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This piece, though short, is very well written. I'll take it line by line so that you can see what I liked about it:
Line 1, 2 : "It’s like shivering in a cold winter night, crawling in a creepy forest and crying in darkness." Beautiful imagery here. The alliteration is masterful. Line 4 : Repetition of "I can't" It does a lot to lend to the sense of desperation your character experiences. Line 7, 8 : "It's me." I would suggest you take that phrase and change it to 'It's only me.'. Put it in its own line for a bigger punch.
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