This poem is very interesting. The tale of how this old man brings a different kind of life into the world, even though his own is fading, is touching. The thought of leaving something behind when we go is a nice thought, and something that we all strive for.
I like how the poem flows. The vocabulary and placing of the words is very effective and interesting. It was a simple poem, but it didn't need to be complicated.
I would suggest adding some punctuation to aid in reading the poem. Pauses can be symbolized as commas, full stops or longer pauses are symbolized as periods, and if a reader is supposed to just continue reading on, nothing neads to be used. This might help your flow even more!
Very nice work!
Sincerely,
Whyette
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