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Review of Visions  Open in new Window.
Review by mikemahoney Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hello Desi,

I enjoyed reading your passage. I am partial to philosophy and the afterlife. A particularly liked your description here;

the boy has a friend, demon maybe? Telling him something, figure is female, white with black hair shaved on the right side & shoulder length on the left side.

I didn't notice any typing errors.

I would have liked the story to be a little longer.
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Review of The Sound  Open in new Window.
Review by mikemahoney Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Hi Tom Buck,

I enjoyed your story. It was well written. The title hooked me in and after reading the first couple of paragraphs I found myself wanting to read more.

The whole story moved at a fast pace. There were so many things happening at the same time that it kept the story interesting and made me question where this ride was going.

I do have a criticism. I thought there were some sections that had too much "babble", things that didn't pertain directly to the story. That's just my personal opinion.

Overall I thought it was a great idea for a story. It was well written and I will definitely be reading more of your material.

Mike
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