Bigsmile*

This is a great story! I enjoyed every part of it, with the exception of all the details of the cows dying, (thing I know, and why I chose to be a pesquiterian, and I don't eat meat or chicken). *Wink* I totally understand, no worries!! I know it's a very important part of your story, and it worked perfectly and help create the mood, and the tension. It was great! Perfect title!

Great ending! I thought he was going to slaughter his entire family when they sat to enjoy diner!! I was waiting for that!!! Waiting for them to be all siting down, and he gets up and BANG!! LOL! The same way he does with cows!!

Blessings always and keep on creating such amazing stories!
They are a pleasure to read!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*

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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Good poem, with a good rhyme. Easy to understand. Very creative to write a critique like into a poem. Good job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices, they make you wonder, what you created using such a commented novel as a prompt.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
No suggestions. I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review of List of Contests  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Great job!!! It's a great list, because even though we have the list on our right, you managed to organize it: daily, weekly, etc. Its also a great way of sharing that list with others to benefit from those contest. I'm going to take a look at a few of contests too. Thanks for sharing.!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Short and to the point! Good choices!!!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I didn't found typos! A good suggestion would be to keep the list growing, hehe, so we can benefit from it too. Thanks for sharing!*Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review of Thanks God!  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Beautiful poem dedicated to the one and only. Full of faith and also gratitude for the things you know you couldn't have if it wasn't for his mercy and his glory. Beautiful!! Love the ending!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices for both of them. Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
Great job! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: E | (5.0)
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(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Beautiful!! I reviewed your highlighted items on your port and this is My favorite so far!! LOVED every single line!!! I kept reading and reading, and picturing everything in my mind. Beautiful!! The ending was WOW! Perfect!! Love it!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Great choices for both of them! Work perfectly with what you wrote!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None suggestions, just to keep writing this way! Beautiful and full of emotions, and makes the reader want to read more and more. Great job!!I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Great poem! Loved it!! I imagined Santa on the bed! hehe! Great job!! Loved the ending! What more can a poem want for Christmas? hehe Blessings and great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices for both of them! They relate to the story and makes you wonder. Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None, just keep writing such wonderful and full of magic poems. I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
This is a great poem! Loved the way you described every line, painting us the picture. My favorite lines were those about the jester, letting us know about his feelings and pain, if I can use that word. Good ending! Congratulations on winning the contest!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
Good choices for both of them. Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
No suggestions at all, you told us the story in a beautiful poem! Great job! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review of Crosshairs  Open in new Window.
Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overall:
That was so sad! Well described and vivid, but the ending was so sad for me! You are good on creating those twists at the end. Good job! And ... Poor deer!

Title/Description
Good title, but the same advice as always for the description.

Spelling/Suggestions
No more suggestions. Good job! No spelling errors!  *Thumbsup*


Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*


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Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Overall:
A funny little story! Good entry for the contest! Good job! Great ending! Hehehe

Title/Description
Good choice for title, but for the description try to capture the attention of the reader by adding another description.

Spelling/Suggestions
No spelling errors!  *Thumbsup*


Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Overall:
What a challenge! No repeat! You managed to work with the promp and came out with a good story! Well done!

Title/Description
Good choices, simple and to the point.

Spelling/Suggestions
Great! No suggestions. No spelling errors!  *Thumbsup*


Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*


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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
It was like reading a story, it kept me going, fun to read. Beautiful message, easy to understand and you used the right words. Love the ending. It has a good flow! Great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description
The title is good but the description needs a little spice. What you added can be used as an author's note at the end of the poem. Good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*
No more suggestions!

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing and having fun while doing it!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Easy to read and understand. I didn't know about those stories, but your insights about it are so great that you makes us readers want to read them. You explain your points of view very well, it was like reading a blog, if you don't blog, you should. Good job with the review.

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices, don't need too much.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I like it as it is! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing! When we read, is like we are listening to you. You explain the things very well. Good job!

Feel free to visit my port and read/rate/review/comment! I'll do the same for you! *Wink*
Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Awww Pinochio!! I love that story!! Your poem is lovely, short, but easy to understand and fun to read. Great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices for both of them! Even though the description is simple, it captures our attention.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
To make it longer!!! I would love to read a longer poem writen inspired on Pinochio!! Lovely! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing!

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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
This one felt like written from the heart too. Great job! I can feel the pain and sorrow you talk about on the description. My favorite line is: My heart is full of love the type instilled from above WOW!! Loved that line!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices for both of them. This time for us to understand you needed that description. Good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I like it as it is!
I think I found a typo, but remember, I'm Spanish speaker, so maybe I'm wrong. I think that almost at the end, you missed an o on the word too! Because you said "me too" that word needs another o. *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing from the heart, it's your weapon. Have a great night!

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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
LOVELY!!! I'm a fan of your little poems! Great job! Really amazing, because we can picture every line, so vivid. Well done!! *Laugh* I could see the little one covered in mud.

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices, even though the description is simple, its a good one.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
No one yet! Great job! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
I'm making you a fan, because I loved your poems! Keep writing them!

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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Review by Winnie Author IconMail Icon
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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Awww The ending is beautiful!! Loved it!! It makes you wonder, maybe a fairy is stealing the fruits, hehe, very original, and lovely! Great job!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Again great choices for both of them! Good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
You ignited in me the love for this little poems, dedicated to children! GREAT!! Maybe is that I've never read one that captured my attention! Good job!

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Rated: E | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
I LOVED the poem! SO FUN to read!! LOVED the rhyme! I'm not a fan of poems written for children, but this one captured my attention in every way. It's lovely! I could see everything like in a movie! GREAT JOB!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Great use of both tittle and description, they both capture the attention of the reader, and make you wonder! Great job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I like it as it is! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Great job! Keep on creating such beautiful poems for kids, they are very fun and imaginative!!

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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: 13+ | (4.5)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
My favorite so far! Very original! Loved the way you included that verse at the end of each part, and it gave a lot of power and meaning to the writing. Love the ending!! POWERFULL, my favorite line from it all! Great job!! Loved it!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good title, but again, you can use the description part to capture the eye of the reader, ti deseves it!! good job!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
To create more items like this one. *Wink*
I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:


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Take care and keep on writing! *Bigsmile*
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Rated: ASR | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
Loved it!! hehe, I don't know why the rating is so low. Maybe because they didin't understood it. Loved the ending! My favorite part of it all!! I loved that contest!! Very difficult to create an entry with such a limited word count. Great job!!

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Good choices! Well done!

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
One suggestion would be to add an author's note with the given prompt, so we can relate a little more, and see how creative you were. I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep on writing stories, poems, haikus, with those types of endings, in this case a twisted one, loved it, it gave meaning to the whole piece. Without that ending the piece would not work at all. Good job!

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Review of A bud in bloom...  Open in new Window.
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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Hi! *Smile* Hope you are doing fine!
(Spanish Speaker)

*Notev* Overall: *Reading*
The combination is great, hehe *Laugh* Love the ending!! Even though haikus are supposed to be about nature themes, we can also write other types of haikus, and this one alone would say nothing but with the poem, it fits perfectly. Again great combination. Fun and good rhyme too.

*Notev* Tittle/Description:
Again, simple but to the point. In this case its good to use a simple description like yours, because the item is a short one, and if you use another line or phrase from the poem, instead of capturing the attention of the reader, you would be giving away the ending, so good job.

*Notev* Suggestions: *Pencil*
None! I didn't found typos! *Thumbsup*

*Notev* Notes:
Keep creating such funny items in your port. *Smile*

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Rated: ASR | (4.5)
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Hi! Hope you are doing fine! *Smile*

*Note* Overall
WOW! LOVED your essay. Do you blog? I think you can do that, you are great in capturing the attention of the reader. Ths are the kind of things that I like to read on blogs, for example. It's an awesome thing to dream like you do, words. WOW! My dreams and nightmares, are movie like, but seen from the point of view of the character (if we can call it that), protagonist, hehe in that moment, that most of the time is me. I really coudn't imagine my dreams without those pictures, but I understand you perfectly. I can relate to you about the reading, but I have to confess that I can read everything except newspapers and instructions. OMG, I don't know why, but I can't read instructions, guides, or something like that. I prefer to take 1 hr assembling a desk, than taking the time to read the instructions, NO WAY! I don't know why!!!! hehehe strange! But its a great essay, and I enjoyed every moment of it. Keep on writing!

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*Note* Title/Description
Good choices, they work, simple but to the point!


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*Note* Spelling
None that I could notice! Great job!

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*Note* Suggestions
To keep on writing, and try to blog if you have never done that before, I know it has helped me a lot, because no one tells me to shut up, hehehe I LOVE to talk,and in my blog I can talk and write ALL I want about my opinions, emotions, and anything I want! If you do, let me know!

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Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Rated: ASR | (3.0)
CONGRATULATIONS! You are a NEW YELLOW!!!
Hi! Hope you are doing fine! *Smile*

*Note* Overall
This is a strong poem fill of emotions. I can relate to it, because I'm an animal lover. I can feel the pain and what you are trying to portray. The problem with the poem is that the fonts and spaces/or no spaces at all, take away the emotions and the message you are portraying. They capture the attention of the reader and makes us wonder why? That's what keeping the item from receiving a higher rating. Just a little note, so you know. Besides that is a good poem full of beautiful images.

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*Note* Title/Description
Again good title, but the description can be add as an authors note, use one line from the poem to capture the attention of the reader, for example the one of the snow-white wings.

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*Note* Spelling
Good job, besides the spaces you left etc.

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*Note* Suggestions
My suggestion would be to edit those parts where you changed the font and the spaces, so we don't stop and keep on feeling the emotions you are trying to portray. Remember, not everyone is an animal lover, and for the reader understand what you are feeling and what the message is, you can't attract them with those kind of things. Just a suggestion to improve ratings.

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Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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Rated: E | (4.0)
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*Note* Overall
I liked this poem, and all the emotions it portrays. Easy to understand and it kept me reading. Liked the way you repeated the last lines. Good job!

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*Note* Title/Description
Again the title works, but the description is a little weak, because like I suggested before, it can help you capture the attention of the reader. What you used can be added as an author's note, and you don't really need it. *Wink*

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*Note* Spelling
Great job with the spelling! *Thumbsup*

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*Note* Suggestions
The only suggestion that I have is to also repeat at the ending the line that you kept repeating. It will give more power to the ending. The reader is used to read those lines, and at the ending we don't see them. How come? They would fit perfectly as an ending! Just a little suggestion. You did a good job!!

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Keep on writing!
Take care!
Winnie *Smile*
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