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Review of The Darkness  Open in new Window.
Review by Walt J. Rimmer Author IconMail Icon
Rated: 13+ | (4.0)
Very interesting. I like the constant theme of darkness and its change in meaning as the story progresses. While the theme was darkness, I think that you should have found a different word to use at times. It was just that sometimes it seemed like "dark" and words including it got rather repetative. Besides that, I do find it to be a rather well done little story. As the reader, slowly discovering what has happened, yet leaving it open to wonder what all has gone on to lead to this moment, was a real enjoyment. Thank you for the story and don't stop writing.
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Review of My harbour  Open in new Window.
Review by Walt J. Rimmer Author IconMail Icon
Rated: E | (4.5)
I don't know if it's because I am a learning writer myself or because of the subject of this work, but it really struck me as amazing. The idea of being told to always be yourself, do what you think, but only in theory when you're young is a common problem that stiffles most. And then later being told to speak up, say everything all the time (in a manner), at least, in my life, was pushed on me. The image I got of the person in the work conjured up memories of my own life, where as a child I was told to speak my mind as a principle, but told to keep quiet in practice. Then when I grew older, I was used to not speaking and was told that I had to find my voice. It really spoke to me. And it was very well done, regardless. Technically, the semi-constant rhyme pattern was brilliant. Keeping a pace but with a little break right in the middle. It helped to keep a good pace without letting you get lost in the pace rather than the words. I do not know how much you have written in your past (I haven't even had a chance yet to look at your portfolio on here) but I do hope that you continue to.
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